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Korean War

I have been editing this article for a few days. I ran down through the article and fixed any grammer mistakes I could find. I would appreciate any suggestions on what to do and how I can really improve it further. Thanks a lot. Mr. Killigan 06:17, 12 July 2007 (UTC)

Kirill Lokshin

There are a number of areas to work on, at this point; keep in mind, though, that this is a very high-profile article, so you should be careful to move slowly and carefully to avoid getting entangled in any editorial conflicts here.

• The article is, in my opinion, simply too long; we're looking at 72K (~12,000 words) of prose. The "Legacy" section, in particular, is ripe for splitting out into a separate Legacy of the Korean War article, with a much shorter summary left in the main one.
• "Korean War (1950 – 1953)" should really be something like "Course of the war"; you probably don't want to repeat the article title as a section heading.
• The citations need cleanup; at a minimum, all of the embedded external links should be converted to footnotes. There are also a number of "citation needed" tags floating around. Beyond that, more thorough citation would be appropriate throughout the article; see WP:MILHIST#CITE for some guidelines.
• The "Depictions" section should be turned into prose, rather than a laundry list of films; see also WP:MILHIST#POP.
• The "Names" section, as it's presently constituted, would work much better as a narrow sidebar; it's of some interest, but I doubt there's enough material to sustain a separate section.
• The "See also" section should be eliminated. If something isn't worth linking from the text, it's generally not worth linking at all.
• The rump "Bibliography" section should be removed as well.
• The "External links" section could use trimming.

Hope that helps! Kirill 04:08, 13 July 2007 (UTC)cool

Thank you very much for offering your opinion! Mr. Killigan 00:57, 14 July 2007 (UTC)