Talk:I Hate Boys/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: IndianBio (talk · contribs) 05:53, 26 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for reviewing! Trnhgduoc2222 (talk) 09:09, 26 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Starting review. —Indian:BIO · ^{[ ChitChat ]} 01:13, 2 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

External links check, some of them are redirects, can you fix them possibly? —Indian:BIO · ^{[ ChitChat ]} 03:40, 8 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Done Here: [1] — Trnhgduoc2222 (talk) 06:00, 8 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

who also handled the production of the song. It is a pop song--> REpetition of song, try "who also handled the production of the track. "I Hate Boys" is a pop song"
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but it contains hate-driven song about ridiculing men.--> Doesn't make sense, what were you trying to say here?
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It was serviced to Australian radio on June 28, 2010 --> add a comma after 2010
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The song received mixed to favorable reviews from music critics; some critics --> The song received mixed to favorable response from music critics; some reviewers
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the gang chants --> needs an expansion or wikilink
- In the source given it says "gang chants". I think it's a group of people chant together. — Trnhgduoc2222 (talk) 11:19, 8 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Background

Initially "I Hate Boys" was supposed to be produced by Le Tigre.[1] Le Tigre’s Johanna Fateman wrote about working with Aguilera on the Le Tigre website --> Initially "I Hate Boys" was supposed to be produced by American electroclash band, Le Tigre.[1] Group member Johanna Fateman wrote about working with Aguilera on their official website
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There's nothing about the inspiration of the track?
- Nope, I can't find the suitable resources.

Composition

It contains a --> "I hate boys" contains a
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gang chant --> Explain or expand
Lyrically, it comes off like --> This seems like your opinion, and needs an author to balance it out, like "ACcording to Idolator's XXXX, lyrically "I Hate Boys"... " You have done it in the later prose, but it is mainly needed here
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I Kissed A Girl --> I Kissed a Girl
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Reception

'I Hate Boys' is a Christina track we totally back - and, --> Use en-dash here
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Again, I hate it when the critical response section becomes a QUOTEFARM. Please rephrase at least 50% of these quotes in your own prose.
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Other

Use en-dash in tracklisting and credits
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ADd the sales of the track in the charts section.
- In the source given there are no information about the sales.
Use WP:ACCESS on the release history table
- What do you mean? — Preceding unsigned comment added by Trnhgduoc2222 (talk • contribs) 11:47, 8 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

On hold for changes. Short and concise article. —Indian:BIO · ^{[ ChitChat ]} 06:41, 8 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I made the WP:ACCESS changes for you and it seems the Gaon company stopped publishing the sales of the songs, except for the current version. Passed it nevertheless. —Indian:BIO · ^{[ ChitChat ]} 02:40, 12 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]

OMG, Thanks a lot! Trnhgduoc2222 (talk) 06:37, 13 May 2013 (UTC)[reply]