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Reviewer: Kges1901 (talk · contribs) 02:21, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

I'll take this one as well. Comments: Lead

  • Suggest linking 12-inch guns
    • Done
  • she was reorganized into the Home Fleet is potentially confusing, perhaps reword as transferred to the Home Fleet when the Mediterranean Fleet was reorganized into a squadron of it' or something similar
    • That works for me.
  • and converted 'was' may be necessary here
    • Fixed

More later. Kges1901 (talk) 02:21, 23 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks - I've fixed the Design section issues you highlighted in the Montagu/Cornwallis reviews, so hopefully that'll save you a little time ;) Parsecboy (talk) 17:22, 24 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Operational history

  • In general, you have year duplication in this section
    • Fixed
  • four surviving sister ships of the Duncan class could just be 'surviving sister ships' and not mention class
    • Done
  • abolished temporarily suggest 'temporarily abolished'
    • Done
  • Duncan and her four Duncan-class sisters, as well as the battleships of the King Edward VII class, temporarily were transferred no need to mention class name again, suggest 'were temporarily transferred' instead
    • Done
  • Albemarle and the rest of the 3rd Squadron Shouldn't that be Duncan instead?
    • Indeed
  • use the fleet in an active way Suggest 'use the fleet for active operations'
    • Sounds good to me
  • neutral Greece 'neutral' is redundant
    • Good catch
  • dup link Salonika
    • Fixed
  • operations against Greek royalists what exactly were these operations?
    • Added a bit of detail on this
  • Is the shipbreaking company notable enough for a link?
    • Probably not
  • Suggest adding at least one image to the body, as the service history has no media currently
    • I don't know that there's a good option - I could do a map, but the ship kind of bounced around during the war and wasn't particularly active in any single area
  • No, he doesn't attribute any of the photos. I don't know what use the badge would be, apart from purely decorative. Unfortunately, the British pre-dreadnoughts don't have many pictures of them available online (that are easily provable to be in the public domain - my go-to resource is the NHHC's collection, but for whatever unknown reason, it doesn't include many British ships). Parsecboy (talk) 21:49, 27 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]

That's all I have. Kges1901 (talk) 17:02, 27 December 2018 (UTC)[reply]