Talk:Conquistador (Thirty Seconds to Mars song)/GA1
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Reviewer: IndianBio (talk · contribs) 10:44, 1 June 2015 (UTC)
- "Conquistador" features combative lyrics and call-and-response verses --> I would say some of these terms require wikilinks since these are not common terms. If no wikilink found then you need to explain them shortly
- Linked Call and response (music).
- the song is styled in alternative rock ---> What do you mean styled? Songs are generally composed in one particular sound
- Fixed.
- Love, Lust, Faith and Dreams to appear on the chart, with the other being "City of Angels". --> Love, Lust, Faith and Dreams to appear on the chart, the other being "City of Angels".
- Fixed.
- The details about song engineering, recording and mixing all needs wikilinks
- Not in this instance, it would be WP:OVERLINK.
- the album's lead single which has a more electronic-influenced sound --> had a more
- Fixed.
- It includes the contribution from the band's fans --> What kind of contribution? They shouted? Cheered?
- They provided additional vocals, it's already clarified.
- The term "conquistador" is used to indicate soldiers and explorers of the Portuguese Empire or the Spanish Empire conquering territory and opening trade routes during the Age of Discovery --> This line is out of place here, try to merge somewhere it would have meaning or make it a new line for the next para
- Fixed.
- Good job with the reception section
- .. which followed ---> whom
- Why? 'which' seems to be the correct pronoun.
- It later became a signature part of the Love, Lust, Faith and Dreams Tour whom followed --> Does not make sense, it should be "It later became a signature part of the following Love, Lust, Faith and Dreams Tour (2013–15)"
- Fixed.
- File:Thirty Seconds to Mars, Rosemont.jpg nothing can be seen of the band in the image, they are too distant. The image is quite large so why not use a cropped version which would highlight the band better
- The image is used to highlight the theatricality of the performance.
- Earthh in that case it fails the purpose of using the image altogether, because the supporting texts in the live performance section do not talk about the theatricality aspect of the performance at all. It talks about the audience reaction. So any assertion like that needs to be supported in the image as well, albeit be it a free one. Also the image subtitle does not mentione where they are performing the song. —Indian:BIO [ ChitChat ] 07:01, 3 June 2015 (UTC)
- IndianBio, this is an article about a song; the image is used to highlight the live performance of the song, it shouldn't be used to focus on the band members.--Earthh (talk) 22:00, 3 June 2015 (UTC)
Overall a good job on one of my favorite 30STM song, on hold for seven days. —Indian:BIO [ ChitChat ] 10:44, 1 June 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks for your review, IndianBio. Please look at my responses to your points and let me know if you have answers to my questions or any further concerns.--Earthh (talk) 17:37, 2 June 2015 (UTC)