Talk:Hunter v Moss/GA1

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A good article, sufficiently comprehensive for an appellate case on a very narrow point of law. Just a few points as follows:

crucially, he made no statement about the other 900 shares, and did not create a trust involving them. What is "them": the 50 or the 900?
Changed to "crucially, he made no statement or trust involving the other 900 shares" Ironholds (talk) 00:05, 23 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
Hunter brought a case against Moss claiming his shares "his shares" could be clarified (eg "his 50 shares") because there are two people who "his" could refer to.
Gotcha, fixed. Ironholds (talk) 00:05, 23 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
where Colin Rimer, sitting as a deputy High Court Judge. this phrase might be missing a was.
Fixed. Ironholds (talk) 00:05, 23 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
the lack of segregation between them did not invalidate the trust. It would be useful to have a brief explanation of why segregation is important, rather than having to follow and understand the wikilink to "three certainties".
Fixed, I think; let me know what you think of the rewrite.
Re London Wine. I think the reader needs to know a bit about this case to understand why the article says the subject matter there was potentially different. We are told this in the "change to the law" section. Maybe the first para of "change to the law" could be moved between "Facts" and Judgment" - as a historical paragraph it perhaps makes more chronological sense there.
Gotcha, fixed and rearranged
who argued that they should be able to claim the wine they had paid for. Perhaps should be "bottles of wine" to link better with the next sentence.
Fixed. Ironholds (talk) 00:05, 23 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]
and the distinction between tangible and intangible. Should "and" be "so"?
Gotcha, fixed. Ironholds (talk) 00:05, 23 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Cheers --Mkativerata (talk) 18:05, 22 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, and passed. I think the amended structure helps in a few ways as we know about London Wine and segregation before we learn about the judgment.--Mkativerata (talk) 02:55, 23 August 2010 (UTC)[reply]