Talk:Józef Światło/GA1

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk) 20:08, 4 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

In the first sentence of Biography it says that he was born as "Izaak Fleischfarb", but the lead says "Izak Fleischfarb"; which one is correct? Also, fix that contradicting error after you find the right one.
In the first paragraph of Biography, there are some specific dates (or years) that are don't stated and it would be important to know for that event. Here is chiefly what I am talking about:
- "Taken prisoner by the Germans, he escaped, only to be taken prisoner by the Red Army" - What year(s) was this?
- "It was also in that period that he married Justyna Światło and changed his name to a more Polish-sounding one, Światło" - If there was a specific date (or year) mentioned, then you would know when "that period" was.
"Herman would be secretly imprisoned for five years, until the information on him was leaked to the West." - How specifically was the information "leaked to the West", and more specifically, which country (or countries) got this information; don't just say simply "the West", because the according to the "Western world" article, that could refer to the Americas, Europe, Australia, New Zealand, and/or Israel.
"American military authorities transported Światło to Frankfurt and by Christmas Światło had been flown to Washington, D.C.," - Was this Frankfurt, Germany, or Frankfurt, Kentucky, because it makes it sound like it could be the United States since it later says Washington, D.C.; please clarified that.
"the Polish Press Agency on 25 October," - Which year was this?
"Światło took place on 28 September." - Same issue.
Write a note after "Radio Free Europe" that it is the words for the acronym RFE (e.g. Radio Free Europe (RFE)), since it seems in the second paragraph that you have to figure out for yourself what it stands for.
Reference #1 is a "dead link".
References numbers 3, 4, 5, and 6 are not in "cite web" format.
Words should not be in all capitalized letters in references; reference #5 has "FROM THAW TO RESTORATION: A CHRONOLOGY".
Some of the reference have specific publication dates; those references are number 4, 8, and 6.
There is inconsistency on the accessdates, like there is 2006-10-26 and 18-12-2008; also, some of the accessates should be updated to more recent dates, like 2011-04-04.

"Taken prisoner by the Germans..." I added "that year" to the preceding sentence mentioning the German invasion. All of those events occurred in September '39, although no source gives the exact date of him being taken prisoner by the Soviets (and it is not beyond the realm of possibility this occurred in October or November, but sources don't say).
Added date of marriage.
Clarified that info on Herman was revelead by Swiatlo himself (upon his defection).
The source does not specify which Frankfurt, but I'd assume it refers to the German city. If the writer would be referring to the mostly unknown American one, I'd assume it would've been clarified (also, the writer is not an American, so...)
Years added.
RFE tied.
Ref 1 de-roted.
Is cite-web a requirement now? Do you know if there is some automatization tool? I use cite book thanks to this, but I hate manually typing all those cite templates...
Cap issue fixed.
I may be missing something, because I don't know what you mean by "Some of the reference have specific publication dates; those references are number 4, 8, and 6." (or rather, what would you like me to do?)
I will try to fix the accessdates now. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| talk} 21:56, 6 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]

It appears as if you have address and/or fixed most the issues I had with passing the article. Because of that, I will now pass this article according to the GA criteria. BTW, sorry it took me so long to get back to you. Congratulations,--12george1 (talk) 00:02, 11 April 2011 (UTC)[reply]