Talk:2011 Heritage Classic/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Harrias ^talk 12:10, 27 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

Pretty good article overall, it's unusual for me to go through one of these articles without lots of nitpicky copy edit style comments, but there isn't too much wrong here!

Is there an article you can link to for "regular season" I know it's pretty obvious to hockey fans, but probably not so for a layperson.

Done.

Per WP:DEFINITE, avoid using 'a' or 'the' in section titles as you've done in "A second outdoor game"

Indeed. I figured it reads better than "Second outdoor game", and can't think of a better section title. Removed the A, however.

In that section it states ".. has been met .." – has should be altered to the past tense "had".

Fixed

Personally, I'd drop the Entertainment section below the Game summary: it seems strange having it between the two sections describing the game itself.

Good point, but I moved it up, since the section primaraly deals with pre-game activities.

In the Scoring summary, you need to explain what the numbers in brackets represent.

I've linked to Win-loss record for now, but would rather explain that via tool tip. Damned if I can find the syntax to do it though.

No idea, but it's good like it is for the moment. I was actually referring to the numbers in the Scoring summary: for example the 18 in "Rene Bourque (18) (PP)" – I assume it means it is his 18th goal of the season (and similar for assists), but it could do with explanation. Harrias ^talk 17:17, 27 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

There's really nothing I can link to that would make it obvious. Only thing I can suggest is to remove the bracketed numbers. Knowing that Bourque, for instance, scored is more important than knowing it was his 18th goal at some random point in the season. Reso lute 17:21, 27 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Or maybe put a note at the end of the section, something along the lines of "Note: the number given in parentheses after the players name (eg. "Player Name (x)") signifies that the goal or assist is that player's xth of the season." Harrias ^talk 17:43, 27 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Works for me, done. Reso lute 18:54, 27 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

It might also be worth having a discussion at WT:HOCKEY regarding the best way to represent the boxscore, as this article differs greatly from 58th National Hockey League All-Star Game which I recently reviewed. Consistency over this sort of formatting is definitely preferable.

Probably a good idea. This article is consistent with other outdoor game articles, however.

Yeah, I'm happy to pass it with the current format, I just thought it would be something worth looking at overall: both are perfectly acceptable to me. Harrias ^talk 17:17, 27 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

You need to provide a key for the Team rosters: all the headings to the right of position need explaining, and in the goaltender section, to the right of Result, (C) and (A) need explanation, and Scratches could do with either a link or explanation.

First usage of each abbreviation has been wikilinked.

Hope my comments are useful, and don't seem too nitpicky! Harrias ^talk 12:45, 27 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

Not at all! Thanks for the review, and hopefully I have addressed your concerns. Cheers, Reso lute 16:48, 27 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]

All my concerns have been addressed: looks like another Good article for WP:HOCKEY! Harrias ^talk 19:20, 27 March 2011 (UTC)[reply]