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Reviewer: Pi.1415926535 (talk · contribs) 21:06, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
I'll take this review. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 21:06, 9 November 2023 (UTC)
- Quite close already. Just a few copyedits and bits of context, and some possible images to add. Placing on hold so you have time to work. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 00:51, 10 November 2023 (UTC)
- @Pi.1415926535: Some sludge eluded me here, for sure. I think I was able to address every other issue and a redundant section I meant to remove, too! Should be ready for you to take a look. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 02:28, 10 November 2023 (UTC)
- @Sammi Brie: Looks good - happy to pass it. I would add the 39-hours-per-week tidbit to the news section so that it's not just in the lede (MOS:LEADREL is relevant), but that's not worth holding GA up over. Nice work. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 05:35, 10 November 2023 (UTC)
- @Pi.1415926535: Some sludge eluded me here, for sure. I think I was able to address every other issue and a redundant section I meant to remove, too! Should be ready for you to take a look. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 02:28, 10 November 2023 (UTC)
Infobox and lede
[edit]- I don't see a need for the age of the station; that only seems relevant for recent/ongoing events.
- The lede is a bit thin. Maybe add a sentence about the news operation, and expand the history paragraph by 1-2 sentences?
- Done. Their public file has a list of all their regular newscasts, so I was able to add an hours-a-week total which isn't always possible. I don't have a lot of info about their news op since, like, 2010, in the article, so this helps.
History
[edit]- Is it possible to provide a sentence of context (eg
Due to X and Y, the FCC placed a moratorium on new television stations from 19xx to 19yy
) and/or wikilink to another article that covers that? - Might be worth clarifying that the radio stations applied for television channels.
- Wikilink coaxial cable
- The sentence beginning
ABC programs moved...
should probably be split in two. - Alvarado isn't mentioned until it's sold. Seems like it should be named in the previous paragraph.
- The paragraph beginning
In late June...
is very short; perhaps merge it with the next paragraph. - Split the run-on sentence beginning
The FCC approved in November 1972...
- "golden age" is puffery (unless the sources specifically call it that) and should be replaced with more neutral wording.
- Similarly, "particularly remarkable" needs to be replaced.
- Another
The station was acquired by H&C...
- another that needs split hard-core porn
→hardcore pornography
This allowed KVOA to join...
: This sentence is weirdly worded - "allowed" is not the right choice of word - and the mentions of the other stations aren't in the source. Given that the other incidents were 20 years prior, I think you can cut this sentence entirely.- Yeah, that sentence was a real leftover. And not a good one. This area needed a little more buffing.
- Remove "Also" in the final sentence.
News operation
[edit]- The first two paragraphs can be combined. (No change to the sentences needed.)
- Remove comma after "Cox cable"
Other
[edit]- Some free images from flickr that would be good to illustrate the article: news vehicle and Mount Bigelow antennas. (I think KVOA is the far right antenna.) I can transfer them from flickr if you need.
Overall
[edit]- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- a (reference section): b (inline citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail: