Talk:A Rush of Blood to the Head/GA1

GA Review

Lead

• The lead needs to be longer per WP:LEAD. It needs to summarise the entire article. There is pretty much no information from the first four sections of the article and I would suggest more information is particularly needed on the "Recording" and "Music and lyrics" sections.
  • Added some info., not sure if that helps. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 22:45, 2 October 2008 (UTC)
• "The British Phonographic Industry has since certified the album 8x Platinum for its accumulated sales of over 2.6 million units." 8x Platinum is a bit jargony. I would suggest eight-times platinum.
  • I think I got it. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 22:28, 2 October 2008 (UTC)

Background

• "Despite this, while making A Rush of Blood to the Head, the band did not feel of a sophomore slump pressure." I'm not sure what this means.
  • I think it means that maybe then weren't pressured to record a second album. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 22:28, 2 October 2008 (UTC)
    • I still don't understand what this means. Peanut4 (talk) 17:14, 5 October 2008 (UTC)
      • Sophomore slump refers to the lower sales of a second album compared to the first album. A lot of music-related news articles are using that phrase. --Efe (talk) 05:57, 6 October 2008 (UTC)
        • No worries. I've removed the word "of" from the sentence, I don't think it is necessary. I've also removed "a"; the noun pressure rarely needs the indefinite article, and I don't think it does here either. Peanut4 (talk) 22:38, 6 October 2008 (UTC)
• "The band started recording in London, while Parachutes was still picking up sales." What do you specifically mean by "picking up sales"?
  • I think it means that the album was still selling. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 22:28, 2 October 2008 (UTC)
    • I can't see any changes to these two concerns. I still don't understand what the first thing means, and the second query - surely all albums are still selling? Peanut4 (talk) 20:01, 4 October 2008 (UTC)
      • What's wrong with the phrasing? Yes, all albums are still selling. That's why some get certified platinum after 10 years, for example. --Efe (talk) 09:48, 5 October 2008 (UTC)
        • The article currently says Coldplay recorded "A Rush of Blood to the Head" while "Parachutes" was "picking up sales". You say "picking up sales" means selling. The way it reads, it doesn't sound particularly important to me. Surely any band make a new album, while the previous album is still selling. Either "picking up sales" doesn't just mean "selling" or I've totally missed something. Peanut4 (talk) 17:14, 5 October 2008 (UTC)
          • Re-edited. --Efe (talk) 05:57, 6 October 2008 (UTC)

Recording

• "By Monday, they would present to their band mates something they had developed." Which Monday? Or was this every Monday?
  • Every Monday. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 22:28, 2 October 2008 (UTC)
• "While A Rush of Blood to the Head was near in completion," Do you mean "nearly completed"?
  • Got it. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 22:28, 2 October 2008 (UTC)

Music and lyrics

• "The album includes "guitar-pop", ballads, and acoustic songs. However, the U2-esque epic rock of the album's opening track "Politik", the piano-driven "Clocks", and the loud guitars of "A Whisper" were seen as an extension of the band's musical range." Do you have a reference for this?
  • Found one. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 23:22, 2 October 2008 (UTC)

Release and reception

• "The album was released two months delayed from its original release date." I don't think this quite makes sense with two past participles, and also uses the word release twice. Consider rewording.
  • Would this maybe work ---> "The album's original release was for June 2002, however, it was delayed to August 2002, as Martin felt that the album sounded rubbish"? I don't know, something like that? --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 22:28, 2 October 2008 (UTC)
    • I did something in this line. Dunno if it fits. --Efe (talk) 12:54, 4 October 2008 (UTC)
• "In 2000, it was awarded Best Album at the Q Awards." I presume this year is wrong since it is two years before the album was released.
  • Fixed. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 22:28, 2 October 2008 (UTC)

Critical reviews

• You use "compliment" three times in the first couple of sentences and four times in total. Consider finding alternatives.
  • I made some changes. Don't know if there alright. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 22:28, 2 October 2008 (UTC)

Commercial performance

• 8x Platinum, 5x Platinum and 4x Platinum. See above.
  • I think I got it. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 22:28, 2 October 2008 (UTC)
• "more stronger than its predecessor," You don't need "more" and "stronger" together.
  • Got it. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 22:28, 2 October 2008 (UTC)
    • You've removed all of "more stronger" so it doesn't make sense now. Peanut4 (talk) 20:03, 4 October 2008 (UTC)
      • Added back the word stronger. --Efe (talk) 09:48, 5 October 2008 (UTC)

Credits

• Wikilink anyone not previously linked.
  • Added links. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 22:28, 2 October 2008 (UTC)

A bit to do, but nothing substantial, so I'll put it on hold for now. Peanut4 (talk) 22:01, 2 October 2008 (UTC)

I think we're done? Please check Cavie. Thanks. --Efe (talk) 13:15, 4 October 2008 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Pretty much the same to say as X&Y. A very good read, and I hope you agree the improvements at GA have helped. Hopefully you can push it on to FAC either in the near future or at a later date, and I would make the same recommendations as X&Y to do so. Best of luck with the article. Peanut4 (talk) 22:47, 6 October 2008 (UTC)

Thanks Peanut for the review, and for the help. We appreciate it. --Efe (talk) 01:12, 7 October 2008 (UTC)