User talk:Nautas99/groupsandbox

Peer Review By: Taylor Stokes

User:Nautas99/groupsandbox - Mammalogists Group Sandbox

Neutral content, reliable sources, clear structure:

Is this draft well organized? Can you follow it easily? I think it would be an easier read if the sandbox was organized by having week 5 and week 6 content for each group separated instead of week 6 then week 5 for one person followed by the next person that has week 6 followed by week 5. I think it would flow more to have week 6 followed by week 6 of the next person and then have week 5 at the bottom after the week 6 content so it flows better. Otherwise, content wise, it was easy to follow!

What pages will be edited? Pages that will be edited are Perissodactyla, Odd-toed ungulates, limbs, skull and teeth, skeletal system of the horse, camelidae, ungulate, chinchilla, and deer. But, limbs, skull and teeth, chinchilla, and deer are not cited or linked to any pages.

Who will do the editing/adding of what topics/ pages? Editing/adding of skeletal system of the horse, camelidae, ungulate is done by Mckenzie. The chinchilla and deer is done by Shelby. Brooke is doing Perissodactyla ,Odd-toed ungulates, limbs, and skull and teeth.

Does there seem to be an even distribution of contribution form all team members? I think that Shelby has put a lot of time and work into hers due to the amount of content written. McKenzie and Brooke also have good content and they have ideas jotted down of where they would like to continue with their topics but they haven't written or contributed as much content as Shelby, but this doesn't necessarily mean they haven't put the time and work in. Brooke mentioned it is difficult finding some background research for some of her topics so maybe it is just taking her a little longer to compile information needed. And McKenzie has a good layout written in her "Game Plan" of where to go content wise. So even though some people in the group don't have as much information yet, it is not concerning due to the topics listed in the "Game Plan".

What sorts of contributions with regard to images are planned? Horse hoof picture is shown in Brooke's section, no picture(s) shown or mentioned in McKenzie's section, and Shelby's section doesn't have any mention of pictures or pictures shown yet either.

Do you see where this content might fit from the information provided? Content might fit from the information provided by adding a buckskin image and bovine tuberculosis image to the "economic significance" section. Maybe add an image of the camelidae and what their feet look like since they are not "hooves" and add a picture of hooves or link too it so it is clear of what the difference is between the two topics picture wise to the "Foot Pads" section. Lastly, in the "Skeletal system of the horse" I would add a picture of horse limbs since this appears to be one of the future focuses.

Integration: Does anything link up with something you or your team is working on? How can you help each other? Unfortunately nothing links to what me or my team is working on.

As you review, copy edit (in the talk page by editing a copy of their content) the material and make spelling, grammar, and other suggestions. Edits made below this section! Taylorstokes21 (talk) 01:06, 9 April 2021 (UTC)Taylor Stokes

Also these edits have 'crossed out' words in my individual sandbox!

Brooke:

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After getting feedback took a look at a higher taxonomic order, Perissodactyla, instead of just looking at horse skeletal systems.

Focus on hooves and limbs of horses and other one toes ungulates instead of the entire skeletal system or body of one species under the anatomy section of Odd-toed ungulates there are not a lot of sources and the information is not properly cited so I am going to work on the Limbs section and the Skull and teeth section first Note** I am having a really hard time finding sources for the information that isn't cited (Limbs, skull and teeth and Gut section) It isn't directly word for word plagiarized, so ill have to keep digging and see if I can find something similar, if not ill just have to delete the sections and begin to rewrite them because they are no good without citations. Sources for Limb information: Polly, Paul & Hall, Brian. (2007). Limbs in Mammalian Evolution. Fins into Limbs: Evolution, Development and Transformation. 245-268.

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After getting receiving feedback the higher taxonomic order was examined where the Perissodactyla was of particular interest, rather than just looking at the skeletal system of the horse.

Focus on hooves and limbs of horses and other one-toed ungulates instead of the entire skeletal system or body of one species. Under the anatomy section of Odd-toed ungulates, there are not a lot of sources and the information is not properly cited so I am going to work on the Limbs (add link) section and the Skull and teeth (add link) section first. Note** I am having a really hard time finding sources for the information that isn't cited (Limbs, skull and teeth and Gut section) It isn't directly word for word plagiarized, so ill have to keep digging and see if I can find something similar, if not ill just have to delete the sections and begin to rewrite them because they are no good without citations. Sources for Limb information: Polly, Paul & Hall, Brian. (2007). Limbs in Mammalian Evolution. Fins into Limbs: Evolution, Development and Transformation. 245-268.

McKenzie:

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Characteristics: "Camelids do not have hooves; rather, they have two-toed feet with toenails and soft foot pads (Tylopoda is Greek for "padded foot"). Most of the weight of the animal rests on these tough, leathery sole pads. The South American camelids, adapted to steep and rocky terrain, can move the pads on their toes to maintain grip. The surface area of Camels foot pads will can increase with increasing velocity in order to reduce pressure on the feet Many fossil camelids were unguligrade and probably hooved, in contrast to all living species.

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Characteristics: "Camelids (add link) do not have hooves; rather, they have two-toed feet with toenails (Add picture and or link) and soft foot pads (Add picture and or link) (Tylopoda is Greek for "padded foot"). Most of the weight of the animal rests on these tough, leathery sole pads. The South American camelids have adapted to the steep and rocky terrain by moving the pads on their toes to maintain grip. The surface area of camel foot pads will can increase with increasing velocity in order to reduce the pressure on the feet Many fossil camelids (add link here) were unguligrade and probably hooved (add link), in contrast to all living species.

Shelby:

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Economic Significance

Deer have long had economic significance to humans. Deer meat, known as venison, is highly nutritious. Due to the inherently wild nature and diet of deer, venison is most often obtained through deer hunting. In the United States, it is produced in small amounts compared to beef but still represents a significant trade. Conservation laws prevent the sale of wild game meat, although it may be donated. By 2012, some 25,000 tons of red deer were raised on farms in North America. The major deer-producing countries are New Zealand, the market leader, with Ireland, Great Britain and Germany. The trade earns over $100 million annually for these countries.

The skins make a peculiarly strong, soft leather, known as buckskin. There is nothing special about skins with the fur on since the hair is brittle and soon falls off. The hoofs and horns are used for ornamental purposes, especially the antlers of the roe deer, which are utilized for making umbrella handles, and for similar purposes; elk horn is often employed in making knife handles. In China, a medicine is made from stag horn, and the antlers of certain species are eaten when "in the velvet". Among the Inuit, the traditional ulu women's knife was made with an antler, horn, or ivory handle.

Deer have long been bred in captivity as ornaments for parks, but only in the case of reindeer has thorough domestication succeeded. The Sami of Scandinavia and the Kola Peninsula of Russia and other nomadic peoples of northern Asia use reindeer for food, clothing, and transport. Deer bred for hunting are selected based on the size of the antlers. In North America, the reindeer, known there as caribou, is not domesticated or herded, but it is important as a quarry animal to the Caribou Inuit.

Automobile collisions with deer can impose a significant cost on the economy. In the U.S., about 1.5 million deer-vehicle collisions occur each year, according to the National Highway Traffic Safety Administration. Those accidents cause about 150 human deaths and $1.1 billion in property damage annually. In Scotland, several roads including the A82, the A87 and the A835 have had significant enough problems with deer vehicle collisions (DVCs) that sets of vehicle activated automatic warning signs have been installed along these roads.

In some areas of the UK, deer (especially fallow deer due to their gregarious behaviour), have been implicated as a possible reservoir for transmission of bovine tuberculosis, a disease which in the UK in 2005 cost £90 million in attempts to eradicate. In New Zealand, deer are thought to be important as vectors picking up M. bovis in areas where brushtail possums Trichosurus vulpecula are infected, and transferring it to previously uninfected possums when their carcasses are scavenged elsewhere. The white-tailed deer Odocoileus virginianus has been confirmed as the sole maintenance host in the Michigan outbreak of bovine tuberculosis which remains a significant barrier to the US nationwide eradication of the disease in livestock. In 2008, 733,998 licensed deer hunters killed approximately 489,922 white-tailed deer to procure venison, control the deer population, and minimize the spread of disease. These hunters purchased more than 1.5 million deer harvest tags. The economic value of deer hunting to Michigan's economy is substantial. For example, in 2006, hunters spent US$507 million hunting white-tailed deer in Michigan.

Deer hunting is a popular activity in the U.S. that provides the hunter's family with high quality meat and generates revenue for states and the federal government from the sales of licenses, permits and tags. The 2006 survey by the U.S. Fish and Wildlife Service estimates that license sales generate approximately $700 million annually. This revenue generally goes to support conservation efforts in the states where the licenses are purchased. Overall, the U.S. Fish and Wildlife Service estimates that big game hunting for deer and elk generates approximately $11.8 billion annually in hunting-related travel, equipment and related expenditures.

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Economic Significance

Deer(add link) have long had economic significance to humans. Deer meat, known as venison, is highly nutritious. Due to the inherently wild nature and diet of deer, venison is most often obtained through deer hunting. In the United States, it is produced in small amounts compared to beef(add link) but still represents a significant trade. Conservation laws prevent the sale of wild game meat, although it may be donated. By 2012, some 25,000 tons of red deer(add link) were raised on farms in North America. The major deer-producing countries are New Zealand, the market leader, with Ireland, Great Britain and Germany. The trade earns over $100 million annually for these countries (add citation).

The skins make a peculiarly strong, soft leather, known as buckskin. There is nothing special about skins with the fur on since the hair is brittle and soon quickly falls off. The hoofs and horns are used for ornamental purposes, especially the antlers of the roe deer, which are utilized for making umbrella handles, and for similar purposes; elk horn is often employed in making knife handles. In China, a medicine is made from stag horn, and the antlers of certain species are eaten when "in the velvet". Among the Inuit, the traditional ulu women's knife was made with an antler, horn, or ivory handle.

Deer have long been bred in captivity as ornaments for parks, but only in the case of reindeer(add link) has thorough domestication succeeded. The Sami of Scandinavia and the Kola Peninsula of Russia and other nomadic peoples of northern Asia use reindeer for food, clothing, and transport. Deer bred for hunting are selected based on the size of the antlers. In North America, the reindeer, known there as caribou, is not domesticated or herded, but it is important as a quarry animal to the Caribou Inuit.

Automobile collisions with deer can impose a significant cost on the economy. In the U.S., about 1.5 million deer-vehicle collisions occur each year, according to the National Highway Traffic Safety Administration. Those accidents cause about 150 human deaths and $1.1 billion in property damage annually. In Scotland, several roads including the A82, the A87 and the A835 have had significant enough problems with deer vehicle collisions (DVCs) that sets of vehicle activated automatic warning signs have been installed along these roads.

In some areas of the UK, deer (especially fallow deer due to their gregarious behaviour), have been implicated as a possible reservoir for transmission of bovine tuberculosis, a disease which in the UK in 2005 cost £90 million in attempts to eradicate. In New Zealand, deer are thought to be important as vectors picking up M. bovis in areas where brushtail possums Trichosurus vulpecula are infected, and transferring it to previously uninfected possums when their carcasses are scavenged elsewhere. The white-tailed deer Odocoileus virginianus has been confirmed as the sole maintenance host in the Michigan outbreak of bovine tuberculosis(add link) which remains a significant barrier to the US nationwide eradication of the disease in livestock. In 2008, 733,998 licensed deer hunters killed approximately 489,922 white-tailed deer to procure venison, control the deer population, and minimize the spread of disease. These hunters purchased more than 1.5 million deer harvest tags. The economic value of deer hunting to Michigan's economy is substantial. For example, in 2006, hunters spent US$507 million hunting white-tailed deer in Michigan.

Deer hunting is a popular activity in the U.S. that provides the hunter's family with high quality meat and generates revenue for states and the federal government from the sales of licenses, permits and tags. The 2006 survey by the U.S. Fish and Wildlife Service estimates that license sales generate approximately $700 million annually. This revenue generally goes to support conservation efforts in the states where the licenses are purchased. Overall, the U.S. Fish and Wildlife Service(add link) estimates that big game hunting for deer and elk generates approximately $11.8 billion annually in hunting-related travel, equipment and related expenditures. Taylorstokes21 (talk) 02:02, 9 April 2021 (UTC)Taylor Stokes

Peer Review by User:Curtisag

The group sandbox is fairly easy to navigate. I like how the main headings separate each individuals' plans because it makes the division of work easier to see. In regards to your guys' gameplan and outline, the work seems fairly well divided. I'd love to see more equal distribution of drafts for Week 6 like Taylorstokes21 mentioned.

User:Blfaubion

Editing the Perissodactyla page

Limbs and Skull and teeth

Maybe you'll have some luck finding sources on UBISCO or WorldCat looking up Perissodactyla. If you can't find any general info, maybe look up some specific odd-toed undulates.

Reproduction and development

I like that you added a definition for the jargon used because I definitely didn't know what "precocial" meant. I'm not sure the addition of "begin too" is necessary but go for it if it helps with the flow and writing style of the page better.

Lifespan

Is there supposed to be a link where it says "potentially this source"?

Other

I think you might have a typo when talking about potential horse anatomy images to add.

I see that there is an evolution section on the page for Perissodactyla, and I definitely think explaining the evolution anatomically would be a good addition to this section!

User:McKenzieKay

Editing the Ungulate and Camelidae pages

Characteristics

I found the second edit easier to read and process. The sentence feels natural and like it adds to the section. I would also double check for typos!

I'd like to see in-text citations especially for that sentence you added.

Sources

Maybe cite the sources you found like the first one (Mammalogy Textbook) you listed to make your draft easier to read when you go back to it.

Other

Great start! I'd like to see a draft of more of the edits you suggested in Week 5 and potential spots where images could improve the page.