Talk:Banksia serrata/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 21:28, 10 July 2017 (UTC)

Happy to offer a review. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:28, 10 July 2017 (UTC)

• "is usually the dominant plant in scrubland or low woodland." Perhaps "throughout its range" or something would be a useful addition.

done Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:04, 10 July 2017 (UTC)

• "0.9 to 1 centimetre (1⁄4 to 1⁄2 in)" Hardly!

tweaked Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:04, 10 July 2017 (UTC)

• "again showed the three eastern species to form a group" Could this be rephrased?

like this? Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:06, 10 July 2017 (UTC)

• Dieback is mentioned twice in slightly different ways; could this be looked into?

tweaked, stray quote marks removed. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 18:17, 11 July 2017 (UTC)

• "In cultivation, though relatively resistant to 'dieback', it does require a well drained soil, preferably fairly sandy and a sunny aspect, with a pH from 5.5 to 7.5.[39] Summer watering is also helpful. Note that the plant may take several years to flower, although plants grown from cuttings may flower in two years." A bit "how to".

I tried this Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 18:22, 11 July 2017 (UTC)

• "The timber has been used in boatbuilding and is strong, durable and attractively patterned.[6] Red-pink it resembles English oak.[39]" The second sentence needs work, I think. I'm also not keen on "attractive".

rejigged Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 18:25, 11 July 2017 (UTC)

That's all that jumps out on a first read-through. I'll be back to look into sources and images. Please double-check my edits. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:55, 10 July 2017 (UTC)

edits look fine Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 22:08, 10 July 2017 (UTC)

Looking at the sources, I'm seeing a little bit of inconsistency on formatting (check publisher locations and publishers for journals, for example) but I'm not going to fuss about that for GAC. The Calodema ref threw me a little. The way you cite Australian National Botanic Gardens is a little inconsistent. But, ultimately, nothing to hold up promotion here. I'll be back for a final look-through soon. Josh Milburn (talk) 21:50, 14 July 2017 (UTC)

The sourcing/licesning on File:Saw Banksia flowers cropped.jpg needs to be looking into, I think. And I confess I'm unclear on the licensing of File:Banksia serrata0.jpg. Other than that, images look good; I love the cockatoo. I added an image of one of the cultivars. Josh Milburn (talk) 19:32, 16 July 2017 (UTC)

I replaced the first one with file:Banksia Serrata, Proteaceae, Australian Flora.jpg. I am amazed we have no clear shots of old flower spikes with follicles apart from that very old one! I can take a snap today I am sure..or look for something on one of my hard drives Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 21:52, 16 July 2017 (UTC)

Been cursed @J Milburn: - been to busy to find a garden or street plant near me (winter here so dark early!). Finally realised I did upload File:Banksia serrata follicles.jpg over a decade ago! Substituted now... Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:07, 20 July 2017 (UTC)

Great! No further comments, and I will promote now. Josh Milburn (talk) 12:30, 20 July 2017 (UTC)