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GA Review

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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 22:43, 31 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 22:43, 31 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]


Infobox

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  • The single cover image requires an alt
  • You can remove the caption because it is the unanimous cover for the physical and digital releases
  • Please remove "Chart position", "Reviews", and "Miscellaneous" from the infobox

Lead

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Paragraph 1

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  • "It premiered" → "It was released"

Paragraph 2

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  • "song's commercial appeal. Critics also felt it..." → "song's commercial appeals; they also felt it..."
  • If the song was on the chart for 12 straight weeks, could you add "consecutive" before 12?

Paragraph 3

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  • "were directed for the single;" → "were created for the single;"
  • Can you rephrase the last sentence in this paragraph?

Background and composition

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Paragraph 1

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  • Instead of "On September 10," could you say "Two days later"?

Paragraph 2

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  • The first 'p' in 'Pop music' should be lowercased
  • "The use of drum machines were overlapped..." → "The use of drums machines was overlapped..."

Critical reception

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Paragraph 1

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  • Italicize "AllMusic" please
  • "song. Sullivan highlighted..." → "song; Sullivan highlighted..."
  • Italicize "Idolator" please
  • "positive in their review. They commended the..." → "positive in their review; they commended the..."

Paragraph 2

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  • Instead of using just "Greg", you said user "A reviewer" since "Greg" is just so informal
  • "in his review. He commended the..." → "in his review; he commended the..."
  • In the above comment, you could also use "praised" instead of "commended"
  • Instead of "&" you should say "and"
  • Remove the link to "Asian Junkie"; it's unnecessary

Accolades

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  • Put quotation marks around "21 Greatest K-Pop Songs of All Time List"; capitalized 'songs' as wel

Commercial response

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  • Reword to "The single charted on US Dance Club Songs chart; it debuted at number 42 and peaked at number 27 for the week ending December 27, 2008."

Music videos

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  • "plan" → "planned"
  • The rest is great!

Promotion and legacy

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Paragraph 2

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  • Reword the first sentence please; it's a bit confusing

Paragraph 3

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  • In the final sentence, change "label" to "labelled"

Track list

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  • Rename section to "Track listing"

Credits and personnel

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  • You could columnize this so it's more compacy

End of GA Review:

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Great job! Per standard procedure, I shall place on hold for seven days. Great job as always! Carbrera (talk) 03:28, 3 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: Done and dusted! :) CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 03:29, 4 April 2016 (UTC)[reply]