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Reviewer: Moswento (talk · contribs) 09:17, 23 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Overall
  • Overall, this is a great article - well-research, well-written, comprehensive, balanced and mouth-watering. Nothing seems to be missing, the sources are all used appropriately, and the picture licenses check out. I have a few minor comments on the text, and then I'll be pleased to promote this to GA. Good stuff! Moswento talky 11:29, 23 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Lead
  • "£2 million" - "Description" says £2.5 million, I see no reason to round down further here
Description
  • "can access the restaurant. The restaurant" - repetition of "The restaurant" is a bit awkward
Menu
  • "There are up to four choices for each of three courses which comes packaged in a cool box." - The second half of this doesn't quite follow. I would just add the word "cool" into the previous sentence, and end this sentence after "courses"
History
  • "open upon the opening" - The repetition makes this sounds awkward. "launch upon the opening"?
  • "due to the requirements for speed of dining and the volume of single diners due to the location within" - The two "due to" makes this a cumbersome sentence. Perhaps move the location further up in the sentence. "His 2010 opening, Bread Street Kitchen, was based on the same concept as Plane Food, as its location within the One New Change office and retail development created a similar need to cater for quick dining and a high volume of single diners"?
Reception
  • In the sea bream caption, why is "Sea Bream" capitalised?
  • "and was too expensive for those travelling in economy." - this doesn't quite follow, as the subject of the verb is "quality of food". "but the pricing was too expensive for those travelling in economy"?
  • "didn't care for the vegetable accompaniments." - "didn't care for" seems a bit too informal to my ears.
  • "it difficult to believe the food was inside an airport due to the normal expectation of food at such a venue." - this is quite an unwieldy way of saying it. Perhaps "finding it difficult to believe that food of such good quality was being served inside an airport".
  • "saying that "tuck into a smoked salmon and cream cheese sandwich with apple and walnut salad was a delight"." - the "saying that" doesn't lead into the quote. Perhaps you meant to add a "to" here?
  • "But said that the Croque monsieur was bland and didn't like the lack of a drink" - this sentence doesn't stand alone as it is. Perhaps change the "but" for a "However, " add "he" before "said" and "didn't", and add the word "Overall" to the start of the next sentence.
  • "saying about the in-flight [...]" - I feel a word is missing here.