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Reviewer: Blackjacks101 (talk) 21:45, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Because of the friendliness I was given previously I am gladly reviewing this article as well.--Blackjacks101 (talk) 21:45, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

  • Overall, it's the third single which Rowland and Guetta have worked on, the first being Guetta's number one dance track "When Love Takes Over" and the second being Rowland's comeback single "Commander." – Comma needed before and after “when loves takes over” and comma before “commander”

Background and concept

Synopsis

  • As the bridge kicks in, the images flicker to a party scene on a rooftop with lots of people enjoying themselves. Then the finger re-appears and clicks on the scroll bar, which appears on screen as if to rewind the clip and the original scene of Rowland alone on the rooftop plays as the music fades. – you have already started the previous two sentences with “as the” and “then” try switching it up

Reception

  • A review from Idolator said that the futuristic theme to the video might have been better suited to previous single, "Commander." – put "the" before “previous single” and you might want to add international between “previous and “single”

All in all great job on the article, it was very well written and will be passed as soon as these very small errors are fixed.--Blackjacks101 (talk) 23:09, 18 December 2010 (UTC)[reply]