Talk:Apostolic Faith Mission of South Africa/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Pyrotec (talk · contribs) 09:29, 8 June 2012 (UTC)

I will review. Pyrotec (talk) 09:29, 8 June 2012 (UTC)

Initial comments

I've had a quick look at this nomination, but I've not checked any references, etc, on this basis the article appears to be at or about GA-level.

I'm now undertaking a more detailed review: starting at the History section, working down to the end and then doing the WP:Lead last. This process may take a day or so. Pyrotec (talk) 10:13, 10 June 2012 (UTC)

• History -
  • Early history: 1908-1912 -

• Y Pyrotec (talk) 18:37, 23 June 2012 (UTC) - In the first paragraph it states (and it's referenced): "First, revivals in the Dutch Reformed Church (DRC) in 1860, 1874 and 1884 ....". OK, but what does this have to do with South Africa (It's not at all clear)? For example, were these revivals in the DRC in South Africa, the DRC was active in South Africa, etc, etc?
• Otherwise, OK.

• • 1913-1969: Divisions, institutionalization, accommodation -

• The first sentence of the first paragraph states: "The return of Lake and Hezmalhalch to America was an important turning point for the AFM." It's rather vague, when did they return to the US?
• Otherwise, OK.

• • Recent history -

• Looks OK.

• Beliefs -

• Ref 19 is not fully referenced. It has a named publisher, but that is not given in the citation.

• Worship -

• Ref 20 is a book. The relevant page or page numbers should be given in the citation.
• Otherwise, OK.

• Organization -

• Looks OK.

...stopping for now. To be continued. Pyrotec (talk) 10:54, 10 June 2012 (UTC)

• Theological Training -

• The term or abbreviation AFMTS is used without explanation.
• Otherwise, OK.

• WP:Lead -

• This is intended to both introduce the article and to provide a summary of the main points.
• It's good at introducing the article, but it does not provide a particularly good summary. In respect of the "summary aspect": the emphasis given to material in the lead should roughly reflect its importance to the topic. I'm not sure that it does.
• It includes two statements "It is a member of the Apostolic Faith Mission International, a fellowship of 23 AFM national churches. It is also a member of the South African Council of Churches.[5]" that are not mentioned in the body of the article, but I'm willing to "overlook this".

At this point, I'm putting the review On Hold for these points to be addressed. Pyrotec (talk) 21:40, 10 June 2012 (UTC)

Closing review

The nominator has been inactive on Wikepedia since 7th April 2012, but did respond to an email on 11th June 2012. There are still outstanding comments above, but these are not sufficient to cause me to withhold GA. I'm therefore closing this review and awarding the article GA-status. Pyrotec (talk) 18:37, 23 June 2012 (UTC)