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:Hi {{ul|Janeesussman}} - On the page, in the orphan box is a "Find tool link". Click on that, and it will show you pages on which Falk is mentioned. I find it easier to bring the other pages up in a separate tab, and then find Falk's name. Once you do that, you can edit that section of the other article, and simply put a wikilink around Falk's name, like this: [[Stephen Falk]]. I did the page for ''[[You're the Worst]]'', so you can review what I did on that page. Good luck. [[User:Onel5969|Onel5969]] ([[User talk:Onel5969#top|talk]]) 18:06, 5 March 2015 (UTC)
:Hi {{ul|Janeesussman}} - On the page, in the orphan box is a "Find tool link". Click on that, and it will show you pages on which Falk is mentioned. I find it easier to bring the other pages up in a separate tab, and then find Falk's name. Once you do that, you can edit that section of the other article, and simply put a wikilink around Falk's name, like this: [[Stephen Falk]]. I did the page for ''[[You're the Worst]]'', so you can review what I did on that page. Good luck. [[User:Onel5969|Onel5969]] ([[User talk:Onel5969#top|talk]]) 18:06, 5 March 2015 (UTC)

But I don't see how it's done! And I still have to link it to: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Weeds_(TV_series) and https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Orange_Is_the_New_Black

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Hi. From time to time I move pertinent info to archive pages.
2014 items can be found here: User:Onel5969/Talk from 2014 (Edited to remove insignificant sections) First manual archive
2015 items can be found here: User:Onel5969/Talk from 2015 (Edited to remove insignificant sections) Second manual archive

Hi! You might find these handy:

Cheers! — | Gareth Griffith-Jones |The WelshBuzzard| — 22:35, 21 January 2014 (UTC)[reply]

16:50:18, 27 February 2015 review of submission by Leeharrispomeroy


Leeharrispomeroy (talk) 16:50, 27 February 2015 (UTC) I am trying to resubmit an article on the architect, Lee Harris Pomeroy. the article is at https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Lee_Harris_Pomeroy_(2). It has been rejected twice but I have revised it adding many links to Wikipedia sources and other articles. I am new to Wikipedia. Please help me to get this article accepted. thank you Joan Ratner jratner@lhparch.com[reply]

Hi Leeharrispomeroy - Please see WP:CIT on how to format references. Right now, your article technically has zero. What it does have are "raw links" in the body of the article, which is a no-no on Wikipedia. After you make the format corrections, let me know and I'll take a look at it. Right now, it's difficult to assess the article in its current shape. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 12:35, 1 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Stephen Falk

Good morning! Thanks for helping me with the "Stephen Falk" page. How do I get it to link to the "You're the Worst" page and the "Orange is the New Black" page and the "Weeds" page? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Janeesussman (talk • contribs) 17:17, 27 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Janeesussman - I see it was done by Veryproicelandic. So now you can see how it's done. Onel5969 (talk) 12:47, 1 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

User Rasane, Draft:T.B. Narasimhachar

Hello! I have rewritten my article on T.B. Narasimhachar to avoid copyright violations. Considering that most of his writings were done in pre-internet era, I'm wondering how you'd like me to establish "notability". I've provided as many online links as I could, in the reference section. There is quite a bit of buzz around his works, this being his birth centenary year. I hope you can approve it soon. Thanks! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rasane (talk • contribs) 19:18, 27 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Rasane - The copyright issue is much better. Citations to the subject's own writings don't show notability, as they are not independent. Sources need to be from secondary sources about the subject. They also don't have to be online, so if you find references to him in books by other authors, or in newspaper/magazine articles which are not online, you can certainly use them as sources. Right now, the article also has raw links in the body of the article, which are a no-no. You should turn them into references. Also, there is an NPOV issue as well. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 12:59, 1 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

21:14:53, 27 February 2015 review of submission by Elemont.aide


I am requesting a re-review because I have edited the same problem multiple times. I keep getting told that I need to cite using footnotes, but somehow every reviewer has decided that a"Footnotes" section, and use of footnotes, don't count as footnotes.

I work for the Senator who is the subject of the article I am trying to publish, I am not just publishing this for kicks and giggles. I have been assigned this article creation by him and several other staffers, so it needs to be published ASAP. I'm not satisfied with the "cite using footnotes" line as a reason for decline because they are VERY OBVIOUSLY used in the article and I've read the recommended pages for using footnotes at least ten times. Trying to keep making these changes is beginning to waste a lot of valuable time. Elemont.aide (talk) 21:16, 27 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Elemont.aide (talk) 21:14, 27 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Elemont.aide, you and the other staffers should check out Wikipedia's guidelines on Conflict of Interest (WP:COI). You cannot create or edit an article about your employer, so it's inappropriate for that to be a task that's assigned to you.
Good luck.

Tung (talk) 21:40, 27 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Elemont.aide - Tung is partially correct. Your close association with the subject needs to be disclosed. I've added the tag to the article's talk page Onel5969 (talk) 13:18, 1 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Draft:Jimmy Jenkins

user name: matthew.novitzky article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Jimmy_Jenkins

You recently rejected my submission. I was hoping to get a break down from you as to why it was rejected. I would appreciate it in as much detail asrwa possible. I am not debating your rejection, I only want this for my notes. Thank you and look forward to hearing for you. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Matthew.novitzky (talk • contribs) 06:03, 28 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Matthew.novitzky - It just doesn't appear this person meets the notability requirements. They have founded two non-notable entities. That's their claim to fame. Without more in-depth coverage, I don't see an article here. Sorry. Onel5969 (talk) 13:33, 1 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Olympic Animal Sanctuary Draft

Hi,

What do you need?

The OAS draft has 25 verifiable and RELIABLE sources that tell the OAS story.

"NOT" included in the draft is any personal attack of the director regarding him attacking a protestor or his criminal background.

There is no way to make this article into a story about a wonderful, warm and fuzzy animal sanctuary. That is NOT factual!!!

None of the draft is my opinion or expresses my opinion in any way.

The entire draft is 100% factual and only facts, with references to prove such without a shadow of a doubt!!

If you can be of any assistance, it will be greatly appreciated. :-)

Thank you very much for being part of Wiki, it is a very valuable asset!!!

Ron Smith

Rsmith127 (talk) 17:21, 28 February 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Rsmith127 - If you made the story it would fail based on an NPOV issue. That's not the problem. The issue is the article reads very informally. For example, the "Snaps" story doesn't belong in an encyclopedic article. You actually do a very good job of NOT having an NPOV issue (one way or another) in the Neglect section, but the entire section is written as if you're telling your friends the story, not writing an article. For example, the first sentence, "In the fall of 2012, former volunteers who had worked at the sanctuary, alleged the dogs were suffering from neglect." is in a very informal tone. A better way (and this is just an example, one of many possible avenues) might be: "In ___________ 2012, allegations of neglect were made by former volunteers of the shelter." I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:27, 1 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Can this page be published?

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Don_Pendleton_(artist)

User name oogatha

Don Pendleton won a Grammy in 2015. Does he meet notability guidelines now? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Oogatha (talk • contribs) 03:07, 1 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Oogatha - If he won a Grammy, that is definitely one of the criteria as per WP:NMUSIC. Add a reference, and he should be approved, based on that alone. However, there are other issues with the article. For example, the quotes section should go away; the references need to be properly formatted (see WP:CIT); and there are other, little, formatting issues (italicizing titles of films, section heading capitalization). Once you correct those things, resubmit. Onel5969 (talk) 13:37, 1 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Unsigned comment about unknown article

Just curious, which two sources are the non-notable entities and why? Have a great day! — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2602:302:D90:CE39:CC1A:8B6F:9D28:8861 (talk) 16:47, 1 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

RE: Olympic Animal Sanctuary

Your suggestions are very helpful. :-)

The Snaps article was included to show some of the success OAS had, my attempt at a NPOV. It will be removed.

I'll rewrite the article and formalize the tone.

IMO, the article reads similar to the "Bad Newz Kennels dog fighting investigation" article that is already published on Wiki...??

Unlike Bad Newz Kennels, there was never a real investigation of OAS and abuse charges were never filed. The owner simply succumbed to the protests and decided to close OAS on his own accord. No real story on that issue.

Thanks, Ron

Rsmith127 (talk) 17:19, 1 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Tradesy

Hi Onel5969,

Thank you so much for reading the wikipedia article I submitted. I know the first one which was written by our former writer was not from a neutral point of view, but we did make considerable changes for the current one making sure it's from a neutral point of view and with sources cited. You can see where the citations came from. I understand why the first article was rejected, however, this one seems to meet the guidelines. Were your concerns about any particular paragraph?

I'm a long time supporter of wikipedia and I love what it stands for, however, I would really appreciate additional feedback about what needs to change to meet the guidelines. Everything in this article is cited and from a neutral tone of voice.

Thank you for your feedback and your assistance.

ElizaSh (re: Tradesy article) — Preceding unsigned comment added by ElizaSh (talk • contribs) 02:53, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi ElizaSh - phrases such as "platform enables users to to buy and sell", "Tradesy charges a 9% seller commission", "provides free shipping" are all advertising. In addition phrases like "DiNunzio envisioned an expansion of the peer-to-peer concept, from a weddings related marketplace to a broader, women’s clothing resale site." are definitely NPOV in nature. When the history section deals mostly with $$ raises, that doesn't help either. Right now, the subject only seems to be notable because they raised money.Onel5969 (talk) 03:41, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you. That's very helpful. I'll revise and try again. ElizaSh — Preceding unsigned comment added by ElizaSh (talk • contribs) 03:58, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

04:40:15, 2 March 2015 review of submission by 216.49.47.213


TO WHOM IT MAY CONCERN:

When profiling me for its own website, PLAZA NOIR used my own personally written bio on its link. It is basically the same bio found on my OWN website <www.michaelstephans.com>, and in the Encyclopedia of Jazz (Lewis Porter, Ed.), and on the jazz website, <www.allaboutjazz.com> and on my author page at amazon.com.

This and other data was submitted on my behalf initially by Mr. Gene Perla MONTHS ago and has been refined several times according to guidelines established by Wikipedia. Please advise as to how this process might be expedited. It appears to be dragging on and on, e.g., One reviewer requests that a modification be made; the modification is completed -- only to have the draft rejected by another reviewer. THIS HAS BEEN A VERY DRAWN OUT, FRUSTRATING PROCESS!!! Please advise how AND WHAT EXACTLY to modify/update/correct/whatever, so we can get on with this, fix it, and get this entry up and running. We need YOUR HELP, PLEASE !!

Michael Stephans, Ph.D. stephans@michaelstephans.com bluejazz9@earthlink.net mstephan@bloomu.edu


216.49.47.213 (talk) 04:40, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Michael - Sorry you feel frustrated. I looked at the history of the draft, and I can only see where it's been declined once prior to my declining it a couple of weeks ago. Sometimes, as editors, if we get severely backlogged on reviewing drafts, we don't have time to list all the issues with an article. We should, that way a page author can deal with everything at once. So here are the issues with the article. First, there is a potential conflict of interest, this close relationship does not preclude your friend from writing the article, but does mean that editors will look closely at any potential neutral point of view issues. While your article does not necessarily have any NPOV issues, the overall informal tone of the article can make it appear so; this is the second issue with the article (and another that it would be declined for). Phrases like "and many others", "Stephans leads three distinct but interrelated lives", "played with personalities", give the article an informal, un-encyclopedic tone. The third issue is the same issue which was mentioned by the previous editor who gave a link to help with the formatting of citations, which still needs to be corrected. The fourth issue is formatting, please see WP:MOS for how to format album, book, song, and article names. The fifth issue is the copyvio one. If you want to donate the material, the process is detailed at WP:DCM. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:19, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Jef Boeke

Hi,

This in reference to this page: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Jef_Boeke.

I have changed the copyrighted paragraph. Please take a look at it again.

FYI, I found that on another page on wikipedia. You might want to take a look at that page as well: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yeast_artificial_chromosome#Full_chromosome — Preceding unsigned comment added by Howareyou120 (talk • contribs) 04:54, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Howareyou120 - The second paragraph is still almost cut and paste from THIS SITE. Also, please see WP:CIT on how to format citations. Once you make those corrections, let me know and I'll approve it to the mainspace. In anticipation of that, I put the wikilink on the other page you referenced above. Onel5969 (talk) 13:31, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi again, I've made changes again. Hope they article is ok now! If not, please point me to specific changes that are required.

Thanks — Preceding unsigned comment added by Howareyou120 (talk • contribs) 23:12, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi again Howareyou120 - now all that's needed is to fix the formatting of the citations. Onel5969 (talk) 03:15, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hey again, I've edited the citations to fit Wikipedia's format. Take a look and let me know! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Howareyou120 (talk • contribs) 02:41, 5 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Request on 09:06:49, 2 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Tcannonrb

Hi

Thanks for your review. Could you advise on how best to make changes so I can publish?

Would emailing permissions-en@wikimedia.org and granting permission to copy material (specifically the press release work)? We own the copyright. If so what should the email cover and is there specific wording?

I read that I should then place OTRS pending on the talk page?

Thanks Again

Tcannonrb (talk) 09:06, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Tcannonrb - the process for donating copyrighted material can be found HERE. The references to the benefits of folks who use the survey should be deleted, as they are promotional in nature. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:55, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Onel5969 thanks for that - Is it all the references or specific ones? Also is that the main issue or is it a copyright issue? If so which bits? Trying to figure out the best course of action. Tcannonrb (talk) 14:43, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Tcannonrb - The article also has a promotional tone to it. Articles should TELL us about the subject, not provide SALES information. The second and third paragraphs are clearly promotional in nature. Also an issue with the International Accommodation Quality Mark wording. Onel5969 (talk) 03:21, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Onel5969 I have made a number of changes to sourcing and wording. If you could look to see if this is better that would be great then I will resubmit. So you know I have also only kept the references of those who benefit where they have demonstrated how they use the survey operationally. I think I have removed the ones where it was used for an award win etc. (Tcannonrb (talk) 11:23, 4 March 2015 (UTC))[reply]

Article Submission

Hey there, Onel5969, thanks for reviewing my article draft. I actually have a question regarding one of my submissions. I'm not quite sure about the notability of organizations (I did have some secondary sources?)? Do you mind taking the time to explain this to me as well as 'verifiability?' Site: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Emerging_Strategy Thanks a lot! Debtang1019 (talk) 09:51, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Debtang1019 - most of the sources you have are for verifying purposes - meaning that they verify the underlying facts of the article. Notability are overall articles from secondary, reliable sources (that are not niche sources), showing that subject is notable). Onel5969 (talk) 03:45, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Ruggero Vanni

Hello Onel5969,

Thank you for reviewing the page I submitted: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Ruggero_Vanni

I have been leaving in the States for 25 years but I got my degree in contemporary art history in Italy and I know that my written English is not perfect. Before resorting to take your time, I did try to understand where the problem with my footnotes resides, but I don't quite see where I failed to meet the proper criteria. I would greatly appreciate if you could guide me on how to address this problem. I really want to learn how to properly write my submissions because I intend to write entries on several accomplished artists. But before waisting more time of Wikipedia's editors, I would like to make sure I am on the right track.

Thank you,

ValeJaba Valejaba (talk) 15:28, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Stephen Falk orphan

Stephen Falk's page says it's in an orphan. What should I do with this? Please advise!! Many thanks! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Janeesussman (talk • contribs) 17:11, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Janeesussman - in the announcement box, there's a "find links tool". Click it, and it will bring up a list of potential articles which refer to Falk. Some will not refer to the Falk your article is on, but some will. Open the link to the new article, then edit that article, by putting double brackets around the first reference to Stephen Falk, like I've done here. After you do that for all the pertinent articles (you don't have to do it for all of them, but since this is the article you created, you may want to), you can remove the tag at the top of Falk's page. It's not that difficult. Onel5969 (talk) 17:36, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Nsolcis

hi, my name is nsolcis you denied my request to add my article about Leba on wikipedia, https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:LeBA It seems your are requiring more links from notable print or websites? how many are needed?

thank you for your help. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Nsolcis (talk • contribs) 17:32, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Nsolcis - there's no set number. Right now you only have one good citation for notability purposes: the South Bend article, and since more than half of it is an interview, even that is not great (interviews are primary sources, and notability references need to be secondary sources). The LA Mag citation is okay, but very brief. YouTube is not a trustworthy source, and the RS citation doesn't even mention the article's subject, in fact, it appears to contradict some of the information in the article, since it says the mural was solely done by someone else. The other two citations are simple listings, which are good to verify facts in the article, but not for notability purposes. Just my opinion, but I would say you should find at least 3 more good references. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:58, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Rejection of correction to wiki Non Evans

Correction of https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Non_Evans by BancAtebion

Greetings. You recently rejected my submission to amend an incorrect Date Of Birth and its corroborating reference. What further evidence is required to allow reversion to the accurate data?

In anticipation of your feedback,

BancAtebion (newbie Contributor) BancAtebion (talk) 18:09, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi BancAtebion, and welcome to Wikipedia! Just add a source. Right now, there is a source listed in the lead of the article (the first paragraph), which is a "dead link". But the fact that there was a link, makes me want to have a new source in order to change the date of birth. Happy editing. Onel5969 (talk) 14:01, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Onel5969, I am now more confused by the rejection as my submission included an update to the dead link which corroborated the correction. BancAtebion (talk) 00:33, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

18:58:51, 2 March 2015 review of submission by JPanic15


Hey there,

I just wanted to get a bit more info on what elements specifically you found lacking a formal tone in the Daniel Panetta article. I've made a couple adjustments to keep things concise, but I'd appreciate any additional feedback from yourself.

Regards,

-JPanic15

JPanic15 (talk) 18:58, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi JPanic15 - I think the corrections you made, although slight, have gotten rid of the informal tone of the prior version. Nice work. I think, however, that you might need another couple of good references to show his notability. At least one of the CTV links is dead (as happens frequently with links to videos, that's why they are not used often). Onel5969 (talk) 14:12, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

20:49:33, 2 March 2015 review of submission by Bobowikibobo


Bobowikibobo (talk) 20:49, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]


Thank you for your suggestions for improving this submission. The question that I have is how to show evidence of "notability." The subject of the article is an academic and author of books in his field. Should I add references and quotes from independent reviews of these works. About 20 published reviews of these works have appeared in scholarly publications, and a large number of citations of research reports have appeared. Should I add quotations from these sources in the different sections of the Wikipedia article?

Hi Bobowikibobo - regarding notability, take a look at WP:NACADEMICS on what would make an academic notability. The reviews are good things, and you can list them under references, like you currently have done for the 3 there. Quotes should only be used to make certain points. Also, please take a look at WP:MOS and MOS:LAYOUT for formatting tips (e.g., don't add bold or italics to section headings). Hope this helps Onel5969 (talk) 14:55, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

My article "Saul Bron”

USERNAME: Ethersearch RE: My article "Saul Bron” https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Saul_Bron

Dear Editor - Just wanted to let you know that I have done some clean-up, added inline references, and created a few back links. Hope it helps. Looking forward to your review but no rush, obviously.

Thank you for your help. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ethersearch (talk • contribs) 21:21, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Draft:Call Center Pros

Could you please have another look at this one - I've already added one {tl|backwardscopy]] on the talk page - I've now added another one. The original text comes from a deleted Wikipedia article (by the same author) at Call Center Pros - created 11:59, 2 January 2015 - well before any other web copies. Thanks. Ron. Ronhjones  (Talk) 22:52, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

P.S. I've now merged the histories of the two pages - hopefully that will help. Ronhjones  (Talk) 23:01, 2 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]
Hi Ronhjones - I understand the one reverse cw, but the press release was done on the same day as the original article (per the page history), and personally I don't see how a PR could be taken from Wikipedia. I mean, what company does that? Even if the article's cw issue is resolved, the article still has additional problems: reading like an advertisement, notability, and lack of inline citations. I hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 15:10, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Re: Camellia Posoncuy's Article

Dear Sir,

I would just like to seek clarification as what you meant by citation by virtue of footnotes. I think I have already addressed this as all referenced statements are already using footnotes.

Please note that majority of the article is cited through an interview with Dr Posoncuy last year. Thank you!

LinK: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Camellia_Posoncuy

aljolar — Preceding unsigned comment added by Aljolar (talk • contribs) 06:07, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Aljolar - please click on the link in the box on the draft to learn about in-line citations, and where they are necessary. If the only source for the claims in the article is an interview, that could prove problematic, since interviews are primary sources, and Wikipedia prefers secondary sources. Onel5969 (talk) 13:09, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Request on 11:30:04, 3 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Naamam118


Hi, I am not sure which information you are referring to as copyright... Can you be more specific so I can rectify my listing?

Thanks Naama

Naamam118 (talk) 11:30, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, thank you so much for your prompt review and feedback. Regarding your remarks on my listing https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Dynamic_Mindset_Advertising_(DMA)

You mentioned that it resembles http://www.theesa.com/article/women-comprise-nearly-half-gamer-population/ - however, please note that this article is used merely as a reference to the market size, where I brought the research results showing the large % of women gamers - and I did indeed cite theesa as a reference (see citation 3).

Can you please be more specific as to what I need to correct in order to improve this listing?

Many thanks! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Naamam118 (talk • contribs) 11:54, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Naamam118 - The paragraph beginning with "The Market", seems to be almost completely cut and paste from that underlying source. That's the c/w issue. In addition, their is not enough context in this article to explain what the article is about if a reader is unfamiliar with the concepts being discussed. Finally, please see WP:CIT on how to format the references. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 13:36, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you Onel5969 (talk) so much for your prompt reply. Corrected and re-submitted.


Naamam118 (talk) 17:15, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Draft article rejection

Hello - I've just seen that an article I submitted for review - Draft:Teenage_Time_Killers - has been rejected following your review, with the feedback that it is not written in the "encyclopedic" style that is expected. I was wondering if you could offer more specific feedback as to which parts you feel do not meet the guidance. The feedback seems very general and I would like to amend and resubmit, but would like more specifics in order to do so. Many thanks Burlington Bert (talk) 12:01, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Burlington Bert - First, use of peacock terms like "supergroup", "famed"; and terms like: "The list of guest artists then grew from there", give the article an informal feel. Coupled with the fact that a large part of the article is taken up by a quote and a list of performers, and the article and the article reads informally. Also, please see WP:CIT on how to properly format your citations. Onel5969 (talk) 14:03, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Draft article rejection

Hello - Thank you for reviewing my article - Draft:VBox_Home_TV_Gateway - I saw that you rejected it as it is not written in the encyclopedic. I was wondering if you could offer more specific feedback as to which parts you feel do not meet the guidance. The feedback seems very general and I would like to amend and resubmit, but would like more specifics in order to do so. Many thanks User:Rimavich (talk) — Preceding undated comment added 13:39, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Regarding Page Declined

Hi Onel5969,

I have seen that you guys again declined my page entry. May i know what things i should do in order to get this page published. https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Goods_Order_Inventory_System_(2)

PS: I have already tried my best to remove whatsoever Advertising content from my perspective.

Please let me know what else i can do.

I look forward to hearing back from you soon.

Regards, Susheel — Preceding unsigned comment added by Susheelseth25 (talk • contribs) 14:22, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Susheelseth25 - The article needs to tell us about the company, not sell the company's products. Phrases like "which has grown to address inventory recording and management needs of business enterprises" are promotional in nature. When you take into account the brevity of the article, that one sentence gives it an overall advertising aspect. Onel5969 (talk) 14:17, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

The Morris Quinlan Experience

The Morris Quinlan Experience

Hello

You've just declined this article (3rd March 2015) on the grounds of not being sufficiently notable. However, I believe at least two of Wikipedia's notability guidelines are indeed met for this ensemble, as follows...

"1. Has been the subject of multiple, non-trivial, published works appearing in sources that are reliable, not self-published, and are independent from the musician or ensemble itself.[note 1] This criterion includes published works in all forms, such as newspaper articles, books, magazine articles, online versions of print media, and television documentaries[note 2] except for the following: Any reprints of press releases, other publications where the musician or ensemble talks about themselves, and all advertising that mentions the musician or ensemble, including manufacturers' advertising.[note 3]


Works consisting merely of trivial coverage, such as articles that simply report performance dates, release information or track listings, or the publications of contact and booking details in directories."

Album reviews in The Times and Melody Maker, as well as the feature article in the Newcastle Journal were all independently written, and despite being unavailable online, are all verifiable.

"12. Has been a featured subject of a substantial broadcast segment across a national radio or TV network."

Does not the group's live appearance as guests on Ned Sherrin's Loose Ends programme on BBC Radio 4 (Saturday 11th August 2001) count here? It was a segment of approaching 10 minutes duration, during which Sherrin gave a lengthy introduction to the band, and talked further about them after their live performance of one of their pieces, all in front of a live audience. Most notably, the segment was repeated on the Loose Ends Pick Of The Year show at the end of 2001.

The band can not yet claim 'rotation' play for any of their releases, but they are regulars on Bob Harris's BBC Radio 2 Sunday Show (considered to be a very influential rock music programme, if not the most influential currently on UK radio), and indeed a playlist search shows they have received more Bob Harris plays than even (for instance) Kate Bush!!!

That said their most recent singe release 'Scarborough Fair' received multiple plays on the Radio 2 network, not just from Bob Harris.

BBC Radio 4 and BBC Radio 2 are major national radio networks in the UK.

One of the band's members, Dave Maughan, is well known as a record producer, having recorded and produced Mercury Music Prize nominated Little Black Numbers album by Kathryn Williams, who herself has guested on an MQE released track. Would it be helpful to this article if Dave Maughan had a Wikipedia entry?

Hoping you can reconsider the article...

LeoTheDobermann (talk) 16:29, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Bbentllc

Hi there, I really need some help. I have looked at other articles and ours has been declined https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Elizabeth_%27Lizzie%27_Sophia_Sider This is what you wrote to me This submission does not appear to be written in the formal tone expected of an encyclopedia article. Entries should be written from a neutral point of view, and should refer to a range of independent, reliable, published sources. Please rewrite your submission in a more encyclopedic format. Please make sure to avoid peacock terms, that are designed to promote or show-off the subject. It seems pretty formal to me. Can you please be more specific? This is kind of frustrating as I am not a great writer and this is one of our clients and I would love to get this resolved. Any specific help at all would be greatly appreciated. Thank you in advance for your time. Bbentllc (talk) 18:16, 3 March 2015 (UTC)bbentllc[reply]

Bbentllc - First of all, you have the trivia of her singing national anthems in the lead. Second, you have this long, completely uncited, section on musical beginnings, which is mostly again trivia. That entire section could be cut down to 3-4 lines. Comments about donations also don't belong in the article. Also make sure that facts like chart #'s, and views need citations. Hope this helps. Onel5969 (talk) 14:48, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Request on 18:55:50, 3 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by PsychiatricRN



PsychiatricRN (talk) 18:55, 3 March 2015 (UTC) Thank you so much, Onel5969[reply]

I made some edits which I will resubmit. Can you give me a little more direction about the problem with my citations. Do I have too many or is it just the format?

Thank you so much. I really want to get this nurse on Wikipedia and am overwhelmed about the deficiencies but will try to fix ASAP. I also sent permission by the family to use her WWI photo to the wikipedia address for such matters. PsychiatricRN (talk) 18:55, 3 March 2015 (UTC)PsychiatricRN[reply]

Hi PsychiatricRN - nice job. I moved it to the mainspace. Onel5969 (talk) 14:56, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

20:15:57, 3 March 2015 review of submission by Bcooper87


Thank you again for all your help. I have rewritten the article and removed the sentences you recommended. I have resubmitted the article. If you get a chance, can you take a quick look and let me know if I am on the right track.

Bcooper87 (talk) 20:15, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Benefitalign

Hi, Please help me understand more about why the article was rejected. I have written information verified by third party publications like ABQ Business First news paper. Please let me know why the reference links articles were not considered to be verifiable sources. Also I would highly appreciate it if you could help me understand which part of the content - sentences or paragraphs - were considered to be promotional.

Thank You, Daks Dakshinat.maratt (talk) 21:23, 3 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Dakshinat.maratt - avoid promotional spin. Stuff that includes lists of products, product specs, and benefits to customers/consumers should be removed. Just facts about the company. Onel5969 (talk) 14:59, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

01:39:31, 4 March 2015 review of submission by Bobowikibobo


Bobowikibobo (talk) 01:39, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I think I’ve found a good solution to fix the defect in the submission. Among the many reviews of the author’s books and the hundreds of citations in journals, I found a representative sample of scholars and research scientists in the field who have evaluated the work of this project in professional peer-reviewed publications. In the article I inserted quotations from these authors: Alexis Kirke and Eduardo Miranda (Plymouth University) Jane Hill (University of Arizona) Yi Xu (University of Pittsburg) Mihye Han (University of New Mexico) Vasiliki Chondrogianni (Bangor University). I was careful to select quotes that would actually be interesting to the reader and had content directly related to the themes in the article. As soon as I proofread the article, I’ll resubmit. Thanks again for your help. ˜˜˜˜Bobowikibobo

02:37:01, 4 March 2015 review of submission by PsychiatricRN


PsychiatricRN (talk) 02:37, 4 March 2015 (UTC) Hi, I think I know what I need to do with the citations. I have to hyperlink the number to the reference, correct?[reply]

Thank you for your help. Is there anything else I need to change? I made some edits and I would like to add back the picture of Adele in WW I uniform. I sent an email giving permission to Wikipedia from the family of Adele.

PsychiatricRN (talk) 02:37, 4 March 2015 (UTC)PsychiatricRN[reply]

My Adele Poston article

Hi, Thank you for reviewing my Adele Poston contribution back in January! I was happy to see you are a New Yorker! You probably moved to get away from the snow but it's really lovely snowing this evening!

Anyway, I made some of your suggested changes to the document, but was confused about the citations. I think I need to hyperlink every number to the citation, correct? Is the form okay just not the linking to the citations?

I would also like to add back the photo of Adele from WWI which someone removed. I sent an email from her living family who own the photo, with their permission, to Wikipedia email address. Is there anything else I need to do? Thanks so much.

This is my first attempt at putting something on Wikipedia and I'm a bit overwhelmed!

PsychiatricRN (talk) 02:41, 4 March 2015 (UTC)PsychiatricRN[reply]

Hi Onel5969. I have taken care of formatting the citations, and the article is ready for review and (hopefully) publication. Draft:Adele Poston. Cheers, -- Diannaa (talk) 03:26, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Diannaa - the citations are fine. As I said above, I moved it to the mainspace. Regarding the photo, not until you have received permission and documented it, can you use it. Nice first effort. Onel5969 (talk) 15:13, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Draft:Acoustic liner

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Acoustic_liner

First and foremost thanks for reviewing my article.

I can understand your comment about terms like "basically" or "interesting evolution". On the other hand, I do not understand why while I cite a reference using something like "as shown by Jones et.el.[5]" is giving the feeling that this is an informal essay. This is the way I cite references on my scientific articles. Should I use a different way to cite an article on wikipedia?

Thanks for the clarification.

Best regards Dr.eng.dc (talk) 12:04, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Dr.eng.dc - on Wikipedia, you simply state the fact, then give the reference to back it up. You don't even need to use any part of that. For instance, the sentence could simply read: "The acoustic liners' performance can be verified by means of ground tests on real scale engines", with the two reference notes at the end. Onel5969 (talk) 03:37, 5 March 2015 (UTC)made[reply]

Ok, thank you. I have the modifications. Best regards Dr.eng.dc (talk) 07:41, 5 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Wikipedia:Miscellany for deletion/Draft:Zulficar Moussa

You are invited to join the discussion at Wikipedia:Miscellany for deletion/Draft:Zulficar Moussa. You've reviewed this draft before. Thanks. APerson (talk!) 14:08, 4 March 2015 (UTC)Template:Z48[reply]

https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Interflora&oldid=prev&diff=649846513

Hi, is it wrong listing some of interflora competition? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Greenvalds (talk • contribs) 15:08, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

APerson - No, it was more of the fact that you used the phrase, "The online flower industry has vastly grown in the past decade.", then listed the competitors, all without citations. Onel5969 (talk) 03:39, 5 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Adele Poston

Dear Onel5969, Thank you so much for your help! I am so excited and will look at how to make it a higher class article. Thank you for taking me under your wing. This has been an interesting learning process. I am very interested in WWI, too, and especially nursing in WWI. I am in process of clarifying copyright issues so her WWI photo can be uploaded.

Diannaa (editor) also helped me and I am grateful to both of you. I heard from the permission person and am investigating the photo copyright further. I hope to get her on a USPS postage stamp so these efforts are doubly important!!

Best wishes, Carolyn/ PsychiatricRN (talk) 15:24, 4 March 2015 (UTC)PsychiatricRN[reply]

Good job, PsychiatricRN - keep on editing. Don't hesitate to aske questions. Onel5969 (talk) 03:41, 5 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you, One15969! I will definitely contact you again if I have questions. The photo appeared this afternoon (good news) so I just emailed the permission person to see what made the difference with that. I am assuming it is because of the date of the photo. Thanks for being such a huge help to all of us novice contributors! PsychiatricRN (talk) 03:58, 5 March 2015 (UTC)PsychiatricRN[reply]

15:41:31, 4 March 2015 review of submission by Xpediabrown


Thanks Onel5969 for reviewing my article. It's my first attempt, so I obviously still have a lot to learn. Would you be able to give me some suggestions? Is the entire article too informal or are the bits about education too strong? I'm about to start editing but am afraid to make it worse. The page is here: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:The_School_FundXpediabrown (talk) 15:41, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Xpediabrown (talk) 15:41, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Xpediabrown - It's not far from being there, but as I said in my comment, your passion shows through. The big issue is the history section with all of its stories. That really needs to be cut significantly, and just state the facts. Onel5969 (talk) 03:45, 5 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

finding an editor to write an article about Lee Harris Pomeroy.

It has been suggested by Justlettersandnumbers at Wikipedia that I may have a conflict of interest in writing this article. I am an employee of Lee Harris Pomeroy Architects. If that disqualifies me from submitting an unbiased article about a noteworthy architect, can you help me in finding an editor at Wikipedia who would be interested in taking on this subject? Thank you, Joan Ratner Director of Communications Lee Harris Pomeroy Architects jratner@lhparch.com 212 334 2600 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Leeharrispomeroy (talk • contribs) 17:54, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

I have revised the references as you recommended. Please check and let me know if I am on the right track. thank you, Joan Ratner jratner@lhparch.com — Preceding unsigned comment added by Leeharrispomeroy (talk • contribs) 20:34, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Leeharrispomeroy (Joan) - Your close connection does not preclude you from writing the article, but it does mean that other editors are going to look very closely at it. I don't mind lending a hand. No, the references aren't fixed. I might not be able to get to it for a day or two (I'm working on some things). If I don't get to it by Sunday, give me a shout here to remind me. Onel5969 (talk) 03:51, 5 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for reviewing my article Roots Millennium Schools

Hello Onel5969!

I hope you're doing good. This is Zeeshan Shafquat from Pakistan. I just noticed that you reviewed my article for creation Roots Millennium Schools, and approved it. I would like to thank you for that. And I will keep continuing to improve this Wiki and writing more Wiki articles concerning my community.

Cheers & Best Regards, Bites85 (talk) 23:48, 4 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Request on 04:09:29, 5 March 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Reelnrod007


My proposed article for Dennis M Gillespie was declined, I am not a writer, scholor or anything of the sort, but this is a story with many common formulas and the denominator is this Navy commander. I do not wish to slander him. I am the male sailor submitting the UCMJ Article 138 Complaint with the assistance of Congressman Tom Bevill. My issue is well after the tail hook scandle and and ordnance accident burning AO3 Brian Powers (my shipmate) and the infamous "Tea and Cookies" comment. I had a bad expierience well before all the female pilots and ordnance mishap aboard USS Saratoga. I have A copy of the investigation on pdf aproximately 200 pages; the response is libleous to me, but all things considered I demanded a court-martial but was refused. However I was allowed to complete my final fifty-four months with an Honorable discharge. I was at quarters when Commander Michael Longworth pinned the Silver Star on Gillespie in 1988. A lot of story about this infamous man, but one cannot source this type information I possess anywhere on the WWW furthermore the national archives refused to release it, but I finally got the CNO to release it to me simply because I made the complaint. I do not have much free time, but if someone would like my info to gain insight how the military cleverly covers-up wrong doing; it shall be an interesting read. My email is jleftwich8362@att.net thank you for the time and help submitting a 200 page pdf Reelnrod007 (talk) 04:09, 5 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Reelnrod007 - The issue is that while sources don't necessarily have to be accessible over the internet, they do have to be accessible to the public. If they're not, that pretty much amounts to original research, which is a no-no on Wikipedia. Especially if the information is contentious, or might be deemed defamatory in any way. Thanks for sharing your story, though, and thank you for your service. Onel5969 (talk) 13:52, 5 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Christopher Carter article

Hello, thank you for the pointers on my submission

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Christopher_Carter

I plan to seek our the secondary independent sources you cited were not adequate when you declined my submission. I hope on the next submission of my revised article on Christopher Carter it will meet Wiki standards and gain your approval.

Best,

Carroll F. Gray

Onel5969 (talk) 13:30, 5 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Carroll F. Gray - First, please always sign your comments with the four ~ , that way other editors can understand which editor they are speaking with. Second, sorry about your attempts to message me. Another editor who had left a prior message had left some code in their message which hid anything written after it, so your attempts did not show. I've corrected that.
Now, on to about what you are truly interested in, your article. Aside from the citation issue, there are a few other changes you should make. First, lose the dialogue between the subject and an interviewer. Doesn't belong in an encyclopedia article. Instead, transform it into prose and in your own words describe the gist of that conversation, then use the current citation to back up that prose. Second, the long list of exhibitions, etc. should also be converted into prose, with the reference to the subject's CV used at the end. I've temporarily reformatted based on it as a list, but prose is always stronger. Hit the highlights, and add a summation. Third, after the Hollingsworth quote, the next paragraph deals with "him". Is this referring to Hollingsworth? Or the article's subject? It's unclear. Fourth, check your redlinks. Several actually do have wikipages, you simply haven't connected to them correctly, e.g. Grand Rapids Art Museum instead of Grand Rapids Arts Museum. Fifth, and finally, check out WP:CIT regarding how to format your references. Anyway, hope this helps, and keep on editing! Onel5969 (talk) 13:45, 5 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Apotichnyj

Hi Onel5969,

My username is Apotichnyj.

You edited a wiki page I completed. Can you help me make the appropriate changes to the page so that it can pass your approval process.

I thought the references were good and the content was not marketing.

Please help me.

Thanks

Alex

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:BitGold — Preceding unsigned comment added by Apotichnyj (talk • contribs) 14:01, 5 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Stephen Falk

My article on Stephen Falk is an orphan and I can't figure out how to remedy this!! Can you help me? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Janeesussman (talk • contribs) 17:59, 5 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Janeesussman - On the page, in the orphan box is a "Find tool link". Click on that, and it will show you pages on which Falk is mentioned. I find it easier to bring the other pages up in a separate tab, and then find Falk's name. Once you do that, you can edit that section of the other article, and simply put a wikilink around Falk's name, like this: Stephen Falk. I did the page for You're the Worst, so you can review what I did on that page. Good luck. Onel5969 (talk) 18:06, 5 March 2015 (UTC)[reply]

But I don't see how it's done! And I still have to link it to: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Weeds_(TV_series) and https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Orange_Is_the_New_Black

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