Talk:Launch Party/GA1

GA Review

Looking good, with just a few suggestions:

• Unbold quotes around episode title.
• Dwight Schrute (Rainn Wilson) decides to compete against the Web site -- use "website" to keep consistency.
• When it is his turn to appear at the party via webcam -- maybe make it clear here that this is the main Dunder Mifflin party, not the Scranton party.

Okay, how about now? --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)

• Eventually Michael has an epiphany about the fact that he's committed a crime -- how about "Eventually Michael has an epiphany, realizing that he has committed a crime"?

Changed --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)

• She doesn't answer, but stifles a smile -- "does not".

Changed --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)

• According to Jennifer Celotta, the idea for the intro scene came -- firstly, "intro" isn't really an encyclopedic word, and secondly, readers who haven't seen the episode have no idea what happens in the scene. Maybe give a brief description.

Changed --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)

• were arguing about whether it will ever hit the corner -- "whether it would".

Changed --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)

• Maybe link five o'clock shadow for those who aren't familiar with the term.

Linked --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)

• Also link Creed.

Done --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)

• a 8% Share -- "an".

Fixed --Mr.crabby ''''' (Talk) 18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)

Otherwise, I think we're all good. You've got seven days to make changes, so good luck! —97198 talk 02:19, 2 August 2008 (UTC)

Everything's good; the only issue still standing is the bold quotation marks (I couldn't find that in writing anywhere but it's definitely a rule of thumb I'm aware of) but I'll fix that myself in a minute, right after I pass the article :) —97198 talk 07:52, 3 August 2008 (UTC)