Talk:Ace Driver/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:22, 3 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Will take on this review. MWright96 (talk) 19:22, 3 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Lede

"and to avoid collision with opponents and other obstacles." - there is the missing word "a" between "avoid" and "collision" Done
"with assistance by Pole Position designer Shinichiro Okamoto." - from Done
"The arcade cabinet is known for being heavier than Namco's other cabinets," - try to avoid using the phrase "is known for" Done
"The development team took care into producing the game's controls to make them responsive and easy to use, which Okamoto recalls being as responsive as moving a shopping cart." - replace one of the mentions of the word "responsive" with a similarly formal word Done
"A PlayStation home conversion was announced in 1995, but was never released." - How about A PlayStation home conversion announced in 1995 went unreleased.? Done

Gameplay

"The player can also choose between Automatic or Manual transmission, which respectively disable and enable the use of the gear shift," - this text is not mentioned in the source coupled with it. Thus an additional reference that explicitly states this information will be required
~~"Cars also carry advertisements featuring names of older" - you're missing the word "the" between "featuring" and "names" in this sentence~~
"The player can also choose between Automatic or Manual transmission," - the word "an" is needed between the words "between" and "Automatic" Done

Development and release

"with assistance by Pole Position designer Shinichiro Okamoto." - same issue as raised with the second point in the lede section Done
"is known for being much heavier than Namco's other arcade cabinets," - same issue as raised with the third point in the lede section Done
- I haven't seen this issue addressed at all in the article. MWright96 (talk)
"was stated to have been dangerous if the cabinet was placed up against the wall," - I believe in the event would be a better substitute to replace the text highlighted in bold style="background: #FFD; color:black; vertical-align: middle; text-align: center; " class="partial table-partial"|Some

Reception

"being praised for its impressive technological capabilities and realistic graphics." - by whom? Players, reviewers, the gaming industery? Done
"The game was also a commercial hit" Commerical hit looks informal to my eyes. It could be easily stated that the game was a "Commercial success" Done
"thanks to the Namco Super System 22 arcade hardware it ran on." - better; due to its Namco Super System 22 arcade operating hardware. Done
"They concluded their review with that" - by saying style="background: #FFD; color:black; vertical-align: middle; text-align: center; " class="partial table-partial"|Some
"and bad collision detection," - the word poor is a more formal to replace the text in bold in this section of text
- Have not seen any changes regarding the point above. MWright96 (talk) 13:07, 6 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Sequels and legacy

"featuring additional tracks and vehicles to select, alongside a new "Championship" gameplay mode." - elimimnate the text in bold because it is redundant Done
"A home conversion of Ace Driver for the PlayStation was announced to be in development in August 1995, however it was never released." - in August 1995; it was not released. Done
"The soundtrack for Ace Driver was released in 1995 by Victor Entertainment as part of their Namco Game Sound Express album series." - this statement is currently uncited and will require a reliable source to be attacted to it Done
Also, the same sentence could be reworded to say Victor Entertainment released the soundtrack to Ace Driver as part of its Namco Game Sound Express album series in 1995. Done

References

~~References 3, 4, 6 and 8 needed to state the languages in which they were written in~~
- I intentionally didn't include the language name for the first three refs as I found them redundant to have, since the titles are already in Japanese and it seems pretty obvious to readers that the articles themselves are in Japanese. Namcokid 47 ^(Contribs) 00:17, 4 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]
The link in the fifth references directs the reader to pages 10 and 11 and not 30 and 30 as stated in the article mainspace Done
The archive link for reference 11 directs the user to a 404 error page. This will need to be addressed Done

Overall there are some minor issues concerning the prose in the article, along with some information included that is not explicitly stated in the sources provided, some of the links to view the references that are used and the non-inclusion of language parameters in all three of the foreign language sources. Will put the review on hold. MWright96 (talk) 21:07, 3 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: Okay, I believe I fixed everything you brought up in the review. Namcokid 47 ^(Contribs) 03:52, 6 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@MWright96: Fixed the rest of the issues that I forgot to correct. Namcokid 47 ^(Contribs) 15:29, 6 November 2019 (UTC)[reply]