Wikipedia:WikiProject Medicine/Osmosis

We are working with Osmosis to create medical videos under a CC BY SA license. As part of the process of creation of these videos Osmosis is interested in our feedback on the scripts. They will be posted here with at least 14 days given for review.

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Lyme disease 2016-03-27

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1RNKzphaHSV64kV_hFPhdzHsRZNjMpkrTbXxqnhZeCmA/edit?usp=sharing

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I'm not sure if this was the intent, but the text appears to focus on Lyme disease in the USA. Here are examples:

• The first sentence states that Lyme disease is caused by Borrelia burgdorferi. It is true that B. burgdorferi is the major cause of Lyme disease in the USA, but B. garinii and B. afzelii are additional agents of Lyme disease in Europe and Asia.
• The last sentence of the same paragraph explains that B. burgdorferi is vectored by the deer tick Ixodes scapularis, also known as the black-legged tick. This is true for Lyme disease in the northeastern and midwestern U.S., but other types of Ixodes ticks transmit Lyme Borrelia in western North America and Eurasia: the sheep tick (Ixodes ricinus), taiga tick (Ixodes persulcatus), and western black-legged tick (Ixodes pacificus).
• The clinical manifestations described in the text are U.S. centric. Borrelial lymphocytoma (rare) and acrodermatitis chronica atrophicans are observed in some European cases of Lyme disease.

I also think it's important to state that B. burgdorferi is transmitted within saliva as the ticks feed. Transmission takes about 36-48 hours because it takes that long for the spirochetes to migrate from the tick's midgut to the salivary glands. CatPath (talk) 17:59, 18 March 2016 (UTC)

All excellent points, with the caveat that I'm not sure rare manifestations are sufficiently notable for a brief video (style point - up to the authors). — soupvector (talk) 16:44, 19 March 2016 (UTC)

Thanks! We'll take these points into consideration but as soupvector pointed out the rarer conditions may not be able to make it into the video because it's a brief video. We'll do our best! OsmoseIt (talk) 16:13, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

Diabetes 2016-03-29

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1GRvH1jjTqYbHx-tg2syQHyjYuWBKo3LKsHKku38Zlt8/edit?usp=sharing

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My understanding of T1DM is that it is a type IV hypersensitivity response. This isn't mentioned and perhaps could be. I also feel that T1DM's genetics are overplayed and T2DM's genetics are underplayed. T2DM is vastly more heritable than T1DM, though obviously both are heavily dependent on genetics. 2001:630:12:1020:3095:CB98:F8D2:14F2 (talk) 16:34, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

Angina pectoris 2016-04-2

https://docs.google.com/document/d/124rdHN0lklowHsGyg2ICCqtDVlYK5F-9FJZNcgoceFs/edit?usp=sharing

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Atrial septal defect 2016-04-4

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1MAvbvS28DcAMY7G7Sc3VXtvmulc4rmO50Bc-3JD_pww/edit?usp=sharing

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Patent ductus arteriosus 2016-04-5

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1HYotaJKPS5KZcAZnRe1tg14mQo-KC94bdvpSIi_KNhs/edit?usp=sharing

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Ventricular septal defect 2016-04-8

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1to2R9sLpVatoRF3qWQgOOeK3KcLiAjyjl4PKqhBD22M/edit?usp=sharing

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Tetralogy of Fallot 2016-04-9

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1acLEBRYkOmkF6v4J2sQku1Vq6naWh7AJCuJSgj0fkes/edit?usp=sharing

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Coarctation of the aorta 2016-04-12

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1h9TK2WWZLwjaPaywsX-Mi3sWGE50UV1DE4pD0YzbEZU/edit?usp=sharing

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Atrioventricular block 2016-04-15

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Oji8dRMI9XgVbjPmcD9l9-qKqTdUGNt7EJVrUyiB2fg/edit?usp=sharing

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Bundle branch block 2016=04-16

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1LIwiC957107PNdYowLqwmzUjJXzKNdxwhIptCb1J7VM/edit?usp=sharing

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Aortic valve diseases 2016-04-17

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1CDnBNTFpMkxJA5o1zErsvLncv1rfmhimzPPECHVQiVQ/edit?usp=sharing

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Mitral valve diseases 2016-04-18

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1jjGruas-7RieOwgxBDGAbLJjmqv3Elhg7LsyN9Y02Ms/edit?usp=sharing

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Completed video scripts

Diverticulitis

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1YiImk4Dc8-PrA95gX_hGtAmi4kCcGubCoBQOS4BiZRE/edit?usp=sharing

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Ventricular tachycardia

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1oMyKZP5bTlcMGeYoRl4FCYBzlNy3yh9hLnZTZUrcHsM/edit?usp=sharing

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Myocardial infarctions 2016-02-28

https://docs.google.com/document/d/18tXU3cANgjzXrfeQd5Uk8uzrqG0GcwWKf1k_DT4f1Ko/edit?usp=sharing

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Big topic, but the script looks very good. Have the suggestions for post-MI risk stratification been lined up against guidelines to ensure they're accurate and complete? Also, more explicit coverage of symptom variation in women, emphasizing how under-appreciated this problem is, might be important. Nice work! — soupvector (talk) 15:46, 16 March 2016 (UTC)

Noted! Thanks so much!! OsmoseIt (talk) 16:15, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

Ventricular fibrillation 2016-03-23

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1J9yWGHl8DmwPWtpMPt9CpptfHqbbj5sjBer8R07RjTE/edit?usp=sharing

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HIV/AIDS 2016-03-24

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1BmCYWK-MM9G0FRpDuhflWf5SoPNwqDFiQ5SJA2jyPQA/edit?usp=sharing

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Tuberculosis 2016-03-28

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1NK_pBuBq3NDLaBfarlrUsQNvZBoCmX6XbN-NHjH3rMY/edit?usp=sharing

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