Talk:Cê/GA1

GA Review

The non-inline cited reference at the bottom could go in its own section... perhaps have a ==References==, and then a ===Works cited=== and ===Footnotes=== or something like that...
- Split into ==Footnotes== and ==References==.
I suck at writing leads. Have you tried to improve it since I worked on it?
- Seems pretty good to me...aren't you supposed to give me constructive criticism? :) Seriously, though, all I've changed is the sentence about critical commentary.
  - Bah, I like reminding myself of my limits. dihydrogen monoxide (H₂O) 00:58, 29 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
"When he writes lyrics, Veloso typically uses the word você, but sings cê" - might want to make it more clear that he writes você by says cê (am I right?)... it's a bit awkward for now
- Smoothed out a bit, I think.
"However, the inspiration for the album's title came when the musician physically wrote cê instead" - The however seems out of place, and this is a bit awkward in general...
- See above.
"from nearly every critic reviewing it" - you only cite... two reviews, so it's a bit weird to say this...
- Ping? dihydrogen monoxide (H₂O) 00:58, 29 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
  - See below. --Kakofonous (talk) 01:05, 29 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]
Could you use some more reviews from here? Even small snippets from stuff not linked would be cool, I guess... to give some more variety
- Took another New York Times review, plus Stylus Magazine and The Village Voice. That enough? :) --Kakofonous (talk) 22:14, 28 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]