Talk:I Found a Way/GA1
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Reviewer: SNUGGUMS (talk · contribs) 02:48, 29 May 2021 (UTC)
Hello there! I'll begin this review by assessing the infobox and lead section. SNUGGUMS (talk / edits) 02:48, 29 May 2021 (UTC)
Infobox
[edit]- The lack of a source URL for File:Drake-bell-i-found-a-way-Cover-Art.webp is suspicious. Adding one would help prove this isn't just a fanmade cover.
- Cannot find a source, and I doubt if the song had a special cover of its own.
- Where did the recording time come from?
- Cannot find that either. Both removed.
- If March 8, 2005 is based on when the Drake & Josh soundtrack was released, then don't use that here when such an inclusion can mislead viewers into thinking "I Found a Way" had its own release independent of that and Telegraph
- Removed.
Lead
[edit]- Starting two consecutive sentences with "The song" feels repetitive.
- Using "It" for the latter.
- "promoted" feels like a stretch when (unless I'm missing something) Bell didn't appear to be advertising anything in particular when performing this track
- Rewritten.
More to come later. SNUGGUMS (talk / edits) 02:48, 29 May 2021 (UTC)
Background
[edit]- "during an interview in September 2013"..... from what I can tell, this was actually from September 2018
- Corrected.
- I'd space out "rockstar"
- Done.
- "that was memorable to the show"..... let's be more precise and say something like "that could be identified with the show" or "that could be associated with the show" since Bell said he wanted people to specifically know that Drake & Josh was on whenever they heard it as opposed to other shows or a commercial.
- Went with the former.
- "Bell said to Hartman" → "Bell told Hartman"
- Changed.
Release and lyrics
[edit]- Did this not have a release outside of the show's soundtrack or Telegraph? Either way, I'm finding February 22, 2005 in what was used for the former, not March 8.
- Corrected.
- "always" might be outdated since hearing the correct lyrics, so perhaps use "often" or "frequently" instead
- Rewritten.
I'll minimally have "Critical reception" up in my next batch of comments. SNUGGUMS (talk / edits) 15:38, 30 May 2021 (UTC)
Critical reception
[edit]- It feels repetitive to use "writing for" twice in a row for critics
- Changed.
- MTV actually ranked this track at #4 out of 17, not 12
- Corrected
- Bustle doesn't use an apostrophe for "mid 2000s"
- Removed.
The rest of this article will most likely be assessed in one go. SNUGGUMS (talk / edits) 18:31, 4 June 2021 (UTC)
Promotion and impact
[edit]- The section's current title is misleading; it doesn't discuss how the song impacted anyone/anything (others performing covers doesn't count), and see my above comments on how the song hasn't served as promotion for something (as far as I can tell). Just call it "Live performances".
- Changed.
- Try to avoid descriptions like "recent" that are subject to change (unless it's a more specific thing like "more recent" or "most recent") per WP:RELTIME. You're better off using dates for performances, and I'd add these for each of the entries listed here.
- Added and arranged the content chronologically.
Credits and personnel
[edit]- Flawless!
References
[edit]- Add Butch Hartman as an author for ref#1 along with a publish date (September 3, 2018)
- Added.
- Capitalize the "L" for TVLine
- Done.
Overall
[edit]- Prose:
Needs some copyediting
- Referencing:
Not everything is properly attributed, and a couple references have formatting issues
- Coverage:
As far as I can tell, all of the major aspects have been included
- Neutrality:
The dubious use of "impact" feels like fancruft
- Stability:
Looks good
- Media:
Could you perhaps add a photo of Michael Corcoran or Dan Schneider? Either way, I've looked more into the art work, and removed that when it can't be found anywhere legitimate and most likely was fanmade.
- Verdict:
Beginning now, I'm putting the nomination on hold for seven days. SNUGGUMS (talk / edits) 04:32, 10 June 2021 (UTC)
Hello SNUGGUMS, and thank you for the review. Shoot for the Stars has said on their talk page that they have retired, so I doubt if they will be able to address your points. I am willing to take over, but I will be unavailable until the 15th. I will try to wrap things up in the two days I will get, so please consider keeping this open until then. Thank you. — The Most Comfortable Chair 07:17, 10 June 2021 (UTC)
- Didn't see that right away, The Most Comfortable Chair. As long as somebody addresses everything before the 17th, it has a chance of passing, so keeping this open until the 15th doesn't sound like a problem. SNUGGUMS (talk / edits) 13:42, 10 June 2021 (UTC)
- SNUGGUMS, I got to spare some time today and I believe I have addressed all points. I added an image of Bell because I was not able to find Corcoran's. — The Most Comfortable Chair 16:49, 10 June 2021 (UTC)
- No qualms with File:Drake Bell 2007.jpg, and it's a good thing you could fix up the page so soon! I'm now passing the nomination. SNUGGUMS (talk / edits) 17:25, 10 June 2021 (UTC)
- SNUGGUMS, I got to spare some time today and I believe I have addressed all points. I added an image of Bell because I was not able to find Corcoran's. — The Most Comfortable Chair 16:49, 10 June 2021 (UTC)