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Reviewer: Sarastro1 (talk · contribs) 20:10, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Another good one. No real problems, and I'm nit-picking a little. My only concern (and I'm not the best one to address this) is how accessible this would be to the non-cricketer. But this is GA, not FAC and I don't see this as a problem here at all. But it may be worth bearing in mind if you take it further. However, I think a few more links would help.

  • Do we really need to make the point about Australia (traditional rivals, main adversary) twice?
  • "Patient half-century" is slightly POV; slow or cautious may be better.
  • "helped to restrict the run chase": Not sure you can restrict a run-chase. A total, yes, but not a chase. Maybe "slowed the run chase"? And should run chase be hyphenated?
  • "South Africa fell apart in their chase": a little too journalistic?
  • Without a doubt. I've changed it to "struggled in their chase". Could do with being a little stronger maybe, but it gets more or less the same point across. Harrias talk 21:07, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "led by a century": A hint of sports-speak again.
  • "New Zealand set a record second wicket parternership in their final match": A record for who, and in what competition? All ODIs or just WC matches?
  • "Shelley Nitschke strangled the run scoring": And again, journalese.
  • "New Zealand collapsed to 101 for 7, during which middle-order batsmen Sara McGlashan and Aimee Mason both got starts": Not sure it sounds quite right, getting starts during a collapse.
  • Not sure that toiled is an improvement, to be honest. Maybe "Although middle-order batsmen Sara McGlashan and Aimee Mason both got starts, New Zealand collapsed to 101 for 7."? Sarastro1 (talk) 13:16, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "despite not hitting the ball.[25] Despite their struggles": Despite… despite
  • Unless I've missed it, the only mention of Shaw as MoM is in the lead.
  • Maybe some more links: partnership, fours, sixes, mid-on, seam, spin
  • Images, links and dablinks all check out fine. Spot-checks reveal no problems.

As usual, a few minor copy-edits, but feel free to revert. I'll put this on hold for the moment, but it's another easy pass. Good stuff. Sarastro1 (talk) 20:31, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I've addressed the first half of the points, will have to come back to the second half. Cheers for the review. Harrias talk 21:07, 6 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Last minor point to sort, then I'll pass. Sarastro1 (talk) 13:17, 13 June 2012 (UTC)[reply]