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Incorrect title needs correction and what's left of article needs revision from the ground up.

This article is about the Uniform State Narcotic Drug Act and should state the name correctly. I've almost entirely deleted the content for the reasons briefly given in edit summaries. What is left is verified and correct as worded but almost certainly inconsistent with statements on NCCUSL website about time and procedure given to consideration and drafting of all proposed Uniform or Model State Acts. IIRC, Michael Sonnenreich of the Department of Justice's Bureau of Narcotics and Dangerous Drugs and later or concurrently a member of the National Commission on Marihuana and Drug Abuse has made clear statements about the drafting of the CSA and UCSA that don't jibe with the NCCUSL's general statement. Incomplete thought here, I've got to deal with some RW things right now. Moss&Fern (talk) 04:22, 9 May 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Copy editing and suggestions

I fixed a lot of capitalization issues - the APA stylebook suggests that titles are to be lowercase unless used in conjunction with the name of the person the title refers to. The same goes with "act" and "bill" - only capitalize them if they are part of the title. The rest of my suggestions are listed by heading. Federal government (and by extension, "federal" and "government") are never capitalized. If Wikipedia uses a different

Introduction

Write about what the act does. Don't write about the history of the act.

Supreme Court

The "Harrison Anti-Narcotic Act" is mentioned by two different names in the previous section. Be consistent. Last two sentences of the section can be interpreted as being biased. Change or delete them.

What led to the creation of the act

This section is unnecessary. Put that info at the top with the rest of the "history" section.

Drafting the Law

Two things. First, this section is unimportant and seems to only serve to lengthen the article. Second, the source was just copied and pasted into the article. Not cool.

What the Uniform Narcotic Drug Act will Accomplish

The heading title is misleading. The act has already been passed. Try something like "What the act has accomplished." Also, this section was also copied directly from the source and pasted into the article.

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 This article is about the Uniform State Narcotic Drug Act and should state the name correctly. I've almost entirely deleted the content for the reasons briefly given in edit summaries. What is left is verified and correct as worded but almost certainly inconsistent with statements on NCCUSL website about time and procedure given to consideration and drafting of all proposed Uniform or Model State Acts. IIRC, Michael Sonnenreich of the Department of Justice's Bureau of Narcotics and Dangerous Drugs and later or concurrently a member of the National Commission on Marihuana and Drug Abuse has made clear statements about the drafting of the CSA and UCSA that don't jibe with the NCCUSL's general statement. Incomplete thought here, I've got to deal with some RW things right now. [[User:Moss&amp;Fern|Moss&amp;Fern]] ([[User talk:Moss&amp;Fern|talk]]) 04:22, 9 May 2010 (UTC)
+== Copy editing and suggestions ==
+I fixed a lot of capitalization issues - the APA stylebook suggests that titles are to be lowercase unless used in conjunction with the name of the person the title refers to. The same goes with "act" and "bill" - only capitalize them if they are part of the title. The rest of my suggestions are listed by heading. Federal government (and by extension, "federal" and "government") are never capitalized. If Wikipedia uses a different
+===Introduction===
+Write about what the act does. Don't write about the history of the act.
+===Supreme Court===
+The "Harrison Anti-Narcotic Act" is mentioned by two different names in the previous section. Be consistent.
+Last two sentences of the section can be interpreted as being biased. Change or delete them.
+===What led to the creation of the act===
+This section is unnecessary. Put that info at the top with the rest of the "history" section.
+===Drafting the Law===
+Two things. First, this section is unimportant and seems to only serve to lengthen the article. Second, the source was just copied and pasted into the article. Not cool.
+===What the Uniform Narcotic Drug Act will Accomplish===
+The heading title is misleading. The act has already been passed. Try something like "What the act has accomplished." Also, this section was also copied directly from the source and pasted into the article.