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I've listed this article for peer review because I recently created the article from a redirect and greatly expanded it. Would love some additional input on the article on how to improve it. Hoping to get this article up to GA status at some point.
I've listed this article for peer review because I want to know if there are any problems in the article before possibly nominating it for GA. I know you're supposed to be a significant contributor to an article to nominate it, that's why I want a peer review so I can improve it more. Thanks, NightBag10 (talk) 13:14, 9 July 2019 (UTC)
I've listed this article for peer review because I previously worked to improve this article up to GA status and plan to submit it to FAC soon, but would like a thorough peer review by an outside party before doing so.
Going to do a more thorough review later but a quick drive-by has me noticing that the "Sequels, remakes and musical works" has Citation Needed tags to it. I think that entire section will have to have a rewrite but I expect that was part of the plan. GamerPro64 04:26, 10 July 2019 (UTC)
Thought I would be doing a more in-depth review of the article but after reading the entire piece, the "Sequels, remakes and musical works" is the only part that needs to be overhauled. With that section there it lowers the quality of the article that it could damage its chances of retaining its GA status. Other than that the article looks solid. GamerPro64 00:50, 16 July 2019 (UTC)
Thanks, yeah, much of that content was added by other people after the GAN review. I'll look at it and improve it accordingly before moving on to FA. Thanks! — HunterKahn 01:27, 16 July 2019 (UTC)
Hello everyone! I would greatly appreciate any feedback for this article as I would like to put this through the FAC process sometime in the future. Thank you in advance! Aoba47 (talk) 04:05, 4 July 2019 (UTC)
I've listed this article for peer review because…
I want to get this to GA status and I'm not sure if it is ready. Could someone take a quick glance and see if there are any glaring flaws that could delay the GA review?
Thanks, Blue Pumpkin Pie (talk) 12:29, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
Comments from Scribolt
I've made some copy edits directly in the article, feel free to modify / ignore them if you don't like them. A few questions,
If this is the 3rd entry in the series, why is it 2nd in the list of releases on the series page?
I would suggest giving a bit more detail on the mission mode, what is a mission that the player needs to solve? To score a certain number of points in a specific time? To clear a screen with a certain number of moves?
Similarly for the Skin edit mode, what is a Skin in this context? A color scheme? It's made a bit clearer later, but it could do with explaining a bit earlier.
Yokota is mentioned with no introduction, who is he/she?
@Scribolt: Thanks for the assist. I made the mistake of putting this the third in the series when technically it was the second. I was only following the Japanese release as the original. The European release came earlier than it was intended to release. I'll fix that if it hasn't been fixed yet. Mission Mode is really hard to describe because it has a large variety of tasks. None of the sources give a clear idea. The ones I can list on the top of my head are clearing the board by making one or two moves, clearing one or more columns, clearing a set number of squares before time runs out, clearing the board before time runs out. Skin Edit mode is just a playlist mode, lets players create a playlist of skins that were already unlocked.Blue Pumpkin Pie (talk) 19:09, 15 July 2019 (UTC)
The film is considered as the first feature film in India. I've listed this article for peer review because I am planning to take it to FAC in the near future. This would be my first FAC so wanted to have other editors to take a look at the article before it goes for the final evaluation. Constructive comments are welcome.
The plot section does not make much sense to me. I failed to understand the basic themes (integrity of Harischandra) on a rapid reading. Since I do not remember the story of Harishchandra very well at this moment, I am unable to provide some constructive feedback. Hopefully I will be back with workable suggestions soon.--Dwaipayan (talk) 01:48, 5 July 2019 (UTC)
Since the film is partially lost, one is only supposed to add plot details from the source for verification. And I think that's just what Vivvt has done. Kailash29792(talk) 02:15, 5 July 2019 (UTC)
Vishvamitra performing a yajna to get help from triguna shakti against their will. So, the triguna shakti have their own will? But these are not person. Needs explanation/modification.
Harischandra... interrupts... by releasing the three powers. So, Harischandra already had the three powers? How did he “release” those?
Vishvamitra... asks to arrange for dakshina. Needs translation/explanation. What is Dakshina?
Taramati to ask Dom king... what is a dom king? The wiki link does not help much. (It links to a page describing Dom being a Bengali Hindu caste)
Bishvamitra frames Taramati for murdering prince of Kashi. This is weird. Where does the prince of Kashi come into the picture ? Who is he (in relation to the characters already described)?
Taramati pleads guilty and is ordered to be beheaded by Harishchandra. Why does she plead guilty if she is innocent? Also, how come Harishchandra is the judge if he is not the king anymore ?
As Harishchandra attempts to behead Taramati, a pleases Lord Shiva appears. Vishvamitra reveals that ... there is a logical gap between these two consecutive sentences. How does Lord Shiva’s appearance lead to Vishvamitra’s revelation? Does sage V also come to the scene of the beheading?
I understand the film is partially lost and not every detail can be recovered. But the legend can be referred to for explaining the scenes. Also, if the film is mostly lost, what is the source of this plot section?
Dwaipayanc, there are two sources for the plot already added to the section. As per WP:FILMPLOT, "Since the film is the primary source and the infobox provides details about the film, citing the film explicitly in the plot summary's section is not necessary. Exceptions to the rule include upcoming films and "lost" films (which are not available to the public to verify), for which editors should use secondary sources." The first source is Indian Cinema: The Bollywood Saga (I have not added the link as it is from Google Drive) and pages 76–80 of this. You may read them both to clarify your doubts and suggest what can be added/removed/amended. --Kailash29792(talk) 04:26, 8 July 2019 (UTC)
I've listed this article for peer review because it has had issues with COI in the past and as I also have a COI since I was previously paid to make some edits, it would be best for another editor to go through it and suggest some changes to eliminate the existing issues.
I've listed this article for peer review because I believe I have enough information, references and media (after a long research based on valid sources I found) so the article can be rated C. However, whether that happens or not, I would like to know what I can improve, and I'm open to constructive criticism!
I've listed this article for peer review because I believe this article has potential to be a featured article in the future. An FA delegate runs and archives all my nominations a few moments after the first oppose vote. So I'm starting a peer review page to have more freedom with regards to time and actually be able to get some feedback from others. The major concern raised in the last FAC was the article wording needing to be simplified, so please post ways to do that. I also invite HĐ and SchroCat who identified this issue to hopefully assist me in fixing it. Hope for the next FAC to be successful. Thanks in advance to anyone who will provide their valuable comments.
Hi, sorry for the delay. Below are some of my comments; will try to give more input in the future.
"At the time, Trainor had yet to obtain a recording contract but was writing tracks for other artists." → "but" is used when there are two contradictory events, which I can't see here
Kadish initially proposed the song's title to be "All Bass, No Treble" to Trainor who, at the time, was in a phase of saying "I'm all about that Mexican food". → I recommend breaking this into two separate sentences
Trainor introduced the song's concept by saying "Let's do booty! And thickness! Like, it's about the bass, not the treble". → She did not "introduce" the theme "by" saying this; maybe something like "Trainor came up with the idea of 'booty' for the song"?
"1950s music and doo wop" → shouldn't it be just "1950s doo wop"?
"She felt encouraged by the result and envisioned..." → I can see no connection here
"girl power... as well as self-acceptance" → these themes seem to complement each other rather than being two separate things (which is implied by "as well as")
Here's my suggestion for the last sentence of the second paragraph: Further inspired by (Bruno Mars... "Lollipop"), which encourage self-acceptance of one's own image, Trainor wrote the lyrics criticizing photoshopped images. You can also try to find other ways to make it less wordy
Are there specific names of the labels who were not impressed by the song?
a synthesizer → synthesizers; synths are often in plural form
"Trainor recorded a demo of the song to perform for Paul Pontius" → did Trainor send the demo to Pontius, or did Trainor perform the track live in front of Pontius?
The caption of the image lacks context; maybe it can be written "Trainor performed the song to L.A. Reid (pictured), who ..."
I advise against incorporating opinions from different sources and putting them into one sentence (WP:SYNTH). I'd suggest to include respective description of the song's genre (A described the song as...; B characterized it as...)
A song doesn't "use" the 4/4 common time; it is written in the 4/4 common time; "time signature" is a wrong word here
"Using the 4/4 time signature with a tempo of 134 beats per minute, the song's key signature is in A major" → the subject is "the song" or "the song's key signature"?
Can a basic chord progression provoke a specific music style? Some specific progressions do, but for a "basic" progression, I'm not sure
"early 1960s soul-pop and groove" → "groove" is not a music genre
"earworm" is POV
"It was also noted to have an earworm hook, early 1960s soul-pop and groove influences, a scatting tempo and shimmying melody." → by whom? Does the soul-pop groove really need to be noted? Or is it apparent on the song itself already?
"Trainor delivers a hint of Caribbean reggae in addition to a variety of background vocal and rapping techniques" → I have no clue what this is trying to say
"The vocals of "All About That Bass" have been compared to" → by whom? And this should be in line with the simple past tense
"the lyrics of "All About That Bass" provide a callout to embrace inner beauty, and to promote a positive body image and self-acceptance" → the lyrics promote self-acceptance of body image by embracing inner beauty; not the best option, but please make it succinct
"In the song" is redundant
"unreachable standards of beauty" → any specific examples? And how do these standards contradict with the song's lyrics?
"Its lyrical message has been compared to" → ditto
I see a lot of comparisons to other songs here; unless they are very necessary, I would advise against doing so. "Composition" is where the song's musical structure and lyrical content are explained; comparisons should only be used to shed more light. So far I haven't seen how the song promotes positive body image or criticizes beauty standards (which specific lyric?), and the names of other songs make the section appear unorganized
Those are my two cents so far. Will try to get back to this when I finish my college assignments and reports. I hope this PR attract more interest as well. :) HĐ (talk) 08:30, 29 May 2019 (UTC)
I've listed this article for peer review because I've done a major revision. While I originally got the article to good article status in 2011, it was my first good article and consequently my weakest; additionally, a lot of things happened in the last eight years relating to the song, both in new coverage as well as a film adaption last year that led to a new chart run (the song's third unique chart run). I've finally a completed a major overhaul I've been gradually working on and want to get input so that the article can be in as good a shape as possible, both in conforming to current GA standards as well as a future featured article nomination. Since this is such a large article, I figured peer review would be a good place to start. ToaNidhiki05 01:37, 8 May 2019 (UTC)
I made some minor updates to the infobox as per Template:Infobox song#Parameters (easier than listing here). Please change/fix as needed. Studios are linked where possible (IBC Studios?) and the city is identified. Also, there is some overlinking: lead singer, common musical instruments, Bible, funerals, film, etc. Good luck. —Ojorojo (talk) 17:12, 21 May 2019 (UTC)
Thanks! The IBC Studios here was in the US, presumably a separate studio; I’ll check the liner notes when I get home, but I’m guessing the name is coincidental. I’ll check the overlinks and fix those shortly. ToaNidhiki05 17:26, 21 May 2019 (UTC)
Brief update: I removed the overlooks. I checked the album liner notes and while it mentions the studios the album was recorded at, it doesn't say where those studios are unfortunately. ToaNidhiki05 23:00, 21 May 2019 (UTC)
I've listed this article because I'd like to find out whether this article deserves improvement from the Start-class assessment. The article itself is a slightly changed version of FA-class version at Polish Wikipedia (authors) which I've contributed to. Any feedback about the topic would be helpful.
I started making this list a couple of days ago with the intention of nominating it for FL. The list of songs is complete and I expanded the lead today. I think it's ready but I want to make sure I haven't missed anything so I would greatly appreciate any help.
Nicely done. The introduction has a nice flow to it and doesn't sound promotional, and the graphs are nicely laid out. I might recommend ditching the photographs on the right, however, since they aren't of her, and will make wrapping even more difficult on small browser windows or mobile devices. 220.127.116.11 (talk) 19:51, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
I've listed this article for peer review because I want to properly prepare the article for a Featured Article Nomination. I was suggested to do so on the articles third FAN, as it was suggested that it had a bunch of problems and should be withdrawn, which I have done. The article previously underwent a peer review a while ago, but since then it had become a good article, underwent a copy-edit and two FANs, (first one failed because only one person actually commented on it and second one failed because of the questionable critical reception bit which has since been fully reworked, not by me) so there shouldn't be too* much work to be done. But yea, I am asking for a FAN-level peer review as I don't want to make a fool out of myself and fail a 4th time. Here are the links to the first peer review, good article nomination, first FAN, second FAN, and third FAN. Thanks, Micro (Talk) 08:24, 30 April 2019 (UTC)
I've submitted the article for peer review because it's my first time editing on Wikipedia and I'd like some feedback on how I've done so far. I'm interested in comments on style, formatting, cohesion, and particularly the Comment I made during the edit regarding Markos' move to Houston because I'm not sure how to deal with contradictory information in an article.
I'm not sure why someone has added the banner at the top of the page. The prose, what there is of it, doesn't strike me as particularly sub-standard, though the penultimate paragraph is a touch incoherent: a jumble of unrelated statements. What chiefly needs attention, in my view, is the sourcing. There are six paragraphs, only one of which contains a citation to a source. All the important facts in the article should be verifiable in a reliable source. Tim riley talk 09:29, 9 May 2019 (UTC)
I've listed this article for peer review because I truly believe its widespread acclaim and "cult-following" notability make it a unique subject to be a Featured Article (FA) contender. While it currently meets Good Article (GA) guidelines, I hope other editors can strengthen its prose and structure.
You did a great job compiling a vast amount of information on this album that has received vast media coverage. Per MOS:IMAGERELEVANCE, "Images must be significant and relevant in the topic's context, not primarily decorative." In other words, a photo of Paul Simon (for example) is relevant for articles about him, but here he is merely mentioned obliquely. Nobody may care enough to bring this up, but don't be surprised if it happens. ---DOOMSDAYER520 (Talk|Contribs) 19:22, 15 April 2019 (UTC)
This is a joint effort by SchroCat and Tim riley. Round the Horne was a BBC radio comedy of the 1960s, a formative influence on one of us as a teenager (the other wasn't alive in the 1960s and so has no excuse whatever). We have been revising the article with the aim of bringing it up to FA standard. We have tried to give the show comprehensive coverage though we hope we have avoided being too solemn about it. We regret the lack of pictures, but we are restricted by Wikipedia's rules on copyight images, and have tried to break the text up with, we hope, enlivening quote boxes. All comments and suggestions on this and indeed on anything else will be gratefully received. We hope you find the article wangles your nurdles. – SchroCat and Tim riley talk 19:07, 6 March 2019 (UTC)
Sorry - technical hitch (me, probably). Having to shut this page and open a new PR. Apologies! Tim riley talk 19:24, 6 March 2019 (UTC)
Eric Schucht - a little puzzled. This already is a Wikipedia page, although as a redirect to Benjamin Saunders (professor). Not sure what input you're wanting. Are you sure this is the appropriate place for your query? KJP1 (talk) 12:36, 23 December 2018 (UTC)
KJP1 - Thanks for looking at my page. What happened was I was trying to get my sandbox page reviewed and made into an official page, and I got mixed up and thought the peer review page was the place to do it. When I found the right place it was reviewed and not approved due to not having enough sources. So it got removed, leaving nothing but the redirect. Hope this helps clear things up. Eric Schucht (talk) 16:58, 23 December 2018 (UTC)
I am going make this simple.
I've listed this article for peer review because…
Ryzen article became too technical for most readers to understand each time a new information released for new Ryzen Processors that`s comes out.
Too much AMD fanboys being too excited and putting their "fans point of view" mixed inside the information in this article. This articles should be more focus on AMD Ryzen the article and not get upset over fan based changes are being removed.
Technical tag and Fan tag should been dated since 2017.
Thanks, Regice2020 (talk) 21:17, 13 July 2019 (UTC)
Comment: please note that this review has been added by a disruptive editor who even tried to have the article deleted with very similar BS reasons as given above. --Denniss (talk) 07:04, 14 July 2019 (UTC)
Comment: The recent revert of a good faith edit from me by Denniss about tags was not properly reviewed. This "Peer Review" is not use to throw rocks at each other. Seeks improvement as stated in bullets and this been going on since 2017. Regice2020 (talk) 17:26, 14 July 2019 (UTC)
The goal is to fix page up and stop people from preventing users from doing so.
I've listed this article for peer review because it has been receiving a large amount of edits lately and I am not sure that they are appropriate for the article but my previous edits have been reverted so I wanted some outside input.
I've listed this article for peer review because…I'd like to take it to FA and have never done that before, and it looks terrifying. I thought maybe some fresh critical eyes on it might be a good step.
Given the length of the article, suggest expanding the lead a bit more
Per this RfC, entries in an In Popular Culture section should have sources that indicate not only that the mentioned reference exists, but also that it is significant to the topic
Before going to FAC, I'd strongly suggest taking a look at the consistency of the citations. You basically want to ensure not only that the citations are complete and correct, but also that citations to the same type of source are similarly formatted. For example, footnotes 1 and 2 are both books but only one includes location; footnotes 4 and 27 are to the same source but one has the publication italicized and one does not; footnote 53 has page title but no other indication of the source; etc. Nikkimaria (talk) 15:33, 16 June 2019 (UTC)
Nikkimaria, thanks so much for your comments, I'll start in on them! --valereee (talk) 17:01, 16 June 2019 (UTC)
I've listed this article for peer review because it failed its FA review back in October. I did not get a lot of great input then, only some recommendations and some - as I felt rather impolite - comments from the only reviewer. I see that the prose has some problems. Since I am German, I tend to use longer sentences (which is just the style you use in German), but it does not work well in English. So suggestions as to clearing that up a little bit would be welcome. I am also concerned about the "Background" section of the article, since I am not sure how well this can be understood by people not overly familiar with Formula 1.
I am very much looking forward to your suggestions!
@ Expandinglight5 You've obviously put in a lot of good work here. The article is very thorough. while going over my suggestions below, please be aware that I'm new to wikipedia editing and peer review, and therefore everything I say here should be taken with a grain of salt.
As far as getting the article to GA or FA status, I think there's still work that needs to be done. I've made some suggestions below. Since I'm new, I don't want to to directly edit the page for these, instead I've written them for your consideration:
The priority for the current state of the article is to ensure it is well-cited. There's a lot of citations missing, particularly for the production section. If you wrote that section, I presume you got the information from a specific source - if it was written by another user, it might be good to contact them if you struggle to find reliable sources. If all else fails, it may be prudent to remove that section.
Touching more on the production section, there is a lot of text there and it could be considerably condensed - I don't know how much all that information contributes to the page, especially since a lot of it is discussion on the VIN numbers. The flow could also be improved, as it reads more like text from an investigative article than an encyclopedic one (things like "as stated before" and "it is believed" should be avoided when possible).
think about dividing the history section into subsections. "conceptualization and prototypes," "fabrication" and "bankruptcy and revival" would be a good division, but feel free to divide them as you see fit. Make sure things are more are less chronological in the history section.
the lead section is good but could be more concise. You could remove some more specific facts (for example, the location of the factory) as that kind of information isn't essential for a reader looking to get a surface-level understanding of the car, and is mentioned later in the article for readers who want more detail.
this is minor, but consider changing "special deloreans" to something like "unique and notable deloreans," as it reads a bit more professional and encyclopedic in nature.
I hope this helps. Don't hesitate to reach out if you want to discuss these suggestions. Other reviewers, feel free to point out if any of my advice here is incorrect - I'll defer to more experienced reviewers.
These are good points. I've removed a few items on the lead section that are duplicative and don't belong in the section. I've revised the language to 'Notable and unique' and put the cars in chronological order in that section. I think the RHD section should be moved into unique/notable as well. The production section is new (in fact I think it appeared after I requested peer review.) I did not write the section. I did however add the citation requested tags to the section hoping the author would support the data. That section should be written in a more encyclopedic tone and I agree it needs work. I'll try to divide the history section soon as well. Thank you for the feedback.
Expandinglight5 (talk) 06:42, 15 June 2019 (UTC)
Distributed element circuit should perhaps mention tapers in the Circuit components section. At present it says Departures from constructing with uniform transmission lines in distributed element circuits are rare, yet in the lede picture there are two stick-insect networks with tapered bodies. These networks are unusual, but got me thinking of other examples of tapers, including; horns, vivaldi antennas, matched loads and various tapered transitions. Smooth bends and twists are also considered to be tapers. catslash (talk) 00:17, 22 February 2019 (UTC)
I added a bit to the article lede connecting it to a very similar article: distributed element model. Sam-2727 (talk) 23:30, 3 April 2019 (UTC)
I am working on an overhaul of the provincial parks of BC as part of Wikiproject Canada. Garibaldi Provincial Park is the first of these - I've done a fair bit of work on it. I'd like to use this peer review to ensure that page is up to standard, and, as I am new to wikipedia, I would take this opportunity to improve my writing from the community's feedback and suggestions. Ultimately I'll apply what I learn here to the subsequent pages in this project.
Very nicely done. I've added links and performed some very minor copyediting, but most everything looks to be in its place. I would recommend you add an infobox from Template:Infobox mountain. Here are the changes I added . 18.104.22.168 (talk) 20:08, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
I've listed this article for peer review because I'd like to take it to FAC in the next few weeks. I think it's nearly there, but it might need some more content. I also want to raise attention to the concern about my use of three masters thesis projects (Lite Jr 1992; Swanson 1986; Werner 1991) at the good article review here. I look forward to any and all feedback!
Regarding the theses, have the people participating in their writing a reputation for expertise and accuracy? I see that Lite Jr 1992 is cited twice in academic papers, Swanson 1986 is cited 17 times. Werner 1991 I can't find, but Werner 1990 is cited here 4 times. Otherwise, sure that it should say "extinct"? To me it looks like this volcanic field is similar to the Honolulu Volcanics which are not defined "extinct". Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 20:02, 9 May 2019 (UTC)
@Jo-Jo Eumerus: Sorry for the delayed reply; thanks for your comments. Swanson has become a very respected figure in field volcanology; see . Lite Jr still co-authors reports on hydrology for the USGS (see ) but unclear what his position is; might just be on USGS Staff. Less certain about Werner. I will address the extinct issue once these reference concerns are addressed; Squeamish Ossifrage, if you have any additional thoughts since your GA review, I would appreciate any and all feedback. ceranthor 14:00, 17 May 2019 (UTC)
IMO when judging the suitability of an author's work one should consider the reputation they had when they wrote it, not necessarily what came later except for the citation numbers. I'd keep only Swanson per the citation numbers but that's just a feeling. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 14:50, 17 May 2019 (UTC)
I just glanced over the article but I found it very odd that there is a section entitled "Religion" that contains virtually no information on the subject's actual religion but instead talks about hot springs as if that is something the reader is familiar with (which I am not). I cannot imagine a FA without any actual information on religious beliefs being given. Regards SoWhy 14:40, 9 July 2019 (UTC)
I've listed this article for peer review because I believe this article warrants an upgrade in status.
In particular, I would like comments relating to the first half of the article. These are the newest editions and involve some sensitive topics. If you could examine all parts involving Zionism, I would appreciate it.
I've listed this article for peer review because I've expanded greatly from the original stub to, I believe, the max extent possible given the information we have on Varro. All sections currently on the article are ones I've added and thus all need review.
As this is my first mid-length article and the first I've submitted for review, all comments and contributions would be helpful to find out where this article stands now and whether it can be improved further.
Many thanks, LarciusFlavus (talk) 16:14, 27 June 2019 (UTC)
Hi LarciusFlavus. I have looked over Varro, and your three other Romans, and it looks like very good work. I have done some work on Roman consuls and generals myself. There is a lack of consensus on how they should be presented, so the following comments are mostly how I approach these things; others may do things slightly differently.
There are some statements uncited.
I use either the politician or officeholder infoboxes, they allow more information. A partially completed template is here.
Personally I would be wary of over using the primary sources. Ie see Marcus Calpurnius Bibulus, where Plutarch, Suetonius, Cicero and Appian are each used once, but most of the article is referenced to secondary sources. (If you feel that the modern sources are all various interpretations of a single, or a limited number of, primary source(s) you might want to think about covering this in a separate section, as in Battle of Cape Ecnomus.)
A quick scan of a couple of sources I have to hand - Bagnall's The Punic Wars and Goldsworthy'sThe Fall of Carthage - suggest that there is quite a bit of further information on Varro in modern sources. I would be surprised if modern works dealing specifically with Cannae didn't have yet more.
Personally, as this is the English Wikipedia, I avoid foreign language expressions without a translation. I suspect that "Varro was a member of the plebeian gens Terentia" or "progressing through the stages of the cursus honorum, holding the quaestorship and both the plebeian and curule aedileships" are going to mean very little to the average reader. (For an example of how I have handled this sort of thing, see Gaius Vettius Sabinianus Julius Hospes#Early career.)
Cheers Gog the Mild, this is all really useful. I'll get to making those improvements both here and across my other edits. You've given me a lot of help here. LarciusFlavus (talk) 17:24, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
I've listed this article for review to hear general feedback and receive input on accessibility of the material. Connaught Laboratories' history as a non-commercial institution (no longer the case since privatization) provides important context to Canadian public health around the time that many important medical advances were made in the early 20th century. Since the 100th anniversary of these medical advances are on the horizon (the discovery and early development of insulin among them), information in this article may contribute some significant surrounding history.
I've listed this article for peer review because… it is listed as a start-class when it should be at least a B, if not higher. A lot has been added since it was last evaluated and really could use another look.
@Nikkimaria:I wasn't aware that was a thing, so I appreciate you for letting me know. If you could give me some advice on how to improve the article, I'd greatly appreciate it. If you think its good to go, then I'll list it for assessment.Eric Schucht (talk) 14:34, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
Lead section definitely needs to be significantly expanded - given the article size three paragraphs would be good
More citations are needed in general - ideally we'd want everything to be cited
Avoid positioning images such that small bits of text get sandwiched between them
Some of the references used, such as findagrave, are less than reliable
Citations should be complete, not just URLs, and should ideally be formatted consistently. Nikkimaria (talk) 14:42, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
I went through the page and reformatted and updated it's sources. I'm going to remove the peer review request and request a rating reassessment. If it wouldn't be too much trouble, I'd appreciate it if you could leave your feedback on the page's talk page so its easier for others to see. Thank you Eric Schucht (talk) 21:01, 26 May 2019 (UTC)
@FriyMan: Thank you for your interest in this article. I hope that you do find the time to take this very important article further (towards A-class and maybe even eventually FAC). In this regard, I have a few suggestions/observations: AustralianRupert (talk) 00:34, 29 June 2019 (UTC)
the sentence ending with "...already busy building Walrus and Stranraer flying boats, and Vickers was busy building Wellington bombers" needs a citation
same as above for the sentence ending with "...UK and the largest and most successful plant of its type during the 1939–45 conflict"
there are several uncited, or only partially cited paragraphs in the production dispersal section
the sentence ending with "provide an almost continual flow of valuable intelligence information throughout the war" needs a citation
same as above for the paragraph ending with "The last Lend-Lease shipment carrying the Mk IX arrived at the port of Severodvinsk on 12 June 1945"
same as above for the sentence ending "Spitfire pilots had to adopt a "slash and run" policy and use their faster speed and diving superiority to fight, while avoiding classic dogfights"
same as above for the paragraph ending "reached 606 mph (975 km/h) (Mach 0.891) in a 45° dive"
the tag in the Memorials section should be dealt with by adding the required citations, or removing what can't be referenced reliably
the first sentence of the Restorations section should just be combined with the paragaph below it, and cited
all entries, and the first paragraph of the notable appearances in media section will need citing, or removal if they can't be sourced
(very minor point) some of the citations use slightly different formats, for instance compare "Rearden (1995)" with "McKinstry 2007" and then "Keith, Claude Hilton (1946). I Hold My Aim. G. Allen and Unwin Limited. p. 78." For A-class these should be consistent
citations # 156 and 157 (adf serials) should be formatted to include the authors, title, publisher and accessdate
for a successful A-class review, even the notes will need citations. I note that some of them are currently cited, but some aren't
that is it for me, once the above points are covered off on, getting the article copy edited by the WP:GOCE might also be a good idea. Anyway, all the best. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 00:34, 29 June 2019 (UTC)
I've listed this article for peer review because after spending weeks on researching for this article (which I've already published in the French Wikipedia), I have the opinion that it deserves to become a featured article. I understand there may be several structural or other mistakes within the article, which is why I'm submitting this to you all.
My first comment is that the article is very long. At 59kB it is nudging the "Probably should be divided" level in WP:SIZERULE. I will not pretend to have read it all, but one point that stood out from my sampling of the article is the use of the historic present in recounting the day-by-day events. I have never encountered this in a Wikipedia article about historical events, and I found it rather distracting. Whether this would in itself sink the article at FAC I am not sure, but it is not even applied consistently. In this paragraph for instance the tenses clash:
The American reaction toward the putsch shocked several Georgians who had been convinced that the United States represented Russia's geopolitical alternative. However, it soon becomes clear that Washington sees Boris Yeltsin's Russia as a potential ally in the new post-Soviet world and for that reason, U.S. Secretary of State James Baker, who often criticized human rights violations made by Gamsakhurdia, ignored the same violations done under Eduard Shevardnadze, even supporting and advising the latter's presidency.
In the lead "a bloody civil war that lased 1994" needs attention.
I think using the historic present in the caption for Dudayev and Gamsakhurdia is all right. This seems to be the general usage for captions of this sort.
In the caption "Eduard Shevardnadze became the head of the Georgian state as soon as March 1992", English idiom requires "as early as" rather than "as soon as"
In the final paragraph the date range should have an en-dash rather than a hyphen, and I'm not sure what purpose the blue link serves for the years, here or elsewhere in the article.
You need to be consistent in capitalising Deputy (or deputy) Minister of Defense.
There is some WP:OVERLINKing that needs attention: we do not link the names of countries – Georgia, the United States, Great Britain; and there are far too many names and terms linked more than once: South Ossetia, Zviad Gamsakhurdi, and more than a hundred others.
The referencing needs a little attention. Reference 70 has an error message. All four footnotes a–d lack citations for the statements in them. The bibliography lacks ISBNs (or OCLC numbers) for some of the books.
I hope these few points are helpful. Tim riley talk 10:23, 9 May 2019 (UTC)
Tim riley already pointed out one example, but in the title, "1991-92" should also be "1991–92" because it's a date range. This also applies to date ranges throughout the article, e.g. "22-23 September" should be "22–23 September". (MOS:ENTO)
When an item in a range is more than one word long, the dash should be spaced, so in the infobox "2 December 1991–6 January 1992" should be "2 December 1991 – 6 January 1992".
Section headers should be in sentence case, not capitalised (e.g. "Historical Background" should be "Historical background"; "City Conditions" should be "City conditions", etc.), and should not begin with "The" (e.g. "The Conflict" should be "Conflict").
It might be worth double-checking the citations. The source for the figure of 113 dead is given as CommunistCrimes.org (which probably isn't a reliable source anyway), but the URL is dead. —Nizolan(talk · c.) 00:14, 13 July 2019 (UTC)
With what we have already, this article is fine. I couldn't spot any problems with the existing content. One thing I did encounter was the first sentence in the lead: "...native of the Tar Heel State of North Carolina." I am no American. I clicked on the link to Tar Heel State, which was just a redirect to North Carolina. I then had to read a bit to realize it was simply a nickname for North Carolina (if I am not mistaken). This got me a bit confused, so I think you should find a way to rephrase it so non-Tar Heelians will understand it. As for the article itself, I believe there is much more to tell about someone who wrote more than 600 articles and books, especially in America. The article says he wrote some books. What about them? What subjects did Powell deal with? What new fields of North Carolinian history did he research? What impact did his books have on the historiography of this state? Are there any debates on the history of North Carolina that Powell holds a specific view on? And talking about views, do we know something about his views, political or social? Did he have some interesting collaborations with other scholars, or made some big projects worth mentioning? Are there any interesting facts about Powel that have led you to expand this article? Some stuff the average reader would be interested to know? I hope I am not going too far here, and that most of these questions can be answered with the sources accessible to you. I made a simple search on the internet and found this page which shows clearly that there is a lot more to tell about this man.--Bolter21(talk to me) 17:49, 11 May 2019 (UTC)
I've listed this article for peer review because I have added over 94% of the content currently and the topic is related to a report that had far reaching implications for the Indian security system at a national level which are still being implemented to date. I would also request for comments related to any copyright violations, if found. Although I have checked for copyright violations, but I would still request someone to double check. (I have reduced copyvio as much as possible, names and quotes etc aside, of course). If possible, fact checking would be a good idea too. I have tried to make sure that the content is as accurate as possible, but again, since I have added over 94% os the content, asking for a peer review would also be a good idea. Before any more major expansion is done from my side, I want to be ensure that the current content is a good base, structured well, has no copy vios and is fact checked reasonably. This is a lot to ask, so accordingly I will add to other review requests shortly.
DiplomatTesterMan, congratulations on your first article! I took a quick glance through the results of Earwig's Copyvio Detector, and I don't seen anything that raises a warning flag. The vast majority of the matching text can't or shouldn't be changed, such as the names of groups. If you want to work on finer details, you could look for bits of matching text you can change, and reword those. For example in this comparison, you see 'Age profile of the army','could perhaps have been avoided', and 'surprise to the Indian government'.
This isn't mandatory, more a low-pressure suggestion which might give you a fresh view of the article. I'll let another editor (or several) work with you on the fact-checking and structure, and wish you the best of luck. Cheers, BlackcurrantTea (talk) 13:54, 11 February 2019 (UTC)
Comments/suggestions: G'day, thanks for your efforts on the article so far. I have the following suggestions/observations: AustralianRupert (talk) 07:12, 21 April 2019 (UTC)
in the lead, complete eviction of Pakistani intruders: suggest finding a different word to "intruders" as it might be seen as promoting a point of view. Maybe "soldiers" or "troops"?
are there any images that might be added -- even maybe a generic one related to the conflict?
in the Members section, does citation 11 cover the committee members? If it does, I suggest adding it thusly: "consisted of:"
is there a citation that could be added for the Recommendations?
the Recommendations section begins "The first recommendation..." but doesn't seem to refer to any others. Were there other recommendations?
Task forces were formed by the GoM, as suggested in the KRC report: --> "Several task forces were formed by the GoM, as suggested in the KRC report. These were:"
there a citation that could be added for the above mentioned list?
every item in the Timeline ection needs a reference
is there a citation for the quote beginning "To review the events leading up to the Pakistani aggression"?
DelhiSeptember 26, Prabhash K. Dutta New; September 26, 2018UPDATED: -- the parameters in the citation need to be reworked as this does not make sense
Various recommendation have not been fully: "recommendations" -- also needs a citation
border areas as well as the country -- > missing something: "border areas as well as the rest of the country" (or similar depending on what is meant)
@DiplomatTesterMan:: as this review has been open for several months now with no follow on comments, I suggest it be closed. Do you have any objections to this? I can help you with doing this if you need a hand with it. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 06:04, 18 June 2019 (UTC)
I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to continue to make improvements and bring it to FA standard. In particular, I would like specific feedback on comprehensiveness, coherence, and anything MOS-related (as this will be my first attempt at an FA), but feel free to nitpick anything and everything.
Howdy hello! I recently took this article to GA, and am looking to get it to FA. I've stared at the darn thing so long I'm starting to glaze over what could be fixed. It needs some fresh eyes, which is where you good folks come in! Your comments on the matter are most appreciated.
Do you have a phylogenetic tree you can add? Especially of the subspecies would be nice. Not sure what exists, but likely there is one comparing it to other species. Also, a map showing where the suspecies are found would be nice too, if it exists. --Nessie (talk) 19:28, 22 June 2019 (UTC)
I spent the period from November to April typing the content of the magazine Cosmoglotta from 1927 to 1951, the main journal in which the planned language Occidental (Interlingue) was published. On the way I added to the Interlingue article whenever I came across information or an event that seemed notable and neutral enough to include in the article. Now I've started the process of cleanup and am considering what direction, if any, I should take the article. Or maybe it is large and complete enough already and just needs more cleanup.
The short introduction to the language is that it was created from 1894 to 1922 by a former Volapükist and then Esperantist from Estonia who eventually decided it was ready to publish that year because the League of Nations had announced it was looking into the subject of an international language. It quickly became popular, eventually become the second most used international language after Esperanto (as far as I can tell, and by second most that's a very, very far second place - no other language has come close to Esperanto's size) but then was hit with a perfect storm of negative events after WWII and many of its adherents joined Interlingua after it was released in 1951. Then it nearly died by the 1980s, and came back to life with the internet.
The typing of Cosmoglotta is now done but the content is still fresh in my mind so this seems like a good time for a peer review.
I've listed this article for peer review because seven years ago, it was the first of many articles about notable missing-person cases I've written since. I think it's worth GA consideration, and I'd like some feedback in that direction.
Updating peer review to reflect title of page. Currently nearly completed good article assessment. --E.3 (talk) 08:18, 1 June 2019 (UTC)
I've listed this mid importance topic for peer review under social science and society. It has just achieved GA status with extensive review and any improvement would be most welcome by any interested Wikipedian, I'd like to aim for FA status after peer review. --E.3 (talk) 00:04, 7 June 2019 (UTC)
Ok, this (Digital media use has been investigated in terms of mental health symptoms and diagnoses from many perspectives. - sounds vague and obvious, and should be combined with sentence 3 (They have been under study and analysis for some years, predominantly by psychologists, sociologists, anthropologists and medical experts. ) --> how about, "The possible mental health complications/implications of digital media use have been investigated by various researchers and cllinicians—predominantly psychologists, sociologists, anthropologists and medical experts—for some years."
These phenomena behave differently in various societies and cultures. --> "behave" makes me think of a sentient entity..... --> "These phenomena manifest differently in various societies and cultures."
The delineation between beneficial and pathological use of digital media is not comprehensively codified, - hah, "codified" is ambitious! maybe "established" even (well, apart from self proclaimed experts coming up with random times on morning TV shows...)
Thanks so much for that @Cas Liber:, I'll look at that in the coming week! --E.3 (talk) 11:50, 23 June 2019 (UTC)
Thanks again @Casliber:, what do you think? I didn't say possible relationships as suggested because there are some relationships that have been established in the article, and I caveat them very carefully. Any further thoughts on the rest of the article with your expertise both on wiki and being a psychiatrist would be very welcome. --E.3 (talk) 11:39, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
The relationships between digital media use and mental health has been investigated by various researchers and clinicians - umm, if a clinician is doing research then they're a researcher, right? Which makes "and clinicians" redundant here..?
The History and terminology section talks of benefits but these don't appear to be discussed anywhere in the article.
Comment: Most of the benefits appear to be in education and development as far as I understand have you heard of more specifically in mental health? I have WP:SYNTH issues with the title because I'm talking about mental health. The best quality evidence as stated appears to be the "U-shaped, curvilinear" moderate digital media use that I state a few times. Do you think I should go into educational / developmental benefits? --E.3 (talk) 14:10, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
Added a new section what do you think? --[E.3][chat2][me] 14:08, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
A big issue is whether this counts as a medical article or not - the article has material sourced from primary sources. In many areas, using this with care is okay as otherwsie there would be comprehensiveness issues. However in medical articles there is a much stricter adherence to secondary sources. Psychology is a bit of a grey area.....
Comment: Yes this was originally an anthropological/sociological perspective hence the less strict application of MEDRS. Psychology is indeed a grey area. And we don't really have a psychiatric consensus so that's why I have taken this approach. Many thanks again!--E.3 (talk) 14:10, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
Comment: I think most if not all of the medical claims are now WP:MEDRS complaint. Perhaps not bipolar disorder, but quoting that study, I am essentially after the expert opinion that there are risks and challenges for that condition. --[E.3][chat2][me] 14:08, 6 July 2019 (UTC)
Looking at the lead by itself I feel satisfied that I know the importance of the topic. Looking at the lead again after reading the rest of the article, the lead reflects the most important information but could outline the article better by clearly stating the 5 main headings. The lead gives more weight to the problematic digital media use over other main points of the article. The problematic digital media usage is by far way more dense than any other section. I feel the digital technology usage examples and other disciplines were lacking in the lead.
The sections are well organized for the most part. I felt the section’s order could be tweaked a little instead of the current order it might flow better as: History and terminology Problematic digital media use Other disciplines Assessment and Treatment Digital technology use in mental health care Response of Large Technology firms
Fixed Although Assessment and Treatment could be a separate section, given the breadth of this article, I think it should remain under problematic digital media use - otherwise the section heading would be overlong being Assessment and treatment of problematic digital media use' --E.3 (talk) 15:47, 1 July 2019 (UTC)
I think each section’s length is equal to importance to the article’s subject. Because the article is about digital media use and mental health it makes sense that the largest section should be the section relating the two and how the two impact each other. As I noted above, I think ‘assessment and treatment’ should be it’s own section because we have now moved on from the analysis of how digital media use and mental health affect each other and now we are talking about a solution to the issue at hand. I think each section was necessary and reflect all the perspectives represented in the published literature. The significant views were directly included in the other disciplines section. I don’t believe the article draws conclusions or tries to convince the reader to accept a particular point of view. If I were to describe the article’s language I would say it is clinical rather than emotional.
I do not think I could guess the perspective of the author by reading the article because there is no bias and the writing appears to be impartial. There is a sentence that uses the "While it's obvious that x, some insist that y." phrase in the introduction of the article stating “While mental health problems have occurred throughout human history, scientists are unclear as to the direct links between digital media use and mental health outcomes.” However, I do not feel this was an example or there were any examples of words or phrases that do not feel neutral.
This article does not make any claims on behalf of unnamed groups or people any more than academic journals do when referring to scholars they have cited correctly. The article does not completely bombard you with negative information but it does not sugar coat some of the very serious affect digital media use can have on your mental health. This appears to be a clear reflection of various aspects of a topic.
Most statements in the article are connected to a reliable source such as textbooks and journal articles. Although there are some, the author does not rely on blogs or self-published authors. There are not a lot of statements attributed to only one or two sources. The article is balanced and does not lean too heavily into a single point of view. From what I observed there are no unsourced statements in the article or statements that I cannot find stated in the references. The sources are both listed and presented accurately. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ebaleto (talk • contribs) 06:47, 23 June 2019 (UTC)
I just rewrote this article from fresh in replace of the old article deals 1980s stuff. It's somewhat lengthy for a single editor and I certainty have made a few mistakes here and there. A second eye would be mostly appreciated.
I've listed this article for peer review because the article has reached a "stalemate". That is, the only things being actively, constructively, edited are the lists of examples and typology. In particular, I would like input on its legal definition, the text of the lede, and specific examples from history. However, everything about the article could use feedback, and any feedback would be helpful.
I believe it is a good quality article but since I'm almost the only user who has worked on it, it would be great to have other eyes read and improve it. Is the content balanced enough or is it one-sided with an uneven focus on military relations? Or, should some of the sections be (re)moved? Any constructive comments are welcome.
I've listed this article for peer review because it has been added to greatly since a previous peer review in 2009. In the coming months I expect to nominate the team and its associated featured articles and lists for a featured topic. This list is too short for a featured list, and I expect reviewers at FT may want a more recent peer review that reflects on its current state rather than 10 years ago. Shortness aside, I feel it is currently at or near FL criteria.
I've listed this article for peer review because it has had quite a substantial update with new references.
The page (including the talk page) has had a tidy up, and it would be an ambition for it to be considered a "featured list".
I'm looking for comments on the list itself and anything else that needs adding, was wondering if a graph showing the history of expansions would be useful.
I've listed this article for peer review because list of 5 wicket hauls is usually checked on by cricket fans. I believe that the article is ready for Featured list submission, if recommended by the peer reviewer
Thanks, Kalyan (talk) 17:53, 18 January 2019 (UTC)
Hi Kalyan, this is some great work! Please see my comments below:
Hi Ian, Thanks for the extensive feedback. I've incorporated all the feedback. Can you take a look at it one more time. Kalyan (talk) 16:04, 22 January 2019 (UTC)
I've done some general copyediting in the article. The main point from me is that the WP:LEAD should summarise the article. Instead, it just seems to introduce the concept of cricket, and the different formats available. This sort of introduction, if necessary, should be placed elsewhere, and the lead changed to reflect the key points of the article. Harriastalk 09:44, 9 February 2019 (UTC)