Talk:2010 Auto Club 500/GA2

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GA Review[edit]

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Reviewer: Airplaneman 17:09, 14 August 2010 (UTC)

In order to save space, all unsigned comments are mine.

  • Closing comments: Thanks to all who participated for addressing the issues quickly. Because of that, the article has gone from this to this in less than three days. In its current condition, the article meets the good article criteria, and I will pass it. However, I do have a few suggestions for further improvement beyond GA status. Included are the comments under "Other info that would be nice but I don't think is necessary for a good article" in the first GA review. This will help beef up the prose a bit and add a bit more to the article. And, as always, more reliable third party references couldn't hurt. I'm sure there are a couple more out there! Overall, fantastic work. I am more than happy to put {{Good article}} on this article. Airplaneman 01:16, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
  • Edit made.
  • "The track's turns are banked at fourteen degrees, while the front stretch, the location of the finish line, is banked at eleven degrees." - please link/define "banked". Also, any info on the banking of the backstretch? Done Nascar1996 Contributions / Guestbook 23:20, 16 August 2010 (UTC)
Practices and qualifying
Race summary
  • I'm not sure why you removed the info on broadcasting (radio and TV networks) that used to be in the lead. I think it'd fit well here in this section in the first paragraph. Done; it is in the infobox and the section now. Nascar1996 Contributions / Guestbook 04:27, 15 August 2010 (UTC)
  • I've copyedited the section and added a citation needed tag.
    • (edit conflict) I have reworded that paragraph to correspond to the source and replaced the citation needed tag with a citation. ~NSD () 00:05, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
  • Paragraph one, last sentence: "Between around laps 35 to 40" pick one preposition or the other, not both. I would go for "between", as it fits better. Done Nascar1996 Contributions / Guestbook 00:04, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
  • "On lap 57, the first caution period of the race was called because of debris." debris where? (Most likely on the track, but just to make sure...) Done Nascar1996 Contributions / Guestbook 00:04, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
  • The second paragraph is very short. Could you add some info from laps 61 to 92? (maybe lead changes and stuff like that) Done Nascar1996 Contributions / Guestbook 00:54, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
    • If its not there now, I doubt there were any because when I added the race summary to this article, I tried to get all the lead changes. This race was not very exciting like 2010 Toyota/Save Mart 250 or 2010 Showtime Southern 500. Nascar1996 Contributions / Guestbook
      • OK. It is still relatively short, containing only four short sentences. I have combined it with paragraph three.
        • And I've restructured the section into four moderately-sized paragraphs. Please add a citation where I put the tag. Other than that, everything else looks good.
  • "Then, on lap 140, the third caution came out because Montoya's engine failed, causing him to collide with the turn one wall." - where is turn one? Try something like "Then, on lap 140, the third caution came out because Montoya's engine failed, causing him to collide with the wall at turn one (the first turn after the finish line)." Also, was it the inside or outside wall?
  • "The fourth caution, caused by the blown engine of Ryan Newman, came out on lap 147." the word "blown" sounds a bit too informal to me for an encyclopedia article. Try something different, preferably not "failed" if you can since it was used in the last sentence. Done expired Nascar1996 Contributions / Guestbook 00:04, 17 August 2010 (UTC)
  • "No cautions were called until Brad Keselowski collided with the turn four..." again, please define "turn four". Was it the inside or outside wall? Done Nascar1996 Contributions / Guestbook 00:04, 17 August 2010 (UTC)