Talk:Loin Like a Hunting Flame/GA1
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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 15:28, 1 March 2012 (UTC)
Only a few small issues:
*Plot: "The Millennium Group, a private investigative firm, have despatched offender profilers Frank Black (Lance Henriksen) and Maureen Murphy (Harriet Sansom Harris) to aid the police investigation." Reword into "The Millennium Group, a private investigative firm, despatches offender profilers Frank Black (Lance Henriksen) and Maureen Murphy (Harriet Sansom Harris) to aid the police investigation."
*Plot: What is an "off-license" I think that is a British slang term, but it probably shouldn't be used in an American episode article.
*Plot: "with Black believing that the killer not only has access to it through his occupation but is likely to consume it himself while committing his crimes in order to readily act on his sexual fantasies" Rewrite to "with Black believing that the killer not only has access to it through his occupation but is likely consuming it himself while committing his crimes in order to readily act on his sexual fantasies."
On hold for seven days to fix. BTW, reading these Millennium articles is making me depressed. ;) Sounds like a pretty grim show!--Gen. Quon (talk) 17:57, 1 March 2012 (UTC)
- Oh, man, if you think that's depressing, try watching them. When the show worked it really worked ("522666", "Dead Letters", Goodbye Charlie" and "Jose Chung's Doomsday Device" spring to mind) but mostly it was pretty horrible in every sense of the word. Worth a watch once though, just to see what they managed to get away with. Have made the changes you've suggested. Thanks for the review! GRAPPLE X 20:52, 1 March 2012 (UTC)