Talk:Jett Howard/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 05:42, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I shall conduct my review of this article tomorrow (2 August UTC). ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 05:42, 1 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

There we go! On hold for now; exceptional work on the lead BTW, for which I could not find any issues. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 17:37, 2 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

I am now happy to pass this article for GA status per the changes implemented. Congrats! ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 02:27, 14 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Copyvio check

Earwig says good to go.

File(s)

Both images are relevant, of acceptable quality and copyright-free; taken from Flickr (both CC BY-SA) and uploaded to Commons under the correct attribution. Really cool to see that WP has these, as well!

Prose

In § High school career, recommend opening with his full name since it is his first mention in the body.
- Ok.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:22, 8 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
I would wikilink freshman and sophomore for unfamiliar readers.
- I've never linked those terms and never noticed them linked.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:23, 8 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  - Fair enough! As a non-American I had never heard of those terms until reading this. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 02:22, 14 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Could Michigan Wolverine be wikilinked to somewhere?
- I have restored the WP:LEAD linkage.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:26, 8 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"Despite the loss Paul Biancardi" – recommend a comma here.
- Thx.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:48, 8 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"described Howard as "best shooter on the floor"." – should it not start with the before the quotation?
- Yes.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:50, 8 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"By May 2022" – just May since 2022 was mentioned in the last sentence.
- Thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:51, 8 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
Wikilink MVP to most valuable player.
- OK.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:54, 8 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"Allen Iverson and" – should it not be just Iverson here since he is already mentioned and wikilinked earlier in the body?
- yes.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:55, 8 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"Despite having a major college basketball head coach for a father" – mention Juwan here and unlink his mention in § Personal life.
- Thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:14, 8 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"(Gregg Glenn, Dug McDaniel and Tarris Reed Jr.)" – is listing these people really notable?
- I've done a lot of college basketball players. I often mention their signing class. This case seems strange because none of the others is yet a notable professional player. Although Howard may be the only NBAer among his signing class, the others may become notable players (or coaches) with WP bios and thus bluelinked. Then this won't seem so strange.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:59, 8 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
  - Ah, I see. ツ LunaEatsTuna (💬)— 02:22, 14 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
"posted 21, on" – I do not believe there should be a comma here? Forgive me if this is standard in American English though, which I do not speak.
- You are correct.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:01, 8 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]
For the last sentence in the section, how about making it "that Michigan has had an All-Freshman honoree after Moussa Diabaté, Hunter Dickinson, Franz Wagner and Ignas Brazdeikis"? It looks a bit more formal and flows better.
- OK.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 05:04, 8 August 2023 (UTC)[reply]

Refs

Passes spotcheck on refs 3, 9, 16, 21 and 32.

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