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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:27, 24 November 2021 (UTC)
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You do have a good amount of GANs up; here's another review from me! --K. Peake 08:27, 24 November 2021 (UTC)
- Thank you very much! Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:59, 24 November 2021 (UTC)
Lead
[edit]- What exactly makes the img relevant here?
- Contemporary image of just such a scene in Bellman's Stockholm.
- Remove comma after the brackets
- Done.
- Like last time, the best-known and best-loved songs info should not be in the opening sentence; instead, mention that it is Epistle No. 40 them from his 1790 collection
- Done.
- Add a sentence mentioning the pattern of the verses here
- Done.
- "with soldiers mixed up" → "where soldiers mixed up"
- Done.
- The subtitle is not sourced anywhere in the body
- Added.
- Remove musicologist introduction to James Massengale since this being in the body is sufficient
- Done.
- Maybe add what writers actually praised about the song and if any of the covers are notable enough, mention them here
- Added.
Context
[edit]- Pipe King Gustav III to Gustav III on the img text
- Done.
- [1] should be solely at the end of the sentence
- Moved.
- "from drinking songs to" → "such as drinking songs and"
- Done.
- "during the eighteenth century." → "during the 18th century." per MOS:NUM
- Done.
Song
[edit]Music and verse form
[edit]- Like last time, add text for the audio sample to comply with WP:NFCCP
- Done.
- "each of 14 lines." → "each consisting of 14 lines."
- Done.
- Pipe rhyming pattern to Rhyme scheme
- Done.
- Img looks good!
- Thanks!
Lyrics
[edit]- "the soldiers; the chimney" → "the soldiers. Meanwhile, the chimney" to avoid an overly long sentence, as the voiced parts can be separate from the rest anyway
- Split.
- Start box looks good!
- Noted.
Reception
[edit]- Pipe musicologist to Musicology
- Done.
- "and divisions of the music" → "and divisions of it"
- Edited.
- "he interjects short" → "Bellman interjects short"
- Done.
- "at the start and" → "at the start," since this is not the end
- Done.
- Is the comma supposed to be inside speech marks for "Skyldra"?
- Yes.
- Thanks for clarifying! --K. Peake 09:23, 25 November 2021 (UTC)
- The word "very" is not needed before beginning
- Gone.
- Pipe syntactic to Syntax
- Done.
- Pipe Wedding at Cana to Marriage at Cana on the img text
- Done.
- "furioso"[11] in which it's" → "furioso",[11] in which it is"
- Done.
- Start a new sentence at "What Fredman himself"
- Done.
"The critic Bo Nordstrand notes" → "Critic Bo Nordstrand notes"No, that's way too American.
- Pipe Wedding at Cana to Marriage at Cana
- Done.
- Start a new sentence at "Like his contemporaries,"
- Done.
- "and that quote the Bible" → "and draw quotes from the Bible"
- Edited.
- Pipe book of Psalms to Psalms
- Done.
- "society chapter rituals and" → "society chapter rituals, and"
- Done.
- "The Bellman Society describes it as" → "The Bellman Society wrote of the composition," with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
- Done.
Performances and adaptions
[edit]- The covers need more information than just appearing on albums to remain per WP:SONGCOVER
- Removed for now.
- If the covers end up lacking notability, then merge the translation with the above section and retitle to Reception and legacy
- Done.
References
[edit]- Copyvio score looks very good at 26.5%!!!
- Thank goodness.
- Refs 2 and 8 are duplicates; is this a mistake or are they supposed to be citing separate pages?
- Merged.
- The Bellman Society → Bellman Society on ref 3 with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
- Done.
- Add language parameter for refs 10, 12 and 15
- Done.
- The Bellman Society → Bellman Society on ref 13 and add the language parameter
- Done.
Sources
[edit]- Good
- Noted.
External links
[edit]- After the titles of links, add at followed by the website
- Done.
- Remove the first YouTube link since it is a copyright violation
- Gone.
Final comments and verdict
[edit]- On hold until all of the issues are fixed; another relatively quick review! --K. Peake 11:56, 24 November 2021 (UTC)
- I think that's everything done now. Chiswick Chap (talk) 13:45, 24 November 2021 (UTC)
- ✓ Pass now, smooth job once again! --K. Peake 09:23, 25 November 2021 (UTC)