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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 10:05, 4 January 2019 (UTC)
Will take a look at the article on this tennis player. MWright96 (talk) 10:05, 4 January 2019 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Early life and background
[edit]- "Her father ... is a Ngarigo Indigenous Australian through one of his grandmothers." What about his immediate paternal ethnic origin? — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2620:117:502C:7F:0:0:0:D030 (talk) 12:43, 24 June 2019 (UTC)
- "Her father works in the government" - Perhaps say whether Robert Barty works in the local, state or federal government if stated?
- That's all it says. (see here) Sportsfan77777 (talk) 02:31, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- Wikilink netball
- "Barty also played netball as a kid," - informal; should be child
- "As a kid, Barty also practised at home," - same as above
- "she was practising against boys that were six years older." - who were
Junior career
[edit]- "Barty reached a career high ITF junior ranking of No. 2 in the world," - try; career-high ITF world junior ranking of No. 2,
- "while also capturing a Grade 2 title." - which Grade 2 title?
- added "in Thailand" Sportsfan77777 (talk) 02:35, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- "Barty produced another impressive singles result," - try to avoid working such as "impressive"
- changed to "strong" Sportsfan77777 (talk) 02:35, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- "She closed out the season by winning" - concluded for variety
2010–2012: Australian Open debut at 15, top 200
[edit]- "Her first pro match win" - know what this means but it should be professional for formality.
- "she entered a few more $25K events in Australia" - How many $25K events exactly?
- Clarified (three). Sportsfan77777 (talk) 02:44, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- Wikilink Wildcard to Wild card (sports); also be consistent on whether it should be one word or two words
- standardized to "wildcard" (which I think is the preferred Australian English variant). Sportsfan77777 (talk) 02:44, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- "She then made her Grand Slam main draw debut the very next week" - "very" is reduntant
- Removed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 02:44, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- "She compiled a singles record of 34–4 in nine tournaments to go along with" - accompany
- Changed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 02:44, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- "She won four ITF titles in each of singles and doubles." in both
- Changed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 02:44, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- "having first cracked the top 200" - entered
- Changed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 02:44, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- "top 200 of the WTA singles rankings a few weeks earlier" - How many weeks exactly?
- Clarified (three). Sportsfan77777 (talk) 02:44, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
2013: Team competitions
[edit]- Wikilink tiebreak to Tiebreaker for non-Tennis readers
Barty's only other two tour-level singles
[edit]- "Barty's only other two tour-level singles wins of the year" - change this to Barty's two other tour-level singles wins of 2013
Doubles: Three Grand Slam finals, one WTA title
[edit]- "This success also helped Barty 'jump nearly 100 spots in the rankings to world No. 46." - advance nearly 100 spots in the world rankings to No. 46.
- "where they were up a break with a set in hand in both finals." - ahead by a break
- "up a break" is the standard way to say it. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 02:53, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
2014: Singles struggles, continued doubles success
[edit]- "This turned out to be her only singles main draw win of the year at any level" - It transpired to be her only
- changed to "This transpired to be..." Sportsfan77777 (talk) 02:55, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
2014–16: Hiatus from tennis, switch to cricket
[edit]- Wikilink Australian women's national team to Australia women's national cricket team
- Add a wiklink to the Queensland Cricket article
- I think this is the organization the runs cricket in Queensland in general, not the club. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:01, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- "She was intrigued by the opportunity to play a team sport as a change from the individual sport of tennis." - disclipne
- I don't know if I would describe cricket and tennis as different "disciplines". Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:01, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- "good for sixth in the competition out of eight teams." - good for sixth out of eight teams in the competition.
2016: Return to tennis
[edit]- "At first, she only competed in doubles events on the ITF circuit" - She initally only competed
- "She was happy with her performance, saying" - a comma is needed after the word "saying"
Singles: First WTA title, world No. 17
[edit]- "Near the start of the year, Barty picked up her first ever wins at the Australian Open" - first career Australian Open wins
- "Barty's next tournament was the Malaysian Open where she had won " - remove "had"
- Clarified to "where had won her first WTA match four years earlier". Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:05, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- "and helped her crack the top 100" - enter
- "She was knocked out of the tournament by" - eliminated from
- "and to qualify for the WTA Elite Trophy at the end of the season." - season-ending WTA Elite Trophy.
- "season-ending" in sports usually means "premature season-ending" (e.g. due to injury, or elimination) Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:05, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
Doubles: Fourth Grand Slam runner-up, WTA Finals berth
[edit]- "Barty and Dellacqua reached the quarterfinals or better at three out of four Grand Slam tournaments during the year." - at three out of the four Grand Slam tournaments during 2017.
- Changed to "during the 2017 season". Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:07, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- "They had narrowly missed qualifying for the event back in 2013" - remove "back"
- "Individually, Barty also established a new career-high doubles ranking of No. 11 in the world towards the very end of the season." - a new career-high world doubles ranking of No. 11 towards the season's end.
- Changed to "a new career-high world doubles ranking of No. 11 towards end of the season". Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:07, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
Team competitions
[edit]- "Barty won both of her singles match against the Netherlands" - matches
Singles: WTA Elite Trophy, world No. 15
[edit]- "Barty had an excellent start to the season" - try to avoid wording such as "excellent" for cases like this
- changed to "strong". Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:10, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- "she was able to qualify for the year-end" - year-ending
- "year-end" is the standard expression. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:11, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
Doubles: First Grand Slam and Premier Mandatory titles
[edit]- "The first also helped Barty climb to a career-best of world No. 5 in the WTA doubles rankings." - a career-best WTA doubles world ranking of No. 5.
- "Barty and Vandeweghe had lost the first set" - remove "had"
- "their two big titles were enough" - major titles
- "major titles" means something else in tennis. "big titles" is a standard generic term. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:16, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
Playing style
[edit]- "Barty has also done well on hard courts," - performed
- Done (no pun intended...) Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:22, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- "Barty's short stature and diverse array of shots have led her to be compared to former world No. 1 and five-time Grand Slam singles champion Martina Hingis." - compared by whom?
- added "by David Taylor, one of Hingis's former coaches" Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:22, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- Wikilink groundstrokes, forehand, backhand and aces to their respective articles for non-tennis readers
Personal life
[edit]- "and ended up playing semi-pro" - professional
- "during the second half of that break." - change the text in bold to hitatus or something similar to avoid close reptititon of "break"
- "The associated Indigenous Tennis Program expects they will reach over 1000 children" - more than would be better here
References
[edit]- What makes Flashscore a reliable source?
- Flashscore is a go-to source for match statistics in tennis (and most other sports as well). They record how matches play out point-by-point. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:29, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
That's my lot. Will put the article on hold to give you time to make the necessary changes. MWright96 (talk) 14:27, 9 January 2019 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review, MWright96! I made most of the changes, and noted the issues where I disagreed. Sportsfan77777 (talk) 03:33, 10 January 2019 (UTC)
- @Sportsfan77777: Am now going to promote to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 15:54, 10 January 2019 (UTC)