Talk:Northwest Columbus (Ohio)
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A few Comments:
Great content, but you need to be careful about how you say things. My best advice is get straight to the point. You're writing for an online encyclopedia, not a term paper. For example, you write:
The etymology of the area makes sense, it is referred to as Northwest Columbus because it is located in the Northwest part of the city of Columbus. The Northwest Civic Association was founded in 1967 and acts as the commission of this area[3].
Instead write:
Northwest Columbus is a geographic region located in the northwest region of Franklin County, Ohio. The Northwest Civic Association, founded in 1967, acts as the commission of this area[3].
Also: be careful about neutrality. Using descriptive words make it sound like an advertisement.
Move photos out of galleries and into the main page of the article. Please view the Arena District Example page.
Kenitzer.1 (talk) 14:21, 4 December 2014 (UTC)
Some edits
[edit]History-- I think the wording in this section needs to be read over, especially the first sentence. It needs to sound a little more objective and scholarly. I think simply saying Northwest Columbus describes the Northwest Area of Columbus would be enough. It is jumpy and does not give a very clear picture of how the area came about. I think that more dates would give a better timeline of history for the neighborhood. In addition, mentioning the good roads movement without any context is slightly confusing to a reader who may not have a clue what is is. Also, the culture info should not be in the history section.
Neighborhoods- Northcrest: This wording should be changed around, " with 48.7% of the households here made up of people living alone." Perhaps something along the lines of "48.7& of households in the area are occupied by single people/ one person." Linworth: This statement is a little disjointed- "It is a suburban neighborhood and made up of homes and townhomes and it is known as a good place to have a family or retire." Change the above statement to "It is a suburban neighborhood and made up of homes and townhomes and as a result is known as a good place to have a family or retire.
Recent and pre-existing developments: I think that before saying OSU students you need to write out "Ohio State University students at least once. It can not be assumed that the reader will automatically know who OSU students are. Change " In this area alone, over half of the residents list their marital status as single."
This statement is too subjective for a scholarly article, "When seeing this neighborhood for the first time, the most important thing is often the way it looks, like its homes and its setting"
Need to re-phrase this statement so it does not use the word "you"-" Either way, if you live here year round, you will find many of the homes or apartments are empty for all or a portion of the year."
Should re-phrase, maybe to "The Central Ohio Transit Authority, or COTA, has multiple lines frequently functioning lines in this area."
Structures and Landmarkers "It it is a large complex that stands out in the area that can act as a landmark for people to identify what part of Columbus is Northwest Columbus."<<< sounds like the definition of landmark, kind of unnecessary.
Entertainment "Entertainment in this area includes Carriage Place Recreation Center which houses a Cinemark Dollar Theater, Buckeye Entertainment, Vanity Gentlemen's Club, Columbus Gold Gentlemen's Club, Kahoots Gentlemen's Club, and Sawmill Lanes Bowling Alley. [17] There is also a shooting range available on Bethel Rd. LEPD Firearms and Range not only features a short distance, indoor shooting range, but also offers numerous tactical supplies available for purchase. " I don't think that listing gentlemen's clubs and shooting ranges first for entertainment is very acceptable. "The parks in Northwest Columbus provide green space and areas to play." >> All parks are really green spaces with areas to play, this is unnecessary.
Davis.4497 (talk) 21:31, 5 December 2014 (UTC)Davis.4497Davis.4497 (talk) 21:31, 5 December 2014 (UTC)
2nd Draft
[edit]Notes from the class editor: Reword the history section, it sounds too much like a conversation when reading it, also the sections about apartment complexes should be in the residential section, and you have too much detail about each one, we don't need to know the median rent for each apartment complex. Kowalski.118 (talk) 13:30, 9 December 2014 (UTC)
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