Talk:Dystopia (Iced Earth album)/GA1
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Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 12:52, 4 December 2011 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose):
b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- Too much quotefarming
- "Songs" section too messy; try to merge it somehow, like in "Reviews" section
- The article is generally messy arranged; "Writing and recording" doesn't belong to "Background", same for "World Dystopia Tour" and "Reviews" (should be lone two-header sections), "Track listing" should be put somewhere above "Personnel"
- "Sales and chart positions" is too small; integrate it somewhere, how about into the small section "Release"?
- odd usage of hyphens, eg "Iced Earth -vocalist" (hyphen should be removed) or "Wacken -festival" (same); Hyphens should be used when you want to separate eg prefixes and sufixes (for example anti-communism) or if you want to join something, eg Compound modifiers (for example well-prepared student). However, the hyphen is often omitted
- Apart the wrong hyphen usage, the article contains several prose issues, mostly in grammar. Examples:
- "Two of the albums songs ("Dystopia" and "Tragedy and Triumph") also feature the return of the "Something Wicked" -storyline and the bands mascot Set Abominae previously featured on previous albums" - redundant repetition
- "it's the band's first album with vocalist Stu Block, who joined after former vocalist Matt Barlow left the band for a second time on August 6, 2011" - same
- "During its first week the album sold over 6,000 copies in the United States and charted in many countries" - how many is many?
- "According to Jon Schaffer and Stu Block, writing the lyrics was basically the two of them drinking beer and watching movies." - avoid noun + ing, and the last clause should be rewritten.
- a (prose):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references):
b (citations to reliable sources):
c (OR):
- How reliable are the following sites:
- imperumi.net
- hallowed.se
- cmdistro.com
- metal-army.com
- about.com
- bravewords.com
- themetalcritic.com
- kaaoszine.fi
- discogs.com is not reliable because it is user-generated
- How reliable are the following sites:
- a (references):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects):
b (focused):
- a (major aspects):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- rationale for File:IcedEarth2011.jpg indicates [1] as a source, although I could not find this picture anywhere on its homepage.
- no need to italicize the album in references.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):
- Overall: there are too many issues, not only in references, but in prose. This should be copyedited and peer reviewed before nominating in future.
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
- Dabsolver check: Fixed three dab links
- Checklinks check: one dead
- Reflinks check: ok
- Fixed dashes