Talk:Fringe (TV series)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 21:24, 29 April 2012 (UTC)

• Intro: This needs to desperately be expanded. The lede for any article should adequately summarize the entire article, but this only explains the story and what season its on. Maybe model it after this.
• Intro: No need for citations in the intro. I'd move them to their respective locations (i.e., [1] in "Conception", [4] in "Reception", etc.)

 Done. Drovethrughosts (talk) 13:45, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Premise: Maybe add citations for each of the seasons, like season 2
• Premise: Move the citation after "Walternate" to the end of the sentence or paragraph

 Done. Drovethrughosts (talk) 13:45, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Glyph Code: While Fringepedia has the code, I don't think it counts as a reliable source, so I'd remove it.

 Done. Akihironihongo (talk) 23:43, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Recurring Characters: Explain who Nadine Park, also, why is she the only character with a citation?

 Done. Drovethrughosts (talk) 16:03, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Production: The last sentence talks about newel et al, this should be moved and merged to the reception section

 Done. Drovethrughosts (talk) 16:03, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Production: Is there any way casting can be expanded like Production or Conception?
• Casting: Don't forget that a computer-generated Leonard Nimoy appeared in the episode "Letters of Transit"

 Done. Drovethrughosts (talk) 16:03, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Home Video Releases: The second sentence of the first paragraph is unsourced

 Done. Simply removed, as it seemed unnecessary. Drovethrughosts (talk) 16:03, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Home Video Releases: Can you expounded up the third season disc at all?

 Done. Drovethrughosts (talk) 16:03, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Maybe merge "Home Video Releases" into "Other Media" and call it "Media", having subheadings for "Video Releases", "Games", and "Comics

 Done. Drovethrughosts (talk) 13:45, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Reception: "In its 2008 Year in Review, Television Without Pity declared…" This sentence needs citations after every direct quote. Also, remove the space before [84]

 Done. Akihironihongo (talk) 00:51, 8 May 2012 (UTC)

• Reception: "The Daily Herald comments that…" Change to "The Daily Herald commented that"

 Done. Drovethrughosts (talk) 13:51, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Reception: "Entertainment Weekly, which stated "The best new show of the year took a few weeks to grow on me, but now it's a full-blown addiction",[87] the LA Times, calling Walter Bishop one of the best characters of 2008, saying that "the role of the modern-day mad scientist could so easily have been a disaster, but the 'Fringe' writers and the masterful John Noble have conspired to create a character that seems, as trite as it sounds, more Shakespearean than sci-fi."" HUGE run-on sentence. Break this up and rephrase. I'm not entirely sure if it counts as a sentence because the syntax and verbs make no sense. Try "Entertainment Weekly stated "The best new show of the year took a few weeks to grow on me, but now it's a full-blown addiction".[87] The LA Times called Walter Bishop one of the best characters of 2008, noting that "the role of the modern-day mad scientist could so easily have been a disaster, but the 'Fringe' writers and the masterful John Noble have conspired to create a character that seems, as trite as it sounds, more Shakespearean than sci-fi."[88]

 Done. Drovethrughosts (talk) 13:51, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Reception: "Chicago Tribune states that some episodes are…" Change 'states' to 'stated'

 Done. Drovethrughosts (talk) 13:51, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Ratings: The last sentence of the first paragraph is unsourced

 Done. Drovethrughosts (talk) 16:03, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Ratings: "Further promoted by the critical reaction…but asserts that the move will "re-animate" the show." Change 'asserts' to 'asserted'

 Done. Drovethrughosts (talk) 15:00, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Renewal: Watch out for some of the sentences that still have visages of reports before the series was renewed. Make sure they clearly say "before the series was renewed for a final season…" or something like that

 Done. Drovethrughosts (talk) 15:00, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• International Broadcast: A vast majority of this section is simple unsourced and won't fly until there are reliable citations attached

 Done. I removed all unsourced material. Drovethrughosts (talk) 15:00, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Awards: Maybe expand and name the big ones the show has won, like Emmys, if any at all. Also, add a citation

 Done. Akihironihongo (talk) 05:07, 4 May 2012 (UTC)

• References: These all need to be consistent, such as M/D/Y, or MM-DD-YYYY, etc. There are too many different types here

 Done. Used YYYY-MM-DD format. Akihironihongo (talk) 00:41, 8 May 2012 (UTC)

• References: What makes BuddyTV, Seriable, TV Show on DVD, Jib Hi-Fi reliable sources?

 Done? In the context of the section in which the BuddyTV and Seriable refs are located, I think they are verifiable enough to keep in the article (I really don't think BuddyTV is going to photoshop in "observers were here" in the title sequence for personal gain). As for TV show on DVD, I'm not sure if it's unreliable, so I didn't delete the reference; however, I added a reference to amazon.com, which has the release date on it. Finally, I replaced jbhifi references with ones from ezydvd.com.au. Akihironihongo (talk) 02:59, 9 May 2012 (UTC)

• References: Ref 32 (MichaelGiacchionmusic.com) is broken. Also, it seems like a primary source

 Done. Replaced with a Variety article. Drovethrughosts (talk) 15:00, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• References: Some refs link "TV by the Numbers", others don't

 Done. Drovethrughosts (talk) 15:00, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Links: Refs 14, 36, 42, and 71 are dead

 Done. All dead links fixed. Drovethrughosts (talk) 15:13, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Links: 41 and 89 are expiring soon, I would webarchive them to be safe

 Done. They were actually the same ref, so I removed the duplication. Drovethrughosts (talk) 15:00, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

• Links: Ref 38 needs a registration add the {{Subscription required}} template

 Done. Drovethrughosts (talk) 15:00, 3 May 2012 (UTC)

Those are the big issues I see. On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 21:55, 29 April 2012 (UTC)

Things are looking really good. I'll give you guys a little more time to work on this if you need it since it is a big article. :)--Gen. Quon (talk) 02:18, 6 May 2012 (UTC)

Also, now that I've started to watch the show, don't forget that Leonard Nimoy appeared in the last episode and will probably be in the next one as well.--Gen. Quon (talk) 02:20, 6 May 2012 (UTC)