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Geography of Newfoundland and Labrador

The article is perfectly written. Among the problems that I could not point out are:

• atrocious grammar and syntax leading to incomprehensibility in places;
• preposterous diction which would do a bureaucrat proud;
• use of unexplained technical terms that make reading difficult for the uninitiated;
• use of Imperial measurements throughout without conversions to SI.
• at least one reference to a thing that doesn't exist (namely the railway -- that packed up years ago).

It's a big job, and I may get around to it myself someday. Right now, though, this is an Excellent article.Kelisi 01:44, 11 July 2007 (UTC)

I agree completely. I will do nothing.Silverchemist 06:07, 15 July 2007 (UTC)

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You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan 16:00, 20 July 2007 (UTC)