Talk:Cuterebra fontinella

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Peer review

Hey Justin. Nice article! The article was written very clearly, with a neutral tone. It was pretty easy to follow. A couple of things: your “distribution” and “habitat” sections seem too short. I would suggest extracting more information from the articles you referenced, or just find more references! The article is lacking images, sounds, and/or videos. You have a photo of the fly for the Taxobox, which is great. However, you should add more photos for your other sections, such as “Description” “Life History” and “Genetic Identification.” This will help fulfill the Good Article criteria that talks about having relevant media. Lastly, consider adding other cool sections, such as the discovery of the fly! That could help broaden the article’s coverage, and comply with Good Article criteria. andrewoh29 (talk) 17:03, 30 November 2019 (UTC)

I created Genetics section in place of subspecies, and made that a subsection instead, as according to project format. I also moved it above conservation and interaction with humans. The genetics section could use more citations. I also added a parasitism section and added all the related sections under it since it was scattered in the page. I also added in some details in sections to provide a more neutral tone to the subject. Y.shiuan (talk) 23:16, 17 October 2019 (UTC)

Overall, the lead section is well-written and brief. The number of references, however, may be one too many. Although several references may provide the same bit of information, only one such source needs to be referenced.

The taxobox is also complete, thorough, and well-formatted.

The writer has done an exceptional job in breaking down information into small, well-defined categories. Further, the information abstracted from references has been so well paraphrased that there is no excess verbage, and each category is short, to the point, and clear.

The writer has chosen to provide a variety of other readings related to the fly, and a taxon identifiers box shows the writer has paid special attention to minute details.

References have been properly placed after sentences; however, under the "Warbles" category, I have replaces the reference to the end of the paragraph to show that the information in that section all comes from the same reference.

Under the "Home Range and Territoriality" subheading, I changed the word figure-8 to figure-eight. Further, the phrase "optimal territory" is confusing, and I have changed it to "high-quality territory". I have also changed "The preferred territories of C. fontinella are near streams and roadsides, usually above a heat-reflecting surface." to "C. fontinella territorialize above heat reflecting surfaces on roadsides and near streams." to provide better prepositional placement and t correct the misplacement of a modifier. I have also moved the reference to the end of the section.

Under the Eggs subsection of the “Life History” category, I have made grammatical changes to provide better flow and structure. Unnecessary wording has been removed to make the section more clear and accessible.

-”The eggs of the Cuterebra fontinella are typically 1.05 mm long and 0.03 mm wide in the shape of a canoe. The eggs of Cuterebra fontinella have a large groove running lengthwise along their underside, meant for attachment to vegetation. [1] The development of C. fontinella eggs are slowed by temperatures lower than 15 degrees Celsius and low air moisture. [2] The ideal conditions for development are warm and humid, so many southern climates are ideal for C. fontinella egg development. Stimulation from moisture and heat (often from the host passing by the egg) will cause the egg to hatch and the larva to be rubbed onto the host. [3]” -changed to : “C. fontinella eggs are typically 1.05 mm long and 0.03 mm wide. They are shaped like canoes and have a large groove along their underside; this groove enables attachment to vegetation. [1] Egg development is slowed by temperatures below 15 degrees celsius and under arid atmosphere conditions. [2] The ideal conditions for development are warm and humid, characteristic of southern climates. Stimulation from moisture and heat (often from the host passing by the egg) will cause the egg to hatch and the larva to be rubbed onto the host. [3]”

Grammatical changes have been changed in the Larval instars section as well to , “C. fontinella eggs are typically 1.05 mm long and 0.03 mm wide. They are shaped like canoes and have a large groove along their underside; this groove enables attachment to vegetation. [1] Egg development is slowed by temperatures below 15 degrees celsius and under arid atmosphere conditions. [2] The ideal conditions for development are warm and humid, characteristic of southern climates. Stimulation from moisture and heat (often from the host passing by the egg) will cause the egg to hatch and the larva to be rubbed onto the host. [3] “

A various number of other grammatical changes have been been to the article (see View history, user: Jillian Shah) for sheer grammatical structure and to even further remove unnecessary words. However, these changes do not mean the information in the article is inaccurate. After validating the sources used by the writer. I have verified that the information provided is accurate and not plagiarized. However, the writer did write under the section labeled “Conservation” that microclimate changes are detrimental for a variety of reasons. The article does not explicitly provide these reasons, and the reference provided has not verified that those reasons are certain. Therefore, I have removed that phrase from the article.

As a whole, the article provides substantial, pertinent, and well-researched information about thie fly species. Much attention has been made to the format of the page as well as how accessible the information is. The writer has not plagiarized any of his work, and the information extracted from references has been reworded to be more comprehendible to a general audience.

To see all edited changes by this user (JillianShah), please visit the View history page.

Jillian Shah (talk) 22:06, 13 October 2019 (UTC)

Overall, a very interesting article. I added some formatting changes and added links to certain words so that the article looked more polished. I also fixed some of the syntax and made some of the writing clearer so that the article flowed better. I was distracted and confused by some of the citing techniques. I don't know the protocol for those, but I thought that some of the citing would distracting for a reader. KendalTLee (talk) 18:17, 15 October 2019 (UTC)

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Peer Review (2)

From a preview review of this page, there have have significant changes in the content, grammatical structure, and formatting of this Wiki article. The writer has made substantial progress in making his article more concise and economical in structure. Furthermore, the student has been suggested changes to his page. An accomplishment of the writer in his article that deserves praise is his/her summary of the life history of the fly. The writer has been an otherwise complex and incomprehensible topic one that can be easily digested by any general member of the Wiki community. Furthermore, under the Warbles subcategory, I changed the hyperlink for "pore" because the current one sends the user to a "disambiguation" page. I hyperlinked a page that describes a pore in human context because there are no current Wiki pages that allude to insect pores or cavities. Another change that I made was that I added a citation to the end of the Behavioral Changes section. I looked through the user's references and found the information in that section from reference (21). This should be verified by the original Wiki writer for the page. I also removed the Genetics category because there is currently no information under this category, making the category seem sparse. Instead, the heading "Genetic Identification" is adequate in summarizing the information in that section.

The section that contained a few areas in need of attention was the "Interactions with Humans" category. I changed:

"While very rare, there have been documented cases of C. fontinella infesting human hosts. In most of these cases the larvae remain in benign locations: subcutaneous regions, within the eyelid, or in the eye itself. However, occasionally the larvae will make it to the tracheal-pulmonary system and cause cold-like symptoms as well as a chronic cough. Typically the patients cough the larva out with some bloody material.

Another species of bot fly, [Dermatobia hominis]], commonly infests humans within Central and South America. Most cases of human infestation within North America are caused by the victim traveling into regions where D. hominis are present. As of 1989, there were 55 documented cases of myiasis caused by species within the Cuterebra genus. Treatment typically consists of removal of the larva and then prevention of secondary bacterial infections. If the warble is accessible, petroleum jelly put over the breathing hole will cause the larva to emerge for air, where it can be removed by a specialist. Larvae within or near the eye will sometimes require surgery for removal. Larvae that die within the vitreous humor of the eye do not need to be removed, they will be broken down and absorbed by the natural processes of the body."...

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"Rare cases of C. fontinella host infestations have been reported but are not the norm. In most of these cases the larvae remain in benign locations such as in the eye or in the subcutaneous regions within the eyelid. Occasionally, however, the larvae will exploit a pathway gaining access to the tracheal-pulmonary system. Consequent symptoms in the human host include cold-like symptoms and flared-coughing patterns. The larva are exiled from the human host when the host coughs a bloody secretion containing the larva.

Another species of bot fly called Dermatobia hominis commonly infests humans in Central and South America. Most cases of human infestation within North America are caused by the victim traveling into regions where D. hominis are present. As of 1989, there were 55 documented cases of myiasis caused by species within the Cuterebra genus. Treatment typically consists of removal of the larva and then prevention of secondary bacterial infections. If the warble is accessible, a specialist can remove the larva by depositing petroleum jelly over the breathing hole of the parasite; this causes the larva to emerge for air and enable easier removal by the specialist. Larvae within or near the eye will sometimes require surgery for removal. Larvae that die within the vitreous humor of the eye do not need to be removed, they will be broken down and absorbed by natural chemical processes within the host."

These changes have been made to provide the page with better grammatical structure and to prevent information that was difficult to comprehend from detracting from the accessibility of the article.

Overall, the writer has done a remarkable job in making this article of "high importance" and has shown substantial growth in his article-assembling capabilities. The article shows no apparent signs of being written by a student, and that serves as a huge accomplishment. No signs of plagiarism were located, and there were few to no grammatical errors that were found. Jillian Shah (talk) 19:49, 1 November 2019 (UTC)

My main edits on this page were changing poorly chosen words to more appropriate words/phrases. I have a few suggestions for this page: first, change the caption of the woody mouse from "prey" to "host" as it more accurately characterizes their relationship. Additionally, I would add some information to the Genetic Identification section, specifically about the genes that were briefly mentioned. Lastly, I would change the references section because it is currently confusing and formatted strangely. Overall, this article was very cohesive and interesting. The section headers were really well chosen and the organization overall is really logical and well thought out. Olivia.urso (talk) 22:06, 2 November 2019 (UTC)

This Wikipedia page covers a lot of interesting information. I particularly found the section on Interactions with Humans fascinating. I also liked how concise the overview section was. However, I did have many small edits. In the first sentence of the article, I unbolded "mouse bot fly" and capitalized "New World." I also moved the Habitat section to right below the Distribution section because they are both short and very related. I also removed hyperlinks from words that don't have Wikipedia pages, and changed words that were spelled wrong, such as "spiracles." I fixed the spacing between the period and the superscript for citations. The main thing I edited was to change the grammar in all of the sections after Description. The main problem was that each sentence was structured to say something like "the males will do x" and I changed it so that they read "the males do x." This makes the sentences stronger. Finally, I recommend adding citations to the Description section and putting citations at the end of each sentence and not just at the end of paragraphs. I also recommend adding a sentence to the Description section about what the few distinguishing features are for this fly. I also recommend cleaning up the reference and data sources information at the end of the page. Ultimately this page has lots of good information, it just needed to be cleaned up.Hannahwhite97 (talk) 23:52, 3 November 2019 (UTC)

I like your use of embedding links for certain words/terms present in your article. This gives readers the ability to refer directly to outside articles for deeper clarification about certain terms that may be unknown to them. I do think that the headings under your Description section and Life cycle sections are repetitive of one another, so I removed the subheadings under the Description section because they best fit under the Life cycle heading. I think that it is still easy to follow in the Description section without each of those subheadings. Now, your Description section looks more like a paragraph and flows rather cohesively. Furthermore, I think your Parasitism section is very thorough. One of the most interesting (but gross) facts from this section was the description of how the larvae embed themselves into their respective hosts. I think it would be beneficial to your article to include a few more pictures of C. fontinella itself. I also had a question about how your references appeared in your article, as it only currently lists out three sources under “Further reading”. You may have condensed the sources you used into the numerical format, but I think that it would make your page look nicer and easier for people to access cited references if you had them laid out in the traditional manner that other articles do. Overall, this was a very well written, well organized, and thoroughly completed article. Just a few minor edits will make this a great article. lelandra 5 November 2019 —Preceding undated comment added 13:12, 5 November 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review: 3

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The user has done an exceptional job this semester in researching and creating a page for this fly, and the progress the user has made is outstanding! To reach good article status, there are a few areas of suggestion that may help with formatting and the general appearance of the page. Overall, however, the user should be proud about his article and he has done a phenomenal job that serves as a testament to his passion in the course. First, I would add a few more photos to the page. There are currently a few photos, but I would add a few more to make the page a little more aesthetically pleasing! Furthermore, I have changed the "Subspecies" subcategory under "Genetic Identification" into a paragraph instead of a bullet-pointed list. More information could be added to the heading of the article as well, and more information about the habitat and distribution of the fly may need to be added. These sections appear a bit too sparse, and photos of the areas where these flies are found would be helpful to readers. Overall, however, the article is well written, concise, and well-worded! It serves as a perfect representation of the dedication this user showed in the course and in developing his Wikipedia article! Jillian Shah (talk) 01:35, 1 December 2019 (UTC)

This article is very comprehensive and interesting! A few suggestions to achieve good article status include changing the references section as it currently looks like there is code included! I would also carefully read through each section and eliminate extraneous phrases and sentences. Overall though, this is very well written and complete. 03:39, 1 December 2019 (UTC)Olivia.urso (talk)

This article was very well put together! I went through and corrected grammar and syntactical errors and eliminated some words to increase clarity in some sections. I also restructured the lead section a bit so that it flowed from its physical description to its parasitic behaviors. As stated above, the bottom of your article needs restructuring because your sources are currently not listed under references, and there is some code visible. I also think there are unnecessary links that could be removed, as they do not directly relate to information about the fly, such "groin" which links to a human anatomy page. I can tell you put a lot effort into finding credible information, and this article is well on its way to Good Article status. 03:39, 3 December 2019 (UTC)Christina.lindberg (talk)

I thought that this article needed more informative photos. So, I added a photo to show what happens to a hots body when infected with a cuterebra fly. I also hyperlinked key words in the captionKendalTLee (talk) 05:11, 19 December 2019 (UTC)

Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 26 August 2019 and 4 December 2019. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): JustinLevin. Peer reviewers: Jillian Shah, Y.shiuan, KendalTLee.

Above undated message substituted from Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org assignment by PrimeBOT (talk) 16:39, 18 January 2022 (UTC)