Talk:Billie Eilish/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 23:34, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:34, 20 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

Infobox looks good.
Add a serial comma after "Song of the Year".

Early life

Add a comma after "dancing".

Career

Add commas after "Goldhouse", Jerry Folk, "live session EP", "November 17, 2019", "March 9, 2020",
"sleep hit" → "sleeper hit"
"single February 13" → "single on February 13"
Add a serial comma after "Song of the Year".
Some of the last paragraphs in this section are composed of "On [date], she did [this]". Try removing the repetition and combining some paragraphs.

Artistry

Add commas after "produces her music", Green Day, and Childish Gambino.
That being said, remove the comma after "style choices".

Awards and nominations

Add a serial comma after "Song of the Year".

Public image

This section looks good.

Activism

The last sentence needs a reference.
Remove the comma after 2020 Democratic National Convention.

Personal life and discography

Both of these sections look good.

Tours

Each tour needs a reference.

Filmography

Each film needs a source.

References

Archive all archivable sources (either manually or with this tool).
NME.COM → NME
adage.com → Ad Age
People Magazine → People
V Magazine → V
Fix references titled "Archived copy".
There appears to be an error with the reference after "for her award" (broken parameters).
Fix references using the Wayback Machine template (such as the one after "James Bond theme song").
Fix the cite bundles after "Eilish's vocals", "Finneas' help", and "major-label contract".
The references after "construction worker" and "emo pop" should not be in capital letters per WP:SHOUT.
In the reference after "$53 million", remove "| NME".
The reference after "IHeartMedia members" goes to the home page of a website (I would remove it).
The reference after "female collaboration" is missing several parameters.
The last three references are missing "|first=" and "|last=" parameters.
Mark the reference after "December 18, 2001" with "|url-access=subscription".
Mark references from Los Angeles Times with "|url-access=limited".
Mark references from The Atlantic with "|url-access=limited".
Mark references from The New York Times with "|url-access=limited".
Mark references from The New Yorker with "|url-access=limited".
Mark references from Rolling Stone with "|url-access=limited".
Mark references from Vanity Fair with "|url-access=limited".

Progress

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Comments

Notifying @Trillfendi to tell them that they have until March 30, 2021, (7 days after I added comments) to address or add their own comments to the Good Article Nomination (GAN) page, or I will fail this article per WP:GAN/I#R3. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 20:44, 28 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Some Dude From North Carolina can I complete the review instead? I’m one of the editors the has helped expand the article in the past. The Ultimate Boss (talk)

@The Ultimate Boss: Anyone can complete the review, so feel free to do so. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 11:44, 30 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Some Dude From North Carolina Done with all the issues. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 23:59, 30 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@The Ultimate Boss: A few issues still need to be addressed before I can pass the article. To start, add a comma after "live session EP", fix the errors in the references after "December 18, 2001" and "special election", and archive the new sources that were added during this review. Additionally, the cite bundles need to be fixed (see WP:CITEBUNDLE; an example can be found here), and the last three references (along with others) are missing "|first=" and "|last=" parameters. The only reference in #Opening_act also appears to be missing. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 00:19, 31 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Some Dude From North Carolina I promise I will complete this tomorrow afternoon. I just have been very busy finishing up high school before I head to college in the summer. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 06:03, 31 March 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I never saw a notification but at the same time, there's no time limit on the Good Article process. Princess Fiona, for example, was totally abandoned and 4 months later still became a Good Article. Trillfendi (talk) 02:53, 1 April 2021 (UTC)[reply]