Talk:Jordan Poole/GA1
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 07:58, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
Reviewing this as part of a GA sweep. Comments will appear soon. MWright96 (talk) 07:58, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
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- It is broad in its coverage.
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- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
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- It is stable.
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- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
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Lead
[edit]- "Then he transferred to play his senior season for La Lumiere School in La Porte, Indiana" - The, he and a period is missing from this sentence
- done.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:17, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
- "He is best known for a game-winning buzzer beater three point shot"- missing the hyphen in three point
- done.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:17, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
High school career
[edit]- "On October 23, 2015, four-star recruit Jordan Poole" - refering him by his surname is sufficient enough in this instance
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:19, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
- "By the time Poole signed his National Letter of Intent to Michigan" - signed his National Letter of Intent to play college basketball for Michigan
- Thanks.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:20, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
- Link steal, rebound and assist too Steal (basketball), Rebound (basketball) and Assist (basketball), respectively
- Done.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:23, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
- " The 13 points included a shot clock buzzer beater" - Buzzer beater needs to be linked
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:26, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
College career
[edit]- Ensure that consistency is maintained in whether you hypenate three point goal/shot or not
- Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:29, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
- "Michigan defeated Indiana 69–55 in its 2017–18 Big Ten conference season opener with Jordan Poole" - Just mentioning him by his surname is sufficient enough
- O.K.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:31, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
- "with a team-high and career-high 19 points in his Big Ten debut." - team and career-high
- Done.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:32, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
- "Poole once made a game-tying three-point shot" - link three-point shot
- It is already linked above.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:33, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
- "after home gym visit" - after a home gym visit
- Thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:51, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
- "as the game was the championship game of the 2018 Big Ten Conference Men's Basketball Tournament," - as they were playing in
- I tried something else.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:54, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
- "even though Poole went cold during the 4-game run," - "went cold" sounds like unencyclopedic language which will need rewriting
- Fixed.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:54, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
- "In the March 31, 2018 national semifinal against Loyola–Chicago Poole had seven points, including the free throws that gave the team the lead for good" - an unassailable lead
- I don't like the term "unassailable" so I tried something else.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 17:56, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
That is all from my end. You've got the quibbles listed above to sort out. MWright96 (talk) 13:28, 14 April 2018 (UTC)
- @TonyTheTiger: I am more than happy with the changes you have made and I can promote this to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 07:08, 16 April 2018 (UTC)