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Tracheal intubation

I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to eventually submit this as a FAC, and I would like to get constructive feedback beforehand. Thanks, DiverDave (talk) 00:06, 7 September 2010 (UTC)

• Impressive work. The quality of the references are outstanding. I'll give a few first impressions then see if I can dig in for more. Remind me in a day or so if you want. 1) There is too much space given to the history given that subtopic's importance to the overall idea. Try to summarize it so space is properly prioritized in the article. In fact do that for everything, but I don't have the clinical knowledge to say whether that's been done for other subtopics. Don't throw away the history material since it's interesting, instead move it to a daughter article ala WP:SS 2) The very last paragraph should be merged in with other related material. It's not separate enough to stand on it's own. 3) When the Barash reference is cited specifically, it's used as "... in Barash & al. (2009)". There are only three authors on that work and in all the reference standards I know of, et al is not used unless there are more authors than that (5 I think in APA). Also, I've never actually seen & al. used. In this case, probably all three authors names should be spelled out. - Taxman ^Talk 14:31, 17 September 2010 (UTC)