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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 04:13, 13 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Hi - I'll make copyedits as I go (please revert if I inadvertently change the meaning) and jot queries below: Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 04:13, 13 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

~~The volcano consists of several lava domes and individual volcanoes such as Nocarane,~~ ~~- "volcano consisting of...volcanoes" looks/sounds odd.~~

Changed to "it". Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 15:26, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

~~in fact, decide whether its a volcano or volcanic complex and stick to same in text~~

I think that would be unnecessarily complex; in most situations even geologists don't draw a distinction. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 15:26, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

..~~.produced large ignimbrites such as the La Joya, Arequipa Airport and Yura Tuff ignimbrites; - avoid word repetition where possible~~

Leaving out the second "ignimbrite" suggests that they are all a "tuff", which would not be correct. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 15:26, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

~~but the volcano is considered to be only dormant and due to its closeness to the city of Arequipa is considered a high risk volcano.~~ ~~- avoid word repetition where possible~~

Removed the second "volcano", but I am not sure if the result is grammatical. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 15:26, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

It is grammatical....but might be able to be fine-tuned....not sure....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 21:15, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

..~~.most easily climbed six-thousanders - huh? link?~~

It's part of a sequence with Category:Mountains by height but apparently we don't have the 6000 form. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 15:26, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

In which case it is jargon and should be changed to "mountains over 6000 m. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 21:14, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 21:29, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

~~If you could expand the Name section - expand on meaning of name, brief folklore, date from when name used, alternative names etc.~~

Added another item, but I don't think there is much information of this kind. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 15:26, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

That's annoying. I was wondering why it is called "brave".....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 21:14, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Perhaps in Aymara/Quechua "brave" and "male" are a common root? Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 21:29, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

~~In para 3 of Geography and geomorphology section, maybe describe the complex and then the highest peak. COmes across as a little contradictory as is~~

@Casliber:Changed this a bit. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 15:26, 18 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

The city of Arequipa with about one million inhabitants and infrastructure such as the airport, hydropower plants and reservoirs are within range of Chachani. - you mean "in range of a (Large? average?) eruption of Chachani. Also this section could do with some more explanation. Is the city directly downhill? are there valleys in between? Evacuation plan?

Yes, basically. As stated earlier in the article, Arequipa is at the foot of Chachani, but there is no evacuation map presumably because this volcano is not active. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 06:23, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

~~and the Geophysical Institute of Peru in 2018 began installing a monitoring station on Chachani~~ ~~- was it installed or only part-installed that year? If the former then "began" is redundant.~~

@Casliber:Fixed. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 06:23, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

1. Well written?:

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(probably some more fine-tuning needed for FA candidacy though, but alright now)