You should add that H1 dissipated over Arizona. That is very unusual! There is very little mentioned about the system remaining a TS over land so far. You should include some more observations. I believe HURDAT mentioned that El Paso or somewhere near there recorded TS winds, which was the basis for maintaining it so far inland.
"A trough developed near Cape Verde around September 11." - you sure it wasn't a tropical wave? And you don't say that this was the genesis for H2.
Hmm, it probably was a tropical wave, which is a trough--12george1 (talk) 03:43, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
"the system peaked with maximum sustained winds of 155 mph (250 km/h) and a minimum barometric pressure of 924 mbar (27.3 inHg)." - what was the basis for the estimate for the peak winds?
Nothing recorded that wind speed. It was adjusted upward significantly from 100 knots. I'm guess it was due to the pressure-wind relationship? "ship the Potomac recorded 924 mb ... suggests winds of 137 kt and 134 kt from the Brown et al. intensifying hurricane pressure-wind relationships ... Winds analyzed to be 135 kt at 18Z on the 25th, up from 100 kt originally." Should I mention the pressure-wind relationship?--12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
You have three separate sentences describing boats being ruined or wrecked in the H2 section. Could you please combine?
I'm not sure how I can do that --12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
"Further north" - any time you deal with direction or distance, use "Farther"
"Historical weather maps indicate that a low pressure area was embedded within a west to east oriented stationary front on September 24." - you should add a general location
Unfortunately, the only thing META shows is "northwest Atlantic Ocean." No coordinates are given, so I can't get anymore specific than that.--12george1 (talk) 19:17, 11 August 2014 (UTC)
"Early on September 25, a tropical depression formed just west of Bermuda. Later that day, the depression strengthened into a tropical storm." - there are several examples in this article, but this one works well. You have a habit of writing very short, choppy sentences, when one single sentence would work much better.