Talk:Hellbound (The X-Files)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: TBrandley (talk · contribs) 02:53, 20 July 2012 (UTC)

Issues

General

• No dab links. Great work!
• No dead links. Great work!
• Non-free images have good rationales.

Infobox

• Cut down on the red links
  • It's only one. The red link is going to the page for the writer, which TXF's project will make soon.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:32, 20 July 2012 (UTC)

Lede

• Unlink American as per WP:OVERLINK
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Cut down on red links
  • See above.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Monster-of-the-Week should be "monster-of-the-week", with quotation marks
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Unlink "monster-of-the-week" per Squeeze (The X-Files)
  • I don't see any harm with having it.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• "unconnected to the series' wider mythology" should be "a stand-alone plot which is unconnected to the overarching fictional history of The X-Files"
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• I'd imagine it would earn a Nielsen rating, what Nielsen rating?
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Also, re-write to: "Hellbound" earned a Nielsen rating of X, being watched by 7.8 million viewers in its initial broadcast
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• It received mixed reviews from television critics → The episode has generally received mixed reviews from television critics.
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• "The official website for The X-Files notes that the episode's plot is similar to mythology surrounding the Aztec agriculture god Xipe Totec". Don't think the official website needs to be noted.
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• "The layers was then peeled off." run-on sentence that could be merged
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)

Plot

• Link Novi
  • It's not real.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Link Virgina
  • That seems like over-linking it me.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Add actor in brackets for "Dr. Lisa Holland"; it can clearly be seen in the infobox
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• "the members discuss turning their lives around". Awkward. Can't really understand
  • Reworded.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Add actor for "Terry Pruit" in brackets
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Add actor for "Ed" in brackets
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Hell doesn't need to be in capitals.
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Unlink hell per WP:OVERLINK
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Add actor for "Detective Van Allen"
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Add actor for "Dr. Bertram Mueller"
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Potts. Mueller needs actor
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• "The episode ends" isn't really needed. It that is last sentence of section people should already know
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Detective Van Allen should be "Allen" as it is above
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Same for various others, if it is mentioned more than once should be there last name per MOS:
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)

Production

• Cut down on the red links
  • See above.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• No mention of how many directing credits. Was it the directors first credit, etc.? Thanks!
  • Is that really important? It's, like, his 53rd or something. Not really a special number.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• "Executive producer John Shiban later explained that, since Doggett and Reyes were in control of The X-Files, the producers needed to give one of them a drive." citation/reference needed
  • It's the citation after the sentence, "The Truth About Season 9". Cites don't have to always come after a sentence. You can bundle them at the end.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• "The official website for The X-Files notes that the episode's plot is similar to mythology surrounding the Aztec agriculture god Xipe Totec". Don't think the official website needs to be noted.
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)

Broadcast and reception

• "Hellbound" originally aired in the United States on the Fox network on January 27, 2002 and in the United Kingdom on BBC One on January 5, 2003" Re-write to: "Hellbound" originally aired on the Fox network on January 27, 2002, and was first broadcast in the United Kingdom on BBC One on January 5, 2003"
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• The episode received a Nielsen household rating of 5.1, meaning that it was seen by 5.1% of the nation's estimated households. Then entry was viewed by 5.4 million households and by 7.8 million viewers. It was the 71st most watched episode of television that aired during the week ending January 27". Rewrite to: The episode's initial broadcast was viewed by approximately 5.4 million households, and 7.7 million viewers, making it the seventh-first most watched episode of television that aired during the week ending January 27. "Hellbound" earned a Nielsen household rating of 5.1, meaning that it was seen by 5.1% of the nation's estimated households
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Above it says Nielsen rating, here it is says Nielsen household rating, which is it?
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• "The episode received mostly positive reviews from critics" should be "The episode has generally received mixed reviews from television critics"
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• B should be in quotations
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• "Jessica Morgan from Television Without Pity gave the episode a B grade" anything else?
  • No, those reviews are usually just recaps.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• John Keegan who is that. What critic, etc. Another thing, you jump from one review to another. Very confusing
  • He's the Critical Myth guy. I'm not sure how to make them less un-jumpy. They're written like all the other articles that have passed, and they read fine to me.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• There should be ref. for each sentence for critic reviews
  • I'm not so sure. Usually, I put a ref after a direct quote or the end of a reference. You don't have to have a ref at the end of every sentence, per Wikipedia:Citation overkill

Notes

• There are no issues

References

• Ref. 4, 6, 8, 9, 11, 14: All should be linked to the book source below as in Squeeze (The X-Files)
  • I wouldn't say this is necessary. GA doesn't require perfect sourcing methodology, and my notes should be fine enough to pass. Granted, if this was up for FAR, I'd agree, but it isn't, yet.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Ref. 5: Season 9, and 20th Century Fox Home Entertainment should be unlinked as it already is above
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Ref. 7: Fox Broadcasting Company is already linked before. Thus, that should be unlinked
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Ref. 7: Shouldn't XFiles.com be in italics as it is the work, Fox is the publisher
  • XFiles.com is a website, and as such, shouldn't be in italics.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Ref. 12: No space is needed on "NBC Universal". That being said, it should be "NBCUniversal"
  •  Done--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)

External links

• "Hellbound" on The X-Files Wiki, an external wiki. The X-Files shouldn't be italic, as this is for the wiki, not show, and there website isn't in italics like that
  • The X-Files is the name of the show; the title is referring to the show, as it is a wikia about the show.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
• Wikiquote should be "The X-Files" not "TXF Season 9" per Squeeze (The X-Files)
  • I don't see why this needs to change. It's been like that on the "Squeeze" page since before it was an FA, meaning that it was not the FAR that suggested the change. I feel this is just a stylistic difference, and for the sake of continuity, I'd like to keep it.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)
    • That's fine.

That's all. Good work! TBrandley 04:05, 20 July 2012 (UTC)

I've done most of your suggestions, although I've disagreed with a handful (and noted my rationale) of them. Other than that, I've fixed it up. Thanks for the review.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 04:42, 20 July 2012 (UTC)

Ok. All of which you haven't addressed are fine. Again, good work! This will be a quick pass. TBrandley 04:48, 20 July 2012 (UTC)