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:*Right. I'd say that although King Crimson were not the first to use the mellotron, they certainly were regarded as pioneers in its use. Also, the reference states that King Crimson "have influenced hundreds of bands in the Avant-garde, Progressive and Heavy Metal area, always being ahead of their time" - that should answer your question.--'''[[User:HisSpaceResearch|h i s]]''' <sup>''[[User talk:HisSpaceResearch|s p a c e]]''</sup> <sub>'''[[Special:Contributions/HisSpaceResearch|r e s e a r c h]]'''</sub> 15:35, 12 September 2007 (UTC) |
:*Right. I'd say that although King Crimson were not the first to use the mellotron, they certainly were regarded as pioneers in its use. Also, the reference states that King Crimson "have influenced hundreds of bands in the Avant-garde, Progressive and Heavy Metal area, always being ahead of their time" - that should answer your question.--'''[[User:HisSpaceResearch|h i s]]''' <sup>''[[User talk:HisSpaceResearch|s p a c e]]''</sup> <sub>'''[[Special:Contributions/HisSpaceResearch|r e s e a r c h]]'''</sub> 15:35, 12 September 2007 (UTC) |
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*'''Support'''. Thorough and engaging article. I made some edits to make myself happy. --[[User:Maclean25|maclean]] 19:53, 25 September 2007 (UTC) |
*'''Support'''. Thorough and engaging article. I made some edits to make myself happy. --[[User:Maclean25|maclean]] 19:53, 25 September 2007 (UTC) |
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*Needs a copy-edit. Here are ''random samples'' of why someone else needs to come on board to sift through it. |
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**Remove "also" from the second sentence. |
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**"Although ... although". |
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**"mid 1970s"—hyphen |
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**37 seconds is over the normal limit for a fair-use clip. Remove "It is believed that" from the infopage. Who believes? But the accompanying main text on these clips is good. 33 seconds might ''just'' be OK, but if it fades at the end of the clip (it probably should), take the timing only up the the start of the fade. |
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**England: little-known country that needs a link. |
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**Logical punctuation not consistently applied—Gibson." |
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**Errant space after one em dash. [[User:Tony1|<font color="black">'''Tony'''</font >]] [[User_talk:Tony1|<font color="darkgreen">(talk)</font >]] 02:31, 30 September 2007 (UTC) |
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Revision as of 02:31, 30 September 2007
Nom restarted (Old nom) Raul654 02:18, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
- Comment. Gave the first paragraph of the lead a small copyedit. Several questions (I'll add more as I come across them):
- What genre/type of contemporary musical artists have King Crimson influenced? It wasn't obvious from the reference given.
- "In the late 1960s, the band were influential in popularising a previously unexplored mellotron rock style". Is this rock music using mellotrons (The Beatles used a mellotron in "Strawberry Fields Forever") or a subgenre? It's not clear.
- Although you might be discouraged by some of the feedback here, the amount of work you've put in has greatly improved the article; keep it up. CloudNine 21:42, 9 September 2007 (UTC)
- Right. I'd say that although King Crimson were not the first to use the mellotron, they certainly were regarded as pioneers in its use. Also, the reference states that King Crimson "have influenced hundreds of bands in the Avant-garde, Progressive and Heavy Metal area, always being ahead of their time" - that should answer your question.--h i s s p a c e r e s e a r c h 15:35, 12 September 2007 (UTC)
- Support. Thorough and engaging article. I made some edits to make myself happy. --maclean 19:53, 25 September 2007 (UTC)
- Needs a copy-edit. Here are random samples of why someone else needs to come on board to sift through it.
- Remove "also" from the second sentence.
- "Although ... although".
- "mid 1970s"—hyphen
- 37 seconds is over the normal limit for a fair-use clip. Remove "It is believed that" from the infopage. Who believes? But the accompanying main text on these clips is good. 33 seconds might just be OK, but if it fades at the end of the clip (it probably should), take the timing only up the the start of the fade.
- England: little-known country that needs a link.
- Logical punctuation not consistently applied—Gibson."
- Errant space after one em dash. Tony (talk) 02:31, 30 September 2007 (UTC)