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Reviewer: Xtzou (Talk) 21:11, 9 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hi, I will list some comments below.

Lead

  • The is from the second para in the lead: "Life Is Peachy features Korn covering the song "Low Rider," a song and single by War, appearing on their Why Can't We Be Friends? album, as well as covering "Wicked" by Ice Cube." I don't quite understand the sentence. You are saying that Life Is Peachy... featured Korn covering "Low Rider" which is a song and a single by War that appears on their Why Can't We Be Friends? album? If this is what you are saying, why is it important enough to put this in the lead?
  • What is meant by a "hidden track"? How was it hidden?
  • Hidden tracks are songs that the is meant to suprise the listener, because it is not listed on the tracklist. With a fairly self explanatory name and a link, I don't think going into further depth is necessary. CrowzRSA 23:42, 9 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]
  • There should be information on the general and critical reception of the album in the lead.

Background

  • This section should start with the date to orient the reader. e.g. "After playing at a few gigs with Deftones in California, United States, Korn went back to the studio to start recording Life Is Peachy in 1996 (or whatever date it was that they went back into the studio).
  • Why are events that happened after the recording, e.g. in 1997 and 2004, in the "Background" section?
  • The second paragraph is very confusing as it seems to be referring to tracks that were not part of this album. Also, A.D.I.D.A.S. should be preceded by "the single" or something to identity it.

Promotions

  • Their second single, "A.D.I.D.A.S." was released March 4, 1997. This single was already mentioned in the previous section. These two references could be combined in one place so it is easier for the reader to follow.
  • Also, usually only the first mention is linked.
  • Instead of having four short paragraphs, it would help the article to flow and reduce the chopiness to combine some paragraphs.
  • The long quote might be better in a quote box.

(comments ... to be continued.) Xtzou (Talk) 21:11, 9 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

  • (continuing the comments)
  • General comment: Amazon.com is not a reliable source for much of anything in the encyclopaedia. You will need to replace most, if not all, of those. (I have not looked specifically at each one.)

Lead

Do you mean something like, Following the success of their 1994 self-titled debut, Korn created a second double platinum in the United States, certified by the Recording Industry Association of America (RIAA).
  • Why are the two specific covers important enough to mention in the lead?
  • "Life Is Peachy features Korn covering the song "Low Rider" by War, as well as covering "Wicked" by Ice Cube. The album features themes social encounters and revenge." Here, there is repetition as "features" is used in two sentences in a row, so the wording needs to be varied.

Production and recordings

  • Too many repetitions of "release", so the wording needs to be more varied. "The first issue was released under Immortal/Epic, and was released October 15, 1996. The second issue, released in 2001, was released under Sony Music Entertainment. The 2004 release was released through Divine Records, and was in LP/vinyl format."
  • Repetitious wording: "Other versions include remixes song featured on their 1994 debut album.[7] Other versions include the songs featured on their self titled album."
  • "No Place to Hide" was the album's first promotional single. The single features the song "Proud," a song that was previously unreleased." - This belongs under Promotion below. All the promotional releases should be together.

Promotion

  • The first para is repetitious and events and not ordered according to a time sequence:

After Korn finished recording Life Is Peachy, they began touring in the Sick of it All Tour, Beginning in January 1995, to March 1995.[9] Korn released a promtional disc called Life Is Peachy Tour Sampler, with Incubus and The Urge. The album featured 3 tracks, "Chi" (live) by Korn, "All Washed Up" (live) by The Urge, and "Hilikus" (live) by Incubus. The promo was released after Life Is Peachy, and lasts for twelve minutes and seventeen seconds.[10] Following the Sick of it All Tour, Korn joined the Danzig 4 Tour, including Danzig and Marilyn Manson. The tour lasted 3 months[9] and was preceding with the group touring with Megadeth, where they played thirty-five-hundred to five thousand venue.[11] They toured with Megadeth, Fear Factory, and Flotsam and Jetsam. All of this happened in the summer of 1995. Lead vocalist Jonathan Davis introduced the bagpipes while performing live (however many people there did not like this).

  • " The album featured 3 tracks, "Chi" (live) by Korn, "All Washed Up" (live) by The Urge, and "Hilikus" (live) by Incubus." This should not be under Promotion as it has to do with the album sequencing.
  • " One of Korn's first concert dates was in London, where they performed in Nottingham." What is meant here, as Nottingham is not in London.
  • 'However, there was conflict between Korn's bassist Fieldy and someone from "tech."' What does this mean and what were the results? Why is this important enough to mention here?
  • "In 1997, Korn toured solo, and headlined in places they had performed in with Megadeth. The shows that Korn headlines were often sold out." - Repetition of "headline".
  • Also, this paragraph is just a list of tours without any indication of the impact of the tours or their success. And too much repetitious use of the word "tour".

Lyrical themes

Xtzou (Talk) 18:52, 10 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

More comments

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality:
    B. MoS compliance:
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources:
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused:
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
    B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail: Pass!

Congratulations! Xtzou (Talk) 16:17, 16 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

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