Talk:Action of 30 May 1798/GA1
The strategy was particularly effective in the English Channel, where the proximity of British bases and the importance in limiting the movements of the French invasion forces stationed around Boulogne focused British attention on the Normandy coast, where a large force of invasion barges had been constructed under the guidance of a Captain Muskein This is awkward. ...where the proximity....where a large force... Could you rewrite this sentence? Also, a simple map might help here.
To improve the Royal Navy's ability to observe French movements on the Normandy coast, the uninhabited Îles Saint-Marcouf were seized and garrisoned by a force under Captain Sir Sidney Smith in 1795, who placed Lieutenant Charles Price in command. To improve the Royal Navy's ability to observe French movements on the Normandy coast, a force under the command of Captain Sir Sidney Smith seized and garrisoned the islands in 1795. Before he left, he placed Lt. Charles Price in command of the garrison...
Section on Battle. You call it a battle here, but in the title it is an "action"....Initially I was confused because I thought you were referring to the Battle of Saint Marcouf (which you discussed in the background section).
Laforey was able to concentrate his broadside against Vésuve rapidly forcing the corvette to turn inshore, pursued by Vesuvius and Trial. I really don't know who was doing what--confusion over the two names.
set off in pursuit=pursued?
I made a couple of minor tweaks and broke a large paragraph in the second to last section. Would you look at what I've done, and possibly clarify your prose a bit more? Otherwise, nice article, and I see no problem with GA. Auntieruth55 (talk) 15:38, 31 October 2009 (UTC)
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