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GA Review

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Reviewer: Bcschneider53 (talk · contribs) 16:11, 30 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one. Comments may not come in for a few days though. Hold me accountable if I forget about this. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 16:11, 30 December 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

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  • "All drivers elected to switch into their second cars, and Buemi kept the lead at the lap-26 restart." Two things here, 1) I assume you mean they all changed cars under the safety car? and 2) is the hyphen in "lap-26" necessary? I've never used it in any of my NASCAR race reports...
  • "The result meant Buemi moved further ahead" Can we just say, "The result moved Buemi further ahead" to simplify a bit?

Background

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  • I was at first a bit confused when I saw di Grassi wasn't concerned about the championship, that is until I clicked on the ref and saw the context. Perhaps adding his quote, "It’s very early to be talking about the championship. We’re [on] round five, there’s another eight to go" would help?

Practice and qualifying

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  • "Unlike the preceding four races, the Friday shakedown session was not held." Any reason why? I know Monaco's F1 practice sessions are run on Thursday for various reasons but a casual reader might not know that.

Race

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  • "The field settled down for the next six laps with nothing notable of note occurring." 'Notable of note' sounds like something from the Department of the Redundancy Department; I think 'nothing notable occurring' is fine here.
  • "Elsewhere, Gutiérrez was investigated by the stewards for an unsafe pit stop release but elected not to penalise the driver." Not a fan of the passive voice here; makes it seem as Gutiérrez elected not to hand out a penalty. I'd suggest "the stewards investigated Gutiérrez..."

Post-race

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  • "The top three drivers appeared on the podium to collect their trophies and in a later press conference." Something seems incomplete with the "press conference" part of the sentence here.

Minor issues here, but an excellent job overall once again. You may have potential for a featured topic here. On hold. --Bcschneider53 (talk) 18:04, 2 January 2018 (UTC)[reply]