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Reviewer: Jens Lallensack (talk · contribs) 00:37, 6 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]


Reading now.

Sources review First, I do some spot checks to assess whether the information is supported by the provided sources, and if there is close paraphrasing:

  • The tail measures around 115–126 mm in length and 19–23 mm in depth. They have short legs and a wingspan of 134 mm. These birds have a bill depth of 0,4 mm and a bill length of 2.8 mm.[10] – I can't find any of this information in source 10?
  • First paragraph of "vocalisations": Why do you use a very old version of "Birds of the world" for the first sentence, and the new version for the rest? The first sentence is supported by the new version, too.
  • The content is supported by the source, but we have serious issues with WP:Close paraphrasing here. Often, parts of sentences are directly,copied, and in one case, an entire sentence was copied (Pre-dawn calls include jwaaa-jwaaa and jeewy-jeeerr). This is copyright violation.
  • It has been observed that fork-tailed drongos spend a quarter of their time following other animals – The source says 29%, which is as close to a quarter than it is to a third. The sentence therefore does not reflect the source accurately.
  • They exhibit monogamous behavior and are known for their aggressiveness towards other drongos, as well as nest predators like crows, birds of prey, hornbills, shrikes, small mammals, and large snakes. Partners perch together, performing duets, and displaying behaviors such as bowing and bobbing their heads. Brood parasitism on groundscraper thrush have been observed. – Again way too much close paraphrasing here (in particular, creative, non-trivial expressions like "bowing and bobbing" can't be copied. You need to use your own words).
  • Range: Southwestern Chad east to Ethiopia, Eritrea, and Somalia, south to northern Democratic Republic of the Congo, northern Uganda, and northern Kenya.[7] – Can't find this in the source.

Unfortunately, the article has serious issues with sources. In particular, the copyright violations are a no-go. I have to close this GAN prematurely alone for these reasons, but I am happy to help you developing the article afterwards. Here is what I think you could do:

  • Read and understand WP:Close paraphrasing carefully
  • Work through the entire article, sentence by sentence, to check if the information is actually in the source and if close paraphrasing is absent. I know, this is quite a bit of work, but I fear there is no way around it. Content with such copyright violations, as well as unsourced content, risks eventual deletion.
  • Maybe there are some sentences that have close paraphrasing but you don't know how to re-formulate them. List them somewhere.
  • After doing the above, list the article at WP:Peer Review. Ping me, so that I know. Copy the list of close-paraphrasing sentences into that review, asking for help to re-formulate.
  • In the Peer Review, we could tackle other issues. There is missing information (the Distribution needs to be more precise, for example; also, more about the first description of the species is needed, ideally with a link to that first description). The language also needs to be improved (already the first sentences in "Taxonomy" have multiple issues each). It would be a long way, but it's a learning process. Hope this helps. --Jens Lallensack (talk) 01:24, 6 March 2024 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.