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*'''a.''' Prose is "[[MOS:JARGON|clear]] and [[Wikipedia:Manual of Style|concise]]", without [[Wikipedia:Copyright violations|copyvios]], or spelling and grammar errors: {{GAList/check|y}} |
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*'''b.''' [[Wikipedia:Manual of Style|MoS]] compliance for [[WP:LEAD|lead]], [[WP:LAYOUT|layout]], [[WP:WTW|words to watch]], [[WP:WAF|fiction]], and [[Wikipedia:Manual of Style (embedded lists)|lists]]: {{GAList/check| |
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#** Major Point 1: '''History''' "During the Georgian era Bath became fashionable with the architects John Wood, the Elder and his son John Wood, the Younger laying out new areas of housing for residents and visitors. Assembly Rooms had been built early in the 18th century, however a new venue for balls, concerts and gambling was envisaged in the area between Queen Square, The Circus and the Royal Crescent. John Wood, the Younger raised funding through a Tontine and construction started in 1769. The New or Upper Assembly Rooms opened with a grand ball in 1771 and became the hub of fashionable society." (<span style="color:purple">'''not''' a ''concise summary'' of the corresponding section in the body</span>) {{P|sad}} |
#** Major Point 1: '''History''' "During the Georgian era Bath became fashionable with the architects John Wood, the Elder and his son John Wood, the Younger laying out new areas of housing for residents and visitors. Assembly Rooms had been built early in the 18th century, however a new venue for balls, concerts and gambling was envisaged in the area between Queen Square, The Circus and the Royal Crescent. John Wood, the Younger raised funding through a Tontine and construction started in 1769. The New or Upper Assembly Rooms opened with a grand ball in 1771 and became the hub of fashionable society." (<span style="color:purple">'''not''' a ''concise summary'' of the corresponding section in the body</span>) {{P|sad}} |
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#** Major Point 2: '''Architecture''' "The Bath stone building has rooms arranged in a U shape. There are four main function rooms in the complex: the 100-foot-long (30 m) ballroom — the largest Georgian interior in Bath; the tea room; the card room; and the octagon. The rooms have Whitefriars crystal chandeliers and are decorated with fine art. In the 20th century it was used as a cinema and in 1931 was taken over by the Society for the Protection of Ancient Buildings and restored. It was bombed and burnt out during World War II with restoration undertaken by Sir Albert Richardson before reopening in 1963." (summarised '''well''' in the lead) {{P|smile}} |
#** Major Point 2: '''Architecture''' "The Bath stone building has rooms arranged in a U shape. There are four main function rooms in the complex: the 100-foot-long (30 m) ballroom — the largest Georgian interior in Bath; the tea room; the card room; and the octagon. The rooms have Whitefriars crystal chandeliers and are decorated with fine art. In the 20th century it was used as a cinema and in 1931 was taken over by the Society for the Protection of Ancient Buildings and restored. It was bombed and burnt out during World War II with restoration undertaken by Sir Albert Richardson before reopening in 1963." (summarised '''well''' in the lead) {{P|smile}} |
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Rod, I'm very happy and inspired to see your work here. I do have some insights based on the above checklist that I think will improve the article: |
Rod, I'm very happy and inspired to see your work here. <s>I do have some insights based on the above checklist that I think will improve the article</s>: |
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* I think the lead can be improved in order to ''provide an accessible overview'' for the ''History''. |
* <s>I think the lead can be improved in order to ''provide an accessible overview'' for the ''History''</s>. |
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* The image "Pickwick Papers, la salle de jeux à Bath29.jpeg" has "<nowiki>{{PD-Art}}</nowiki> template without parameter: please specify why the underlying work is public domain in both the source country and the United States". Is it a concern? |
* <s>The image "Pickwick Papers, la salle de jeux à Bath29.jpeg" has "<nowiki>{{PD-Art}}</nowiki> template without parameter: please specify why the underlying work is public domain in both the source country and the United States". Is it a concern?</s> |
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Besides that, I think the article looks excellent. Please feel free to strike out any recommendation from this review which you think will not help in improving the article which is our main aim here. All the best, {{=3|friend}} --<span style="padding:2px;background:#fffff4">[[User:Seabuckthorn|<span style="color:purple;font-size:120%;font-family:Old English Text MT">Seabuckthorn</span>]] [[User talk:Seabuckthorn|<span style="color:darkred">'''♥'''</span>]]</span> 05:18, 15 February 2014 (UTC) |
Besides that, I think the article looks excellent. Please feel free to strike out any recommendation from this review which you think will not help in improving the article which is our main aim here. All the best, {{=3|friend}} --<span style="padding:2px;background:#fffff4">[[User:Seabuckthorn|<span style="color:purple;font-size:120%;font-family:Old English Text MT">Seabuckthorn</span>]] [[User talk:Seabuckthorn|<span style="color:darkred">'''♥'''</span>]]</span> 05:18, 15 February 2014 (UTC) |
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:Thanks for your review and comments. I have revised the history paragraph of the lead, combined some short paragraphs and expanded the PD-art tag on the picture. Do you think they have helped?— [[User:Rodw|Rod]] <sup>[[User talk:Rodw|talk]]</sup> 10:30, 15 February 2014 (UTC) |
:Thanks for your review and comments. I have revised the history paragraph of the lead, combined some short paragraphs and expanded the PD-art tag on the picture. Do you think they have helped?— [[User:Rodw|Rod]] <sup>[[User talk:Rodw|talk]]</sup> 10:30, 15 February 2014 (UTC) |
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::Thanks! The article looks perfect now. {{=3|friend}} --<span style="padding:2px;background:#fffff4">[[User:Seabuckthorn|<span style="color:purple;font-size:120%;font-family:Old English Text MT">Seabuckthorn</span>]] [[User talk:Seabuckthorn|<span style="color:darkred">'''♥'''</span>]]</span> 11:31, 15 February 2014 (UTC) |
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Promoting the article to GA status. {{=3|congrats}} --<span style="padding:2px;background:#fffff4">[[User:Seabuckthorn|<span style="color:purple;font-size:120%;font-family:Old English Text MT">Seabuckthorn</span>]] [[User talk:Seabuckthorn|<span style="color:darkred">'''♥'''</span>]]</span> 11:31, 15 February 2014 (UTC) |
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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 16:02, 10 February 2014 (UTC)
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Hi! My review for this article will be here shortly. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 16:02, 10 February 2014 (UTC)
1: Well-written
- a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
- b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
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Done
Check for WP:LAYOUT: Done
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Done
Check for WP:WTW: Done
Check for WP:MOSFICT: Done
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2: Verifiable with no original research
- a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
- b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary: excellent (Thorough check on Google. Cross-checked with other FAs)
Done
Check for WP:RS: Done Cross-checked with other FAs: Chew Valley Lake, Chew Valley, Mendip Hills, Buildings and architecture of Bristol, Chew Stoke, Exmoor, Somerset, Bath, Somerset, River Parrett, Kennet and Avon Canal
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Check for inline citations WP:MINREF: Done
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- c. No original research: Done
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3: Broad in its coverage
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Cross-checked with other FAs: Chew Valley Lake, Chew Valley, Mendip Hills, Buildings and architecture of Bristol, Chew Stoke, Exmoor, Somerset, Bath, Somerset, River Parrett, Kennet and Avon Canal
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b. Focused:
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4: Neutral
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4. Fair representation without bias: Done
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5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes
6: Images Done (Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 2.0 Generic license) (Creative Commons Attribution-ShareAlike 3.0 License) (PD)
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6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content: Done
6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions: Done
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Rod, I'm very happy and inspired to see your work here. I do have some insights based on the above checklist that I think will improve the article:
I think the lead can be improved in order to provide an accessible overview for the History.The image "Pickwick Papers, la salle de jeux à Bath29.jpeg" has "{{PD-Art}} template without parameter: please specify why the underlying work is public domain in both the source country and the United States". Is it a concern?
Besides that, I think the article looks excellent. Please feel free to strike out any recommendation from this review which you think will not help in improving the article which is our main aim here. All the best, --Seabuckthorn ♥ 05:18, 15 February 2014 (UTC)
- Thanks for your review and comments. I have revised the history paragraph of the lead, combined some short paragraphs and expanded the PD-art tag on the picture. Do you think they have helped?— Rod talk 10:30, 15 February 2014 (UTC)
- Thanks! The article looks perfect now. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 11:31, 15 February 2014 (UTC)
Promoting the article to GA status. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 11:31, 15 February 2014 (UTC)