Talk:Cheshire, Connecticut/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:00, 5 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Will review this soon. Cheers, Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:00, 5 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

General

Two copyvio concerns, appear to be copy-pastes: [1] [2]
Fix this link [3]

Lead

Looking at the article length, the lead should be at least two good paras long per WP:MOSLEAD

History

hardened analog L4 carrier cable (coax) Wikilinks would be helpful
home invasion (see Cheshire, Connecticut, home invasion murders) Simply link "home invasion" to the bracketed link
mother Jennifer and daughters Hayley and Michaela Petit Seems an odd way to put it, simply say "a mother and her two daughters". And who is William in the family?
Source for his accomplice Joshua Komisarjevsky was convicted of the murders and other crimes in October 2011?

Demographics

Place ref. 12 at the end of each para if that is the sole source for the section. It ensures verifiability.
Has there not been a more recent census?
For every 100 females age 18 and over "aged". Check for similar cases

Geography

Source for the 2nd para?

Climate

Needs an introduction. See GAs on places, you will find an intro to Climate that describes the seasons and general weather.

Politics

Link split-ticket to split-ticket voting
Mention "President Bush" by his proper name
There are many short sentences that break the flow.
Source for the last line of the first para?

Arts and culture

Why say "Museums and other points of interest" when only a museum is mentioned? Are there no other points?
I don't think locations are needed for the NRHPs, links are enough

Parks and recreation

The section needs to be rewritten properly. I would recommend merging with the previous section so that all points of interest are listed at one place and are in a systematic order, with every point sourced.

Education

Once again, each part needs a source

Transportation

Source for last line?

Prison system

These prisons explain the city's skewed male/female ratios How? I hope this is not OR?

Notable people

Each point will need a source

Sources

Many of the refs. need proper formatting, don't keep bare URLs
Don't give website names as publishers. Give proper names of the organizations.

Copyright violations

In response to a request on my talk page I checheck two suspected instances of copyright violation in the article and removed them. I was able to prove conclusively using the Wayback Machine that both of these passages were copied from the source web pages rather than the other way around. I've not yet done the revision-deletion so as to afford you the opportunity to put the material into your own words. Please do this immediately. Please read the information I have placed on your user talk page about copyright and how it applies to Wikipedia. — Diannaa (talk) 14:04, 11 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Closing note

The review has remained open for over a week without any response, and there are a large number of issues. I am going to fail this for now, but hope to see it renominated soon after the necessary changes are made. Sainsf (talk · contribs) 07:43, 14 June 2016 (UTC)[reply]