Talk:Gordon Banks/GA1

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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk · contribs) 12:36, 16 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll grab this one now for a review this evening. Miyagawa (talk) 12:36, 16 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Images check out. I took the liberty of categorising the new image on Commons. Miyagawa (talk) 21:26, 16 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

There are quiet a few duplicate links, I lost count somewhere around forty. User:Ucucha/duplinks is a good tool for spotting them.

Having a read through now and there's one recurring element which could be copyedited - where you've said "for a £xx fee" could just be "for £xx".

Lead: "He made one of the game's great saves" - I don't doubt it, but it needs to attributed to someone's opinion in order to avoid being considered original research.

Chesterfield: Might be worth not piping Tinsley, so that it reads Tinsley, South Yorkshire. Once that's done, there wouldn't be a need to mention that Catcliffe is also in South Yorkshire as it'll be presumed.

How much later did Banks' brother die? You say later, but was it shortly after or was he injured in a manner which caused his death years later? Best to clarify.

Regarding his debut for Millspaugh, was Banks at the match as a spectator? Just wondering how he was brought into the team. Might also be worthwhile saying that he continued to play for Millspaugh after being dropped by Rawmarsh (at least that's what I'm presuming happened).

"However the reserve team were placed in..." - I do this myself, there isn't a need for the However.

Link Royal Signals, and Busby Babes to Busby Babes rather than Matt Busby.

Who was surprised by the transfer to Leicester?

Leicester City: "who had already ran away with the First Division title with ease and style", a bit encyclopaedic - needs to just be something like "who had already won the First Division title". If you want to express how easy they won it, then you might want to say how many points they won it by - stats are bound to be at the RSSSF or the Football League websites.

"but then turned on the style with a 8–1 demolition" - just needs to be 8-1 defeat per Wikipedia:Manual of Style/Words to watch.

Stoke City: As with the comment about the lead, the best saves point needs to be attributed to someone. Even if it's just the saves that Banks himself considers to be his best.

References: Ref #1 needs an access date and a creation date (well, update date).

35 could do with publisher information added - worldcat.org is a good resource. #48 just needs the publisher location added. Again worldcat should have the answer.
61 needs the publishing date added.

What makes #66 a reliable source.

102 needs the author and publishing date added.
111 needs to be formatted like the other references.
115 needs a publishing date.
123 needs an author and access date added.
138 it seems unlikely that "Times Online" is the article title.

That seems to be it, they're all mostly just copyediting tweaks and so I'll put this on hold for seven days and then will review progress. Miyagawa (talk) 12:26, 18 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I have made the edits you recommend. Thanks.--Echetus Xe 19:29, 18 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Good work, the article looks good, and I'll be happy to promote once the duplicate links are tidied up. Miyagawa (talk) 19:43, 18 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Any progress with this one? Miyagawa (talk) 08:16, 9 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Unless I'm missing something, I can't personally see any duplicate links. Lukeno94 (tell Luke off here) 13:26, 9 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll list them below as shown by the duplicate link checking tool. Miyagawa (talk) 14:08, 9 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Matt Gillies - Leicester City, first paragraph
First Division - Leicester City, second paragraph
Manchester United - Leicester City, fourth paragraph
Matt Gilles, West Ham United - Leicester City, eighth paragraph
Filbert Street, Matt Gilles, Victoria Ground - Stoke City, first paragraph
First Division - Stoke City, second paragraph
Manchester City, Tottenham Hotspur, White Hart Lane - Stoke City, third paragraph
FA Cup, Hillsborough Stadium - Stoke City, fourth paragraph
Chesterfield FC, Manchester United, Goodison Park, Frank McLintock, League Cup, West Ham United, Chelsea FC - Stoke City, fifth paragraph
England national football team, Scotland national football team, Wembley Stadium (1923), Portugal national football team, Blackpool FC - second paragraph, International career
Geoff Hurst, Portugal national football team, Bobby Charlton, Jack Charlton - second paragraph, 1966 World Cup
West Germany national football team, Ray Wilson - third paragraph, 1966 World Cup
Yugoslavia national football team - Euro 1968
Peter Bonetti, Bobby Moore, Geoff Hurst, Brazil national football team - first paragraph, 1970 World Cup
Hungary national football team - first paragraph, Final Years
Jackie Mudie - Coaching career
National service, Germany - first paragraph, Personal life
Leicester City, Stoke City - second paragraph, Personal life
Pele - fourth paragraph, Personal life

I really can't recommend User:Ucucha/duplinks to add the Highlight duplicate links tool so that you can see these. Miyagawa (talk) 14:08, 9 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Ah, my bad, I misinterpreted "links" as referring to references, d'oh. I'll go and fix it for you. Lukeno94 (tell Luke off here) 14:38, 9 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Let me know if I missed anything :) Lukeno94 (tell Luke off here) 14:54, 9 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Perfect, that was all that was standing between this article and GA. So happy to promote now. Miyagawa (talk) 15:36, 9 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]