Talk:Glenn Robinson III/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 03:12, 20 December 2012 (UTC)

I will be reviewing the article. Comments will be posted within 12 hours.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 03:12, 20 December 2012 (UTC)

Lead

• "He is the son of 1994 NBA first overall draft pick Glenn Robinson." Try to avoid having wikileaks back-to-back. Maybe something like "He is the son of Glenn Robinson, the 1994 NBA first overall draft pick."
  • done.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:35, 23 December 2012 (UTC)
• "he committed to Michigan before" -> "he committed to Michigan University before"
  • O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:36, 23 December 2012 (UTC)
• " three-star prospect" by whom?
  • added.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:39, 23 December 2012 (UTC)
• "he was a five-star top 20 prospect in the national class according to some" should be a comma have five-star. Also, by whom?
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:48, 23 December 2012 (UTC)
• " selectors, but did appear in" remove comma
  • I added a he instead.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:40, 23 December 2012 (UTC)

Background

• "was a first-team All-area selection" what does this mean?
  • Typically all-area means All-city and surrounding area. Something like All-northwest Indiana.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 04:00, 23 December 2012 (UTC)
    • Oh, ok. Makes sense.
      —Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 20:53, 31 December 2012 (UTC)
• "and Indiana State and Rivals.com rated him" -> "and Indiana State, and Rivals.com rated him"
  • O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:52, 23 December 2012 (UTC)
• "He and Mitch McGary had" who is Mitch McGary?
  • That sentence and the subsequent one provide context and his name is linked. What more do you want?--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:56, 23 December 2012 (UTC)
  • Ah, my bad. I didn't see it was linked.
• "By the time McGary committed to Michigan in November 2011, Robinson had moved up to the national number 34 player ranking according to Rivals.com." unsourced
  • The reference for the subsequent sentence covers it. I don't think we need to put the same reference on two consecutive sentences.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 03:58, 23 December 2012 (UTC)
    • Fair enough.
      —Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 20:53, 31 December 2012 (UTC)

I'll finish the rest once I get off work today.

I apologize for the delay, but I don't really have a lot of extra time because of the Holidays. I will reply back by the end of the week.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 04:47, 25 December 2012 (UTC)

Once again, I apologize. I am finishing the review now.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 20:40, 31 December 2012 (UTC)

Background (part 2)

• "Robinson earned MVP honors with 33..." I suggest spelling out Mose Valuable Player (MVP), as people outside the sports world might not know what this means.
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 00:49, 1 January 2013 (UTC)
• "Although, he finished as the highest rated Indiana basketball player according to Rivals.com and the Indiana Basketball News state MVP,[26][2] he was not a McDonalds selectee." Is there any reason why he wasn't selected? If not, it's fine.
  • Basically some selectors thought he was top 20 or top 24 and others did not. I don't know how many McDs selected last year, but he was outside the cutoff at the time of selection.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 00:51, 1 January 2013 (UTC)

College career

• "eight field goals in a November 12 91–54 victory against" the 12 91 part looks weird to me for some reason. I'd try to reword it to something like "eight field goals in a 91–54 victory on November 12"
  • Done.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 00:56, 1 January 2013 (UTC)

Personal

• "Robinson III's nickname is "Trey".[4][1]" -> "Robinson III's nickname is "Trey".[1][4]"
  • O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 00:58, 1 January 2013 (UTC)

Refs

• Reference #14 doesn't have a work or publisher
  • publishr --> publisher.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 01:01, 1 January 2013 (UTC)

External links

• "Robinson III at ESPN" and "Robinson III @ CBS Sports" Either change them all to "at" or all to "@".
  • Fixed.--TonyTheTiger (T/C/BIO/WP:CHICAGO/WP:FOUR) 01:00, 1 January 2013 (UTC)

Article looks good; once these are completed I will most likely pass the article.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 20:53, 31 December 2012 (UTC)

OK. Passed. Good work.
—Michael Jester (talk · contribs) 02:24, 1 January 2013 (UTC)