Jump to content

Talk:Iyengar Yoga/GA1

Page contents not supported in other languages.
From Wikipedia, the free encyclopedia

GA Review

[edit]
GA toolbox
Reviewing

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:28, 22 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Will review. MWright96 (talk) 17:28, 22 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Many thanks, will respond promptly. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:40, 22 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:

History

[edit]
  • "B. K. S. Iyengar began teaching gradually," - clarify what exactly Iyengar was teaching
Done.
  • "The book has been described as the bible of modern yoga," - perhaps mention who described the boook as the bible of modern yoga
Done.
  • "and has been translated into at least 23 languages.[9][1]" - refs in numerical order please
Done.
  • Wikilink Pune
Done.
Done.
  • I believe the fifth paragraph in this section would be better off merged into the fourth paragraph in this section
Done.

Style

[edit]
  • "The style "emphasises precision and alignment"," - according to whom?
Attributed.
  • "i.e. moving a little in the right direction" - slightly is more formal
Edited.
  • "Postures are held for a relatively long period compared to other schools of yoga;" - clarify it is a long period of time
Done.
  • "to enjoy the benefits of many asanas" - this sounds a little informal and might be better off to be made more formal if possible
Done
  • "Postures are held for a relatively long period" - same query as the third one in this section
Done.
  • "(such as Trikonasana and Virabhadrasana[18])," - the reference would be better off placed at the end of the comma
Done.
  • Trikonasana should not be linked twice in close succession
Fixed.
  • Delink Mary Dunn since she is already linked in the previous section
Done.

Training, certification, and standards

[edit]
  • "and updated its ethics standards (based on the Yamas and Niyamas in the Yoga Sutras of Patanjali)" - don't think the parentheses are appropriate here
Removed.

References

[edit]
  • Reference 4 should include the page number that states where the information is located
This is intentionally citing the whole book, to fit the context of that sentence.
  • Reference 19 is missing the date it was published
Added.
  • Reference 26 should mention the date it was published and the author who wrote the source
Added.
  • References 27 & 28 should mention the date the sources were accessed
Added.

Overall the main issues are with the prose and some fields missing from a few of the references. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 18:32, 22 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]

MWright96 All done to date. Chiswick Chap (talk) 21:00, 22 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 06:32, 23 March 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Retrieved from "https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Talk:Iyengar_Yoga/GA1&oldid=946928749"